Yo, I need help with beef!

Ginga_Bread_Man · 02-08-2009, 02:27 AM

I just got some beef from some haters I don't even know. All I'm asking is for you to look over what I got so far for their candy asses. These dudes called me up about something I wrote on facebook like 4 months ago, saying it was weak. I would it admit, it wasn't my best, but still. Please give me constructive criticism on what I have in response so far.

I must be doing something right for you to hate
Because people only go after what they can't duplicate
Oh, so you wanna battle
I'll give you live beef like cattle
I spit ill lyrics
that when you hear it
you will become rattled
And I never heard of you, just another stepping stone
Call me Hannibal the Cannibal because I'll eat you up on the microphone
And I'll call you dudes ICP
Because you clowns are insane steppin to me
It's definite defeat
Like Miami, I bring the Heat
I consider you a piece of meat
Another wack rapper I can eat
And I'm Rocky Marciano
Knocking out dudes who can't follow
Making you go sleepy like hollow
You can't spit so you must swallow
Now fucking with a dude who has a degree in beef
Is like having a stuttering problem and trying to do a speech

That is what I have so far, composed it all in half a day. I don't know these dudes but if they come out the woodwork, I'll have something for them. Just fire away, I wannna hear what you have to say.

youngking187 · 02-08-2009, 02:49 AM

this shit rocks dude
like ohhhhh yeaahhhh!!!!
those dudes are totally finished
with this one dude..u here me mayneee???
like yeaaa man!!..this gots to be the coolest..

mcduffee420 · 02-08-2009, 09:49 AM

dude no matter if its tight or not there gonna say it sucks thats just the way it is haaaaaatttteeeerrrrrrzzzzzz are bitches

mcduffee420 · 02-08-2009, 09:50 AM

ha your from mn to thats tight

Young Mic · 02-08-2009, 12:57 PM

That was pretty decent if you ask me

balling90 · 02-10-2009, 02:12 AM

lol @ this guy needing help for his beef. pussy ass nigga

mcduffee420 · 02-10-2009, 03:08 AM

bawling nine*tee is just another hater forget this bitch... anime? gay! avatar, name. and picture, lame ass fatass pussy the size of pamelas and breasts 3 d's faggit bawling 90 can suck a dick as big as his pussy is deep

Haterz · 02-10-2009, 09:03 AM

try to get personals on whoever....use punchez and get creative

Shogun · 02-10-2009, 01:41 PM

God this is pathetic. Get a life.

Ginga_Bread_Man · 03-28-2009, 12:06 AM

R u serious shogun? U r telling me to get a life when u have 300 more posts than me on here and I've been on here longer. Ridiculous.

scool · 03-28-2009, 11:19 AM

I'm sorry but this shit was wack as fuck

really... "beef like cattle" ... lmfao

just keeping it real man, not hating... go back to the lab and come up with harder shit

TheRealProtege · 03-28-2009, 09:44 PM

everyone thinks they a rapper nowdays...

no hate i THINK EVERYONE started out like this at the beginning..

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 03-28-2009, 09:50 PM

Pull the Trigger..

KING BHOB · 03-29-2009, 04:15 PM

Jump Out The Window With This One.

(windooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooowwwwww)

MagicFX · 03-31-2009, 02:35 PM

here's the deal, you have some alright lines dude, but you aren't setting them up right.

you should work on structure and set ups for punchlines. seemed to me you just went one filler line after another.

I'm not trying to be a hater, but if you want to win some battles, you are going to need more than this.

hit me on PM I'll hepl you out some more if you want... most these dudes who are in here talkin shit probably can't spit a decent bar either.

let me know.

Kidss · 06-05-2009, 03:47 PM

it's alright but you need to make it more angry

CreAtive · 06-05-2009, 04:14 PM

Young Mic · 06-06-2009, 03:12 AM

Lmao @ "make it more angry"

Baller · 06-06-2009, 05:55 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kidss

it's alright but you need to make it more angry

Why would u bump this old ass thread? Idiot...

02-08-2009, 02:27 AM	#1
Ginga_Bread_Man Poet Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Winona, Mn Posts: 144 Repped: 5 Repped 4 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Yo, I need help with beef! Yo, I need help with beef! I just got some beef from some haters I don't even know. All I'm asking is for you to look over what I got so far for their candy asses. These dudes called me up about something I wrote on facebook like 4 months ago, saying it was weak. I would it admit, it wasn't my best, but still. Please give me constructive criticism on what I have in response so far. I must be doing something right for you to hate Because people only go after what they can't duplicate Oh, so you wanna battle I'll give you live beef like cattle I spit ill lyrics that when you hear it you will become rattled And I never heard of you, just another stepping stone Call me Hannibal the Cannibal because I'll eat you up on the microphone And I'll call you dudes ICP Because you clowns are insane steppin to me It's definite defeat Like Miami, I bring the Heat I consider you a piece of meat Another wack rapper I can eat And I'm Rocky Marciano Knocking out dudes who can't follow Making you go sleepy like hollow You can't spit so you must swallow Now fucking with a dude who has a degree in beef Is like having a stuttering problem and trying to do a speech That is what I have so far, composed it all in half a day. I don't know these dudes but if they come out the woodwork, I'll have something for them. Just fire away, I wannna hear what you have to say. __________________ "Why don't you just take a step back/and stop telling me to chillax/all I'm sayin' is, Soulja Boy is wack/and I can beat his fuckin' ass/because he's so skinny, not even his beats are fat"-GBM

