Okay Lemme Warm Up...

Homicidal Thots · 07-31-2009, 11:41 AM

strangling bitches kickin out knees crackin faces
i never softened i'm always back in dark places
slice ya throat tearin up your ACL slash ya thighs
tear your back up incognito while i go past ya eyes
evil thoughts hanging bitches and killing racists
chop ya legs off and throw ya torso in chilling places
Dice your body into pieces guessing where parts might land
decapitate this motherfucker and put his head on the mic stand
nobody is feeling you your reputation has decreased
u tight? nah u like an old batman outfit made for the obese!
i dont carry guns no need i'll hit u with a tazer
with my knives, i'll cut u like unsharpened razors!
locked and loaded makin the bitches bleed is just a reminda
no fear cuz these faggots cant spit like havin dried up saliva
relaxed mind state writin this shit i was stuck writers block
carpel tunnel my wrist is gone wishin i could stop this clock
dont point fingers, im gonna start bashin these liars
not one to steal girls, not my fault shes spreading more than wildfires

CriminalThoughtz · 07-31-2009, 11:52 AM

well shit that was hot....my opinion...lots of haterz in the atmosphere.

ShawnDaDon · 07-31-2009, 11:54 AM

im definitley feelin this

Bunny_Rabbit · 07-31-2009, 09:43 PM

quit biting Em's old style, you twat.

Homicidal Thots · 07-31-2009, 11:33 PM

umm what are you talking about....biting em's style? the fuck?

Homicidal Thots · 08-02-2009, 12:45 AM

feed will be appreciated

Homicidal Thots · 08-02-2009, 10:48 PM

bumping for more feed dont sleep on this

GayStepBro · 08-02-2009, 11:33 PM

oooh, i cant say i approve. too violent why cant we all just be friends ??? :(

mcduffee420 · 08-04-2009, 02:01 AM

Dice your body into pieces guessing where parts might land
decapitate this motherfucker and put his head on the mic stand

fucking illist bar

damn that last line too haha

not one to steal girls, not my fault shes spreading more than wildfires

yeah man I already read yours before just didnt write anything glad i came back n took time on it though

kinda on the violent side haha hell yuhhh

this is the 2nd freestyle this week i came across that doesnt belong on a 1-10 scale like i told other dude its just doesnt seem like that type of writing to me just shouldnt be one of the judged ones

illa dude i thought u were talking about a new one though
keep em droppin, to keep hhboard rhyme sec. alive

Homicidal Thots · 08-07-2009, 01:05 AM

BUMP! dont sleep on this shit man will rep for feedback

TheMadWriter · 08-07-2009, 03:55 AM

I think it was great, you made excellent use of multis and the multi syllabic rhyme scheme is your style. Like Bunny (was that who?) said you do sound a lot like Eminem, however I think some of the parts could've been more rhythmic so the words coordinated and flowed. I think all you need to work on is flow and putting those syllables together to keep a consistent scheme.

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07-31-2009, 11:41 AM	#1
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	Okay Lemme Warm Up... Okay Lemme Warm Up... strangling bitches kickin out knees crackin faces i never softened i'm always back in dark places slice ya throat tearin up your ACL slash ya thighs tear your back up incognito while i go past ya eyes evil thoughts hanging bitches and killing racists chop ya legs off and throw ya torso in chilling places Dice your body into pieces guessing where parts might land decapitate this motherfucker and put his head on the mic stand nobody is feeling you your reputation has decreased u tight? nah u like an old batman outfit made for the obese! i dont carry guns no need i'll hit u with a tazer with my knives, i'll cut u like unsharpened razors! locked and loaded makin the bitches bleed is just a reminda no fear cuz these faggots cant spit like havin dried up saliva relaxed mind state writin this shit i was stuck writers block carpel tunnel my wrist is gone wishin i could stop this clock dont point fingers, im gonna start bashin these liars not one to steal girls, not my fault shes spreading more than wildfires

07-31-2009, 11:54 AM	#3
ShawnDaDon Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Houston Tx Posts: 560 Repped: 78 Repped 87 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 9 Posts	im definitley feelin this __________________ only time when you put ice on ya wrist is when it gets sprained/only time you get ya dick wet is when you piss in the rain/this a tragedy/you get burnt quicker than a calorie/aint this the same shit you pulled with cassidy Serius Jones

07-31-2009, 09:43 PM	#4
Bunny_Rabbit Rorshak Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: The Tangent Universe Posts: 886 Repped: 44 Repped 117 Times in 52 Posts Neg Reps: 52 Neg Repped at 59 Times in 54 Posts	quit biting Em's old style, you twat. __________________

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07-31-2009, 11:52 AM	#2
CriminalThoughtz Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: miami florida Posts: 294 Repped: 51 Repped 31 Times in 27 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 9 Times in 9 Posts	well shit that was hot....my opinion...lots of haterz in the atmosphere.

07-31-2009, 11:33 PM	#5
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	umm what are you talking about....biting em's style? the fuck?

08-02-2009, 12:45 AM	#6
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	feed will be appreciated

08-02-2009, 10:48 PM	#7
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	bumping for more feed dont sleep on this

08-02-2009, 11:33 PM	#8
GayStepBro Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: in jeffs basement Posts: 71 Repped: 1 Repped 24 Times in 9 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	oooh, i cant say i approve. too violent why cant we all just be friends ??? :(

08-04-2009, 02:01 AM	#9
mcduffee420 Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: minnesota_st.cloud Posts: 686 Repped: 169 Repped 81 Times in 40 Posts Neg Reps: 10 Neg Repped at 31 Times in 22 Posts	Dice your body into pieces guessing where parts might land decapitate this motherfucker and put his head on the mic stand fucking illist bar damn that last line too haha not one to steal girls, not my fault shes spreading more than wildfires yeah man I already read yours before just didnt write anything glad i came back n took time on it though kinda on the violent side haha hell yuhhh this is the 2nd freestyle this week i came across that doesnt belong on a 1-10 scale like i told other dude its just doesnt seem like that type of writing to me just shouldnt be one of the judged ones illa dude i thought u were talking about a new one though keep em droppin, to keep hhboard rhyme sec. alive

08-07-2009, 01:05 AM	#10
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	BUMP! dont sleep on this shit man will rep for feedback

08-07-2009, 03:55 AM	#11
TheMadWriter Veteran Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Virginia Posts: 1,379 Repped: 149 Repped 414 Times in 245 Posts Neg Reps: 68 Neg Repped at 153 Times in 97 Posts	I think it was great, you made excellent use of multis and the multi syllabic rhyme scheme is your style. Like Bunny (was that who?) said you do sound a lot like Eminem, however I think some of the parts could've been more rhythmic so the words coordinated and flowed. I think all you need to work on is flow and putting those syllables together to keep a consistent scheme. 1