My Lyrics , Hot or Not?

Jmingledude · 02-18-2009, 10:41 AM

Let me know what ya think.

Ill always have a tear in my eye whatcha got left boy you aint got nothin
Never forget for the way that he died i took that from you mad wanna start somethin?
Racists and haters always be spittin on him
But ill be there always pouring bullets on 'em

I wake up, yep a nigga still broke
no car, no prospects yep a nigga a joke
in my hood, i see niggas rollin on dubs
gucci clothes, rolex, faces all smug
I wish i had that, damn i wish that
know what i gotta do, but that involes staying strapped with the mac
but that way i could get that new Mercedes
get that in black, shit would be crazy
so now i just gotta decide what im gon do
get rich, or be a broke bitch who cant buy food.

Im on top of my game
you niggas is tame
momma dont love ya
you got nobody to blame
all ya shit sound the same
for me next, it gotta be fame
get in my way ill burn with the flame
put a couple holes in ya brain
you know what im sayin?
for me, i aint droppin no names
i made you rich
bitch you cant complain

Your in the deep end now nigga
hope yous a strong swimmer
im fishing for fake niggas,
I eat em' for dinner

My words are bullets, my ideas are bombs
If i cant get to you, then ill hittin up ya mom
So nigga i suggest that you be real quiet
Before I get real mad and start a fucking riot
Come out, Come out nigga wherever you are
thought yousa gangster, your supposed to be hard

I walked past, I saw you on the other side of the glass
you put ya head down so fast,i thought you got whiplash.
see pussy boy i could kill ya wit my knife man
but while im here ill do it with the mic man
i dont give fuck man pay up ya debts
or ill get straight to the killin, no death threats

Pussy Pussy boy try me some more
Introduce you to my friend Mr. Guns Galore
keep talkin fool give me more anger
catcha in the street ill pull out my banger
stick it in ya face like 'hello stranger'
take out ya whole crew and any remainers
nigga im shameless
police be askin but suspects remain nameless

I wrote these in 20 mins, just looikng for a lttle feedback.thanks.

~Menace~ · 02-19-2009, 11:19 PM

hit up joe budden for a collab

KING BHOB · 02-20-2009, 02:38 AM

i feel no heat coming from my screen....

i think thatll speak for itself.

Witty Qwan · 02-20-2009, 01:42 PM

suppose to post in the freestyle section...

KING BHOB · 02-20-2009, 05:39 PM

You Aint The Baaaawwwwssssss

Shut Up

Shogun · 02-20-2009, 05:55 PM

Hobos put your lyrics in steel barrels & gather round.

Hot fiyah bro.

Rollo · 02-21-2009, 04:24 AM

Meh...

If you aren't going to have one liners or complex rhymes, at least have a story to tell. One that is unique and creative, because this here is generic.

I'm not saying this as a diss but, open your mind a little bit.
It's gotta be relevant but you can be anti-mainstream cookie cutter bull shit and not fall into some corn ball uncreative counter culture.

Jmingledude · 02-23-2009, 03:04 PM

Alright guys thanks, ill take any advice and pointers so thanks.

Yulkmn · 02-24-2009, 04:50 PM

no its nt warming

02-18-2009, 10:41 AM	#1
Jmingledude Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 129 Repped: 3 Repped 22 Times in 15 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 9 Times in 8 Posts	My Lyrics , Hot or Not? My Lyrics , Hot or Not? Let me know what ya think. Ill always have a tear in my eye whatcha got left boy you aint got nothin Never forget for the way that he died i took that from you mad wanna start somethin? Racists and haters always be spittin on him But ill be there always pouring bullets on 'em I wake up, yep a nigga still broke no car, no prospects yep a nigga a joke in my hood, i see niggas rollin on dubs gucci clothes, rolex, faces all smug I wish i had that, damn i wish that know what i gotta do, but that involes staying strapped with the mac but that way i could get that new Mercedes get that in black, shit would be crazy so now i just gotta decide what im gon do get rich, or be a broke bitch who cant buy food. Im on top of my game you niggas is tame momma dont love ya you got nobody to blame all ya shit sound the same for me next, it gotta be fame get in my way ill burn with the flame put a couple holes in ya brain you know what im sayin? for me, i aint droppin no names i made you rich bitch you cant complain Your in the deep end now nigga hope yous a strong swimmer im fishing for fake niggas, I eat em' for dinner My words are bullets, my ideas are bombs If i cant get to you, then ill hittin up ya mom So nigga i suggest that you be real quiet Before I get real mad and start a fucking riot Come out, Come out nigga wherever you are thought yousa gangster, your supposed to be hard I walked past, I saw you on the other side of the glass you put ya head down so fast,i thought you got whiplash. see pussy boy i could kill ya wit my knife man but while im here ill do it with the mic man i dont give fuck man pay up ya debts or ill get straight to the killin, no death threats Pussy Pussy boy try me some more Introduce you to my friend Mr. Guns Galore keep talkin fool give me more anger catcha in the street ill pull out my banger stick it in ya face like 'hello stranger' take out ya whole crew and any remainers nigga im shameless police be askin but suspects remain nameless I wrote these in 20 mins, just looikng for a lttle feedback.thanks. Last edited by Jmingledude; 02-18-2009 at 05:42 PM.

02-19-2009, 11:19 PM	#2
~Menace~ Lonnel- Virgin Join Date: May 2006 Location: AZ ho Posts: 1,753 Repped: 116 Repped 38 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	hit up joe budden for a collab __________________ William Shaftner

02-20-2009, 02:38 AM	#3
KING BHOB P.O.L.O/Attention:Deficit Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: East Side Pennsylvania Posts: 2,185 Repped: 0 Repped 590 Times in 201 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 25 Times in 20 Posts	i feel no heat coming from my screen.... i think thatll speak for itself. __________________ >\|>\|>\|> http://twitter.com/KingBhob <\|<\|<\|< >>>>>>>LIFE

02-20-2009, 05:39 PM	#5
KING BHOB P.O.L.O/Attention:Deficit Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: East Side Pennsylvania Posts: 2,185 Repped: 0 Repped 590 Times in 201 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 25 Times in 20 Posts	You Aint The Baaaawwwwssssss Shut Up __________________ >\|>\|>\|> http://twitter.com/KingBhob <\|<\|<\|< >>>>>>>LIFE

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02-20-2009, 01:42 PM	#4
Witty Qwan # Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: My crib Posts: 3,041 Repped: 155 Repped 472 Times in 303 Posts Neg Reps: 21 Neg Repped at 80 Times in 74 Posts	suppose to post in the freestyle section...

02-20-2009, 05:55 PM	#6
Shogun Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 718 Repped: 0 Repped 13 Times in 12 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	Hobos put your lyrics in steel barrels & gather round. Hot fiyah bro.

02-21-2009, 04:24 AM	#7
Rollo Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: OH Posts: 34 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 1 Post	Meh... If you aren't going to have one liners or complex rhymes, at least have a story to tell. One that is unique and creative, because this here is generic. I'm not saying this as a diss but, open your mind a little bit. It's gotta be relevant but you can be anti-mainstream cookie cutter bull shit and not fall into some corn ball uncreative counter culture.

02-23-2009, 03:04 PM	#8
Jmingledude Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 129 Repped: 3 Repped 22 Times in 15 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 9 Times in 8 Posts	Alright guys thanks, ill take any advice and pointers so thanks.

02-24-2009, 04:50 PM	#9
Yulkmn Join Date: Jul 2007 Posts: 2 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	no its nt warming