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it's my first drop.. and i'm thinking of doing some more. Need some constructive criticism.. so just say what u think... prizzopz...
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Kinda Cool Kinda Wack I say 7
Lines were to short and it was way too Abstract It sounded like poetry cause Up to now I dunno what your talking about. But Nice Drop |
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nice drop homie
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not bad man just stay up
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5 from me... but keep it up...
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wer exactly does it.... RHYME
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^^ lol yya i just read it lol no rhyms at all
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the first line wat tight though
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over 3000 posts aswel.. nd this s tha first time uve been tempted to spit??
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lmfaooooooooooo yo souljah u got aim homey
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pretty good for a first....but u need to make it ryme...lol
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the first line was fuckin hot
y aint anybody saying that |
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i got msn... but i dont do aim
which means... bitch ass betta get urself downloadin msn.. :) |
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lmao msn can suck my dick
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well for msn to suck ur dick.. u will have to download it first...
GET THE FUCK DOWLOADIN IT |
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ive read ur first drop wna battle i wont go all out hard man jst for pravitse for both of us
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i dont really freestyle.. ima chat whore.. you'll see me in the chat section a lot and a couple of us started dropping bars there... and i got some good reviews so i though i'd drop it here. I'm not a battle MC, more of a poetic type.
here's my 2nd verse.. and about the rhyme scheme, I know it sounds weird here but wheN I say it, it sounds much better. so i feel you guys on that part (no homo) Quote:
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for a first time it was real good... better than me at my first time
just try and have syllables match up and dont be afraid to do a multie or try punches even tho you dont really need them this is a multie .................................................. ...... pie red .................................................. ......die said it should make sense tho and it doesnt need to be perfect rhyme... you should try to make your lines a bit longer and make it so your verses are long.. just keep doin you.... ps. try not to have to many lines that dont rhyme like one or two is fine just not so many where a bad reader will be like wtf |
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aight no doubt... thanks on that...
i'll try to tweak it to sound better as i progress..
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check out my free. Give ya better understanding.
Oh yeah my shit was way worse than yours the first time ask anyone. |
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organize your rhymes,keep same lentgh
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i'm sorry.. i'm having trouble understanding what you're saying... those sigs are just...... wow.....
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they aight,dont rhyme 2 much tho
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lol i read the first 1 again... and this new 1... they do rhyme.. its just uve layed it out sooooooo arkward... its real hard to find tha rhythm to em.. SET EM OUT DIFFERENT..
Nd ye Cc tha first line was gd lol |
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