02-08-2009, 02:49 AM	#2
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,517 Repped: 305 Repped 607 Times in 143 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	this shit rocks dude like ohhhhh yeaahhhh!!!! those dudes are totally finished with this one dude..u here me mayneee??? like yeaaa man!!..this gots to be the coolest.. __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

02-08-2009, 12:57 PM	#5
Young Mic 9 Elements Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Tbilisi Posts: 1,091 Repped: 181 Repped 175 Times in 84 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 23 Times in 15 Posts	That was pretty decent if you ask me __________________ myspace.com/youngmiconline

02-10-2009, 02:12 AM	#6
balling90 AKA account canceler Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Maine Posts: 172 Repped: 2 Repped 14 Times in 11 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 3 Posts	lol @ this guy needing help for his beef. pussy ass nigga __________________ "with no concentration im better than Adolf"-Joell Ortiz

03-28-2009, 12:06 AM	#10
Ginga_Bread_Man Poet Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Winona, Mn Posts: 144 Repped: 5 Repped 4 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	R u serious shogun? U r telling me to get a life when u have 300 more posts than me on here and I've been on here longer. Ridiculous. __________________ "Why don't you just take a step back/and stop telling me to chillax/all I'm sayin' is, Soulja Boy is wack/and I can beat his fuckin' ass/because he's so skinny, not even his beats are fat"-GBM

02-08-2009, 09:49 AM	#3
mcduffee420 Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: minnesota_st.cloud Posts: 686 Repped: 169 Repped 81 Times in 40 Posts Neg Reps: 10 Neg Repped at 31 Times in 22 Posts	dude no matter if its tight or not there gonna say it sucks thats just the way it is haaaaaatttteeeerrrrrrzzzzzz are bitches

02-08-2009, 09:50 AM	#4
mcduffee420 Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: minnesota_st.cloud Posts: 686 Repped: 169 Repped 81 Times in 40 Posts Neg Reps: 10 Neg Repped at 31 Times in 22 Posts	ha your from mn to thats tight

02-10-2009, 03:08 AM	#7
mcduffee420 Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: minnesota_st.cloud Posts: 686 Repped: 169 Repped 81 Times in 40 Posts Neg Reps: 10 Neg Repped at 31 Times in 22 Posts	bawling nine*tee is just another hater forget this bitch... anime? gay! avatar, name. and picture, lame ass fatass pussy the size of pamelas and breasts 3 d's faggit bawling 90 can suck a dick as big as his pussy is deep

02-10-2009, 09:03 AM	#8
Haterz Join Date: May 2007 Location: NY/NC Posts: 729 Repped: 24 Repped 68 Times in 32 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 11 Times in 10 Posts	try to get personals on whoever....use punchez and get creative

02-10-2009, 01:41 PM	#9
Shogun Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 718 Repped: 0 Repped 13 Times in 12 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	God this is pathetic. Get a life.

03-28-2009, 11:19 AM	#11
scool Banned Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: DA CHAT SEXHUN THRONE MAFUCCA.. DEEBO WUDDUP?? Posts: 20,134 Repped: 1,328 Repped 2,389 Times in 867 Posts Neg Reps: 267 Neg Repped at 488 Times in 326 Posts	I'm sorry but this shit was wack as fuck really... "beef like cattle" ... lmfao just keeping it real man, not hating... go back to the lab and come up with harder shit

03-28-2009, 09:44 PM	#12
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	everyone thinks they a rapper nowdays... no hate i THINK EVERYONE started out like this at the beginning.. __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

03-28-2009, 09:50 PM	#13
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,900 Repped: 79 Repped 310 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Pull the Trigger.. __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

03-29-2009, 04:15 PM	#14
KING BHOB P.O.L.O/Attention:Deficit Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: East Side Pennsylvania Posts: 2,189 Repped: 0 Repped 590 Times in 201 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 25 Times in 20 Posts	Jump Out The Window With This One. (windooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooowwwwww) __________________ >\|>\|>\|> http://twitter.com/KingBhob <\|<\|<\|< >>>>>>>LIFE

03-31-2009, 02:35 PM	#15
MagicFX Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: MN Posts: 24 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	here's the deal, you have some alright lines dude, but you aren't setting them up right. you should work on structure and set ups for punchlines. seemed to me you just went one filler line after another. I'm not trying to be a hater, but if you want to win some battles, you are going to need more than this. hit me on PM I'll hepl you out some more if you want... most these dudes who are in here talkin shit probably can't spit a decent bar either. let me know.

06-05-2009, 03:47 PM	#16
Kidss Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Bloomington Posts: 380 Repped: 0 Repped 34 Times in 26 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	it's alright but you need to make it more angry

06-05-2009, 04:14 PM	#17
CreAtive Banned Join Date: May 2009 Location: Cali Posts: 391 Repped: 47 Repped 73 Times in 48 Posts Neg Reps: 49 Neg Repped at 136 Times in 68 Posts

06-06-2009, 03:12 AM	#18
Young Mic 9 Elements Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Tbilisi Posts: 1,091 Repped: 181 Repped 175 Times in 84 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 23 Times in 15 Posts	Lmao @ "make it more angry" __________________ myspace.com/youngmiconline

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