The Realness

Baller · 06-26-2009, 01:24 AM

When I write, it becomes an epic poem
Listen up, I don’t care where you reppin homes
I got problems, sometimes the pot drops em
Sometimes my neighbors smell it and the cops stop in
Nothing worse then a dude cock blockin
Or seeing your dad fiend on the block shoppin
Asking god why the fuck is the game tainted
Lookin back shits not the same aint it
Now lets see, 8 years old stress free
Pops still around, not yet on meth g
My Uncle Troy’s face still present
Hasn’t OD’d or does he feel restless
See my families a bunch of addicts
Developed some and I can’t crush the habits
I mean, whats my future lookin like
It aint lookin bright, I can get booked tonight
Not into anything major yet
But if history repeats, it’s a major threat
Suffering from low self esteem
Oh selfish me having selfish dreams
Hit the lottery, the greed of green wealth is keen
Bailing out on people that was helping me
It’s part of a character
Reflect on past women, like fuck I care for her?
Shit in the present looks different in the future
Or shit in the past seems different in the present
Like lookin back, was I living in life’s essence
Or held back, cuz the potential of the minds endless

Shogun · 06-26-2009, 05:56 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Baller

See my families a bunch of addicts
Developed some and I can’t crush the habits
I mean, whats my future lookin like
It aint lookin bright, I can get booked tonight
Not into anything major yet
But if history repeats, it’s a major threat
Suffering from low self esteem
Oh selfish me having selfish dreams

Yes. This section was strong, in the context of this piece. Simple, but effective.

I didn't really care for anything prior to or following this section. You kinda ruined it in the next couplet by cramming too much in the first line.

Cut out the use of crap like "g", it's really amateurish. There were a few other instances where the wording seemed sloppy too; "restless" being one.

Baller · 06-26-2009, 06:51 AM

Thanks for the feed...

Kidss · 06-26-2009, 03:34 PM

dude this freestyle speaks to me

Lil Brizzle · 06-27-2009, 09:22 AM

Suffering from low self esteem
Oh selfish me having selfish dreams
Hit the lottery, the greed of green wealth is keen
Bailing out on people that was helping me

^^ fav part....

the concept dominated this piece alot....whether its real and affected ur life....it kept me focused throughout and it had some real deep meanings as well.....flow was on point.....multies alright but couldve been better......but overall it was pretty good....8.5/10

Baller · 06-30-2009, 05:20 AM

good looks........

Baller · 07-12-2009, 10:16 PM

Quite sleepin

Str8Shooter · 07-14-2009, 02:38 AM

Suffering from low self esteem
Oh selfish me having selfish dreams
Hit the lottery, the greed of green wealth is keen
Bailing out on people that was helping me
It’s part of a character

deep subject matter. i liked it.

lamard · 09-04-2009, 11:18 AM

i aint feeling it u gotta go harder dawg.. at the end of the day thats what it is about

Braidz · 09-05-2009, 02:15 AM

baller.... is back? lol

HipHopKnowledge · 09-05-2009, 02:47 AM

very nice work my dude.. get at me collabs....

06-26-2009, 01:24 AM	#1
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,039 Repped: 105 Repped 232 Times in 138 Posts Neg Reps: 67 Neg Repped at 57 Times in 38 Posts	The Realness The Realness When I write, it becomes an epic poem Listen up, I don’t care where you reppin homes I got problems, sometimes the pot drops em Sometimes my neighbors smell it and the cops stop in Nothing worse then a dude cock blockin Or seeing your dad fiