First Song

Young_Nicks · 09-11-2006, 07:58 PM

Yo its time to put this cherry iight this is my first track.

dude comes out and shatters u like glass.
thats another 10 years of bad luck for ur ass.
fucking with me gave u the first seven.
In this house im not a preacher and ur not going to heaven.(seventh heaven.)
Dudes better get they're facts straight or there will be another 9/11.
If u call me fat one more time ill give u clip to tha chest.
have u losing weight quick like u was on slim fast.
dudes hate because the way i rhyme is quick fam.
give u thung twister like trying to sing a twista song.
hit u up and leave ur family leaving in a hole like sadam.
mad hater debating on me like tha 2000 elections.

Yo tell me what i need to improve dudes i no its alot but this is my first one so don't fucking hate.

PhazeG-unit50 · 09-11-2006, 08:23 PM

it was alright for your first time......wat people told me was to even your bars out as much as possible....and just think of creative shit to say.....im a beginner too so let me no wat u think of my shit....its on like page two..

Young_Nicks · 09-11-2006, 08:30 PM

Yo fam i don't no how to count bars i need alot of help..

Babe Truth · 09-11-2006, 08:32 PM

big pun, ur shit says DA TRUTH, u need to change that kid

Young_Nicks · 09-11-2006, 08:34 PM

oh yea i forgot about u dude i respect u fam.

Young_Nicks · 09-11-2006, 08:35 PM

Fuck i forgot about u click to sorry dude.

Godz illa · 09-11-2006, 08:46 PM

dont worry a6out 6a6e he fucCin sucC's, which is why hes scared to 6attle anyone good, and he lost a 6attle for 6an and still doesnt leave, hes pathetic the internet is his life, enough said.

Babe Truth · 09-11-2006, 09:41 PM

^^ this dude is straight up riding my dick

Young_Nicks · 09-11-2006, 09:46 PM

^lol....................

Godz illa · 09-11-2006, 09:53 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Babe Truth

^^ this dude is straight up riding my dick

all i heard was static, you sucC learn how to flow .

Babe Truth · 09-11-2006, 11:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by THEonlyFOLK

all i heard was static, you sucC learn how to flow .

ive never even seen u flow, my last drop is better than anything u ever done kid

Godz illa · 09-11-2006, 11:29 PM

battle me then?

09-11-2006, 07:58 PM	#1
Young_Nicks Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 936 Repped: 62 Repped 131 Times in 58 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	First Song First Song Yo its time to put this cherry iight this is my first track. dude comes out and shatters u like glass. thats another 10 years of bad luck for ur ass. fucking with me gave u the first seven. In this house im not a preacher and ur not going to heaven.(seventh heaven.) Dudes better get they're facts straight or there will be another 9/11. If u call me fat one more time ill give u clip to tha chest. have u losing weight quick like u was on slim fast. dudes hate because the way i rhyme is quick fam. give u thung twister like trying to sing a twista song. hit u up and leave ur family leaving in a hole like sadam. mad hater debating on me like tha 2000 elections. Yo tell me what i need to improve dudes i no its alot but this is my first one so don't fucking hate.

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09-11-2006, 08:23 PM	#2
PhazeG-unit50 $...Paid In Full...$ Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: West Coast... Posts: 1,029 Repped: 42 Repped 494 Times in 84 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	it was alright for your first time......wat people told me was to even your bars out as much as possible....and just think of creative shit to say.....im a beginner too so let me no wat u think of my shit....its on like page two..

09-11-2006, 08:30 PM	#3
Young_Nicks Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 936 Repped: 62 Repped 131 Times in 58 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Yo fam i don't no how to count bars i need alot of help..

09-11-2006, 08:32 PM	#4
Babe Truth Da Truth Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 2,912 Repped: 296 Repped 82 Times in 26 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	big pun, ur shit says DA TRUTH, u need to change that kid

09-11-2006, 08:34 PM	#5
Young_Nicks Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 936 Repped: 62 Repped 131 Times in 58 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	oh yea i forgot about u dude i respect u fam.

09-11-2006, 08:35 PM	#6
Young_Nicks Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 936 Repped: 62 Repped 131 Times in 58 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Fuck i forgot about u click to sorry dude.

09-11-2006, 08:46 PM	#7
Godz illa GLK- THEonlyFOLK -GLK Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 377 Repped: 3 Repped 5 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	dont worry a6out 6a6e he fucCin sucC's, which is why hes scared to 6attle anyone good, and he lost a 6attle for 6an and still doesnt leave, hes pathetic the internet is his life, enough said.

09-11-2006, 09:41 PM	#8
Babe Truth Da Truth Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 2,912 Repped: 296 Repped 82 Times in 26 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^^ this dude is straight up riding my dick

09-11-2006, 09:46 PM	#9
Young_Nicks Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 936 Repped: 62 Repped 131 Times in 58 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^lol....................

09-11-2006, 11:29 PM	#12
Godz illa GLK- THEonlyFOLK -GLK Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 377 Repped: 3 Repped 5 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	battle me then?