World In The Palm Of My Hands

Pillow · 10-23-2009, 08:10 AM

My minds racin an i'm pacin hearin a woman scream for her life,
unfortunately i can do nothin for this is her own strife.
How can i help a woman when she's a patient behind closed doors?
i try to calm my anticipation but it only grows more.
i peek into the room as a doctor walks by and enters it swiftly,
i see the woman bein cut open, my heartbeat multiplies by fifty.
I hear this woman start to cry sayin she hates me an beggin to die,
i wonder if she's tellin the truth or if her pain is makin her lie.
In my confusion i leave the room only to return but a minute later,
i try to leave the hospital but only made it to the elevator.
The anxiety sets in its just drivin me insane,
then i think about this woman, her struggle, her pain.
I feel i'm on the brink of havin a heart attack i think i'm fuckin dying!
Untill atlast i hear the precious sounds of a new born baby crying.
I walk into the room and witness Gods greatest plan,
As i hold my first born son, My World in the palm of my Hands

Pillow · 10-23-2009, 06:05 PM

uppin some feed

Pillow · 10-23-2009, 09:45 PM

uppin? i guess its hard ta get feed on this site?

Braidz · 10-24-2009, 12:07 AM

i think its the fact your name is pillow haha... anyways.. i liked this drop man.. n yeah not many people drop feed these days

Pillow · 10-24-2009, 01:50 AM

thanks man, but yeahi chose "pillow" for a reason but i guess it dont matter on a half dead site lol

Desire · 10-24-2009, 10:37 AM

let me guess. you use pillow becuz people "sleep" on you? lol. good drop tho. really like it. your pretty damn good.

mind droppin me some feed?

Pillow · 10-24-2009, 06:10 PM

lol yeah your right bout the name, but thanks for the feed homie. i'll return the favor

inna sense · 10-24-2009, 07:08 PM

your lyrics are good but you need to get more complex with the flow and rhymes...try using more multies...and when youre rhyming single syllables try to use more than just one at the end of two lines...like insane and pain...there are so many more words and lines you could use to rhyme with them...get off that aa,bb shit and youll be fine :)

Pillow · 10-24-2009, 07:16 PM

thanks homie, but yeah thats been my biggest problem honestly..sometimes i'll step it up but i usually dont feel the need to unless i'm battlin somebody really good lol

10-23-2009, 08:10 AM	#1
Pillow Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: a place Posts: 28 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	World In The Palm Of My Hands World In The Palm Of My Hands My minds racin an i'm pacin hearin a woman scream for her life, unfortunately i can do nothin for this is her own strife. How can i help a woman when she's a patient behind closed doors? i try to calm my anticipation but it only grows more. i peek into the room as a doctor walks by and enters it swiftly, i see the woman bein cut open, my heartbeat multiplies by fifty. I hear this woman start to cry sayin she hates me an beggin to die, i wonder if she's tellin the truth or if her pain is makin her lie. In my confusion i leave the room only to return but a minute later, i try to leave the hospital but only made it to the elevator. The anxiety sets in its just drivin me insane, then i think about this woman, her struggle, her pain. I feel i'm on the brink of havin a heart attack i think i'm fuckin dying! Untill atlast i hear the precious sounds of a new born baby crying. I walk into the room and witness Gods greatest plan, As i hold my first born son, My World in the palm of my Hands __________________ Dont sleep on me

10-23-2009, 06:05 PM	#2
Pillow Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: a place Posts: 28 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin some feed __________________ Dont sleep on me

10-23-2009, 09:45 PM	#3
Pillow Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: a place Posts: 28 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin? i guess its hard ta get feed on this site? __________________ Dont sleep on me

10-24-2009, 01:50 AM	#5
Pillow Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: a place Posts: 28 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	thanks man, but yeahi chose "pillow" for a reason but i guess it dont matter on a half dead site lol __________________ Dont sleep on me

10-24-2009, 06:10 PM	#7
Pillow Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: a place Posts: 28 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	lol yeah your right bout the name, but thanks for the feed homie. i'll return the favor __________________ Dont sleep on me

10-24-2009, 12:07 AM	#4
Braidz Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Melbourne City, Australia Posts: 320 Repped: 11 Repped 31 Times in 28 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	i think its the fact your name is pillow haha... anyways.. i liked this drop man.. n yeah not many people drop feed these days

10-24-2009, 10:37 AM	#6
Desire Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: BX Posts: 11 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	let me guess. you use pillow becuz people "sleep" on you? lol. good drop tho. really like it. your pretty damn good. mind droppin me some feed?

10-24-2009, 07:08 PM	#8
inna sense Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: germany Posts: 152 Repped: 0 Repped 6 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	your lyrics are good but you need to get more complex with the flow and rhymes...try using more multies...and when youre rhyming single syllables try to use more than just one at the end of two lines...like insane and pain...there are so many more words and lines you could use to rhyme with them...get off that aa,bb shit and youll be fine :) __________________

10-24-2009, 07:16 PM	#9
Pillow Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: a place Posts: 28 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	thanks homie, but yeah thats been my biggest problem honestly..sometimes i'll step it up but i usually dont feel the need to unless i'm battlin somebody really good lol __________________ Dont sleep on me

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