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My minds racin an i'm pacin hearin a woman scream for her life,
unfortunately i can do nothin for this is her own strife. How can i help a woman when she's a patient behind closed doors? i try to calm my anticipation but it only grows more. i peek into the room as a doctor walks by and enters it swiftly, i see the woman bein cut open, my heartbeat multiplies by fifty. I hear this woman start to cry sayin she hates me an beggin to die, i wonder if she's tellin the truth or if her pain is makin her lie. In my confusion i leave the room only to return but a minute later, i try to leave the hospital but only made it to the elevator. The anxiety sets in its just drivin me insane, then i think about this woman, her struggle, her pain. I feel i'm on the brink of havin a heart attack i think i'm fuckin dying! Untill atlast i hear the precious sounds of a new born baby crying. I walk into the room and witness Gods greatest plan, As i hold my first born son, My World in the palm of my Hands
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uppin some feed
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uppin? i guess its hard ta get feed on this site?
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i think its the fact your name is pillow haha... anyways.. i liked this drop man.. n yeah not many people drop feed these days
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thanks man, but yeahi chose "pillow" for a reason but i guess it dont matter on a half dead site lol
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let me guess. you use pillow becuz people "sleep" on you? lol. good drop tho. really like it. your pretty damn good.
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lol yeah your right bout the name, but thanks for the feed homie. i'll return the favor
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your lyrics are good but you need to get more complex with the flow and rhymes...try using more multies...and when youre rhyming single syllables try to use more than just one at the end of two lines...like insane and pain...there are so many more words and lines you could use to rhyme with them...get off that aa,bb shit and youll be fine :)
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thanks homie, but yeah thats been my biggest problem honestly..sometimes i'll step it up but i usually dont feel the need to unless i'm battlin somebody really good lol
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