Quick drop......

Komplex · 07-08-2009, 11:22 PM

didn't really put much time and effort in. just felt like droppin somethin. have some fun with it......

Settin' the competition field ablaze, the spectators still amazed...
You're just a loud talker who'll wind up dead....Billy Mays

Rhyme style sick and vicious, call it a vinerial illness with rage
The terror gets realer, harsh conditions of a serial killer's maze
I sliced my wrist then raised my arm and let blood spill on my face
Went and murdered my next door neighbor since I hadn't killed in days
I consulted a therapist, he said I'm a psycho villain who's crazed
Who murders for recreation, such a drastic revealing stage
Life's a big mirage, a facade, always had the feelin it's staged
I'm just trapped with no soul, a slaughter machine built in a cage
I try to play my violent tendecies off as just a silly phase
But still today an outside evil force ultimately conceals my fate
Homicide is just a joke to me, indeed that's still the case
Charles Manson's my idol while Gahndi gets little praise.....
Since you wanna know it, I'm a homophobic, always killin gays
So there's a problem if you standin around me and feelin safe

ThA ViiRu5 · 07-09-2009, 12:34 PM

Word i could tell you hadn't put in too much time or effort...but i did have fun with it (pause)..That Billy Mays line was hilarious. Multies were mostly on point but there were..i think 2 occasions where they were just brutal. Anyway it was just a quick drop, an entertaining read which was all it was supposed to be..

Baller · 07-09-2009, 02:12 PM

Multies were ok, a few bad ones though. Wordplay meh, ok I guess, as so was the flow.

Nothing too good but was ok, Its obvious you didn't put much time in it.

As far as the battle, My teammates are still ghost :S

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 07-09-2009, 03:15 PM

Some forced Multiess.. you're getting better with them though.. flow was Aight.. I can tell you really didn't put effort in

you already know

Komplex · 07-12-2009, 12:21 PM

good looks on the feed.

ReFleXiOn · 07-15-2009, 03:46 AM

i didn't think this was too bad, wasn't your best by far. But to discredit it completely would be ridiculous, there were some focal points in the drop which held the piece together and others and in my opinion stole from it a lot.

I sliced my wrist then raised my arm and let blood spill on my face
Went and murdered my next door neighbor since I hadn't killed in days
^good beginning, seems to be leading to a something ill...

I consulted a therapist, he said I'm a psycho villain who's crazed
Who murders for recreation, such a drastic revealing stage
^kinda weak, not to be harsh

Life's a big mirage, a facade, always had the feelin it's staged
I'm just trapped with no soul, a slaughter machine built in a cage
^picked it back up again...

This kinda went on through out the whole piecein my mind, solid bar then weak bar. I mean don't get me wrong, I'd be a hypocrite to say I'm any different from time to time. this is merely feedback just for you to take in...But overall with the weight of the hard hitting lines I still think you accomplished a relatively well composed drop...stay up famo and keep doing you. 1

07-08-2009, 11:22 PM	#1
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Quick drop...... Quick drop...... didn't really put much time and effort in. just felt like droppin somethin. have some fun with it...... Settin' the competition field ablaze, the spectators still amazed... You're just a loud talker who'll wind up dead....Billy Mays Rhyme style sick and vicious, call it a vinerial illness with rage The terror gets realer, harsh conditions of a serial killer's maze I sliced my wrist then raised my arm and let blood spill on my face Went and murdered my next door neighbor since I hadn't killed in days I consulted a therapist, he said I'm a psycho villain who's crazed Who murders for recreation, such a drastic revealing stage Life's a big mirage, a facade, always had the feelin it's staged I'm just trapped with no soul, a slaughter machine built in a cage I try to play my violent tendecies off as just a silly phase But still today an outside evil force ultimately conceals my fate Homicide is just a joke to me, indeed that's still the case Charles Manson's my idol while Gahndi gets little praise..... Since you wanna know it, I'm a homophobic, always killin gays So there's a problem if you standin around me and feelin safe __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz Last edited by Komplex; 07-09-2009 at 06:37 AM.

07-09-2009, 12:34 PM	#2
ThA ViiRu5 ``Enlightened Emcee::.. Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: ................ Posts: 2,617 Repped: 525 Repped 179 Times in 104 Posts Neg Reps: 81 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	Word i could tell you hadn't put in too much time or effort...but i did have fun with it (pause)..That Billy Mays line was hilarious. Multies were mostly on point but there were..i think 2 occasions where they were just brutal. Anyway it was just a quick drop, an entertaining read which was all it was supposed to be.. __________________ "The only thing that comes to a sleeping man is dreams" ReCkoRd - [Victoriez]: 27 [Slipp Uppz]: 8 [KO]: 13 [TKO]: 1 ~~``!!...::Forever Undefeated::...!!``~~ HeAvYwEiGhT

07-09-2009, 02:12 PM	#3
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,100 Repped: 112 Repped 269 Times in 150 Posts Neg Reps: 96 Neg Repped at 61 Times in 39 Posts	Multies were ok, a few bad ones though. Wordplay meh, ok I guess, as so was the flow. Nothing too good but was ok, Its obvious you didn't put much time in it. As far as the battle, My teammates are still ghost :S __________________

07-09-2009, 03:15 PM	#4
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,907 Repped: 80 Repped 311 Times in 147 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Some forced Multiess.. you're getting better with them though.. flow was Aight.. I can tell you really didn't put effort in you already know __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito Last edited by PBMaSteRMiNdiN; 07-09-2009 at 03:19 PM.

07-12-2009, 12:21 PM	#5
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	good looks on the feed. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

07-15-2009, 03:46 AM	#6
ReFleXiOn Blissful Poetry Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Canada, SK. Posts: 1,052 Repped: 0 Repped 26 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 2 Posts	i didn't think this was too bad, wasn't your best by far. But to discredit it completely would be ridiculous, there were some focal points in the drop which held the piece together and others and in my opinion stole from it a lot. I sliced my wrist then raised my arm and let blood spill on my face Went and murdered my next door neighbor since I hadn't killed in days ^good beginning, seems to be leading to a something ill... I consulted a therapist, he said I'm a psycho villain who's crazed Who murders for recreation, such a drastic revealing stage ^kinda weak, not to be harsh Life's a big mirage, a facade, always had the feelin it's staged I'm just trapped with no soul, a slaughter machine built in a cage ^picked it back up again... This kinda went on through out the whole piecein my mind, solid bar then weak bar. I mean don't get me wrong, I'd be a hypocrite to say I'm any different from time to time. this is merely feedback just for you to take in...But overall with the weight of the hard hitting lines I still think you accomplished a relatively well composed drop...stay up famo and keep doing you. 1 __________________ Knowledge is Bliss...Poetic Pimpin' Biatch!!! Battle Record: 10-1

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