my first rhyme in here

jaephantom · 09-30-2006, 03:50 PM

whats good im just starting out and i want to give this shit a try i know i aint up there like some of the rappers in hear but i want to give it a shot so imma try to get on some real shit in society

it seems like love only turns into lust/
were told to respect authority but yet they can repsect us/

guess its ture when they say life aint fair/
murder theift rape, from harm even babies aint spared

seems like in times of need we ask god but he gives us the sholder that cold/
so we try to gain to world by selling our very soul/

music corrupting mind of the kids so there quick to throw fists/
talking about how they love the war but there too scared to enlist/

seems like life we dont saver it/
so mothers over there sons casket asking the lord why like jadakiss/

Sniper Locs · 09-30-2006, 03:56 PM

you got potential duke

stay up and keep em comin

check my new "One Night Stand"

jaephantom · 09-30-2006, 03:56 PM

ight will do

XxCritikalxX · 10-01-2006, 12:54 AM

nice for a first

09-30-2006, 03:50 PM	#1
jaephantom Veteran Join Date: May 2006 Location: New York Posts: 1,246 Repped: 579 Repped 259 Times in 85 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	my first rhyme in here my first rhyme in here whats good im just starting out and i want to give this shit a try i know i aint up there like some of the rappers in hear but i want to give it a shot so imma try to get on some real shit in society it seems like love only turns into lust/ were told to respect authority but yet they can repsect us/ guess its ture when they say life aint fair/ murder theift rape, from harm even babies aint spared seems like in times of need we ask god but he gives us the sholder that cold/ so we try to gain to world by selling our very soul/ music corrupting mind of the kids so there quick to throw fists/ talking about how they love the war but there too scared to enlist/ seems like life we dont saver it/ so mothers over there sons casket asking the lord why like jadakiss/

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09-30-2006, 03:56 PM	#2
Sniper Locs Banned Join Date: May 2006 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 2,574 Repped: 0 Repped 108 Times in 86 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	you got potential duke stay up and keep em comin check my new "One Night Stand"

10-01-2006, 12:54 AM	#4
XxCritikalxX #1 Killah///Assasin Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,643 Repped: 4 Repped 25 Times in 20 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	nice for a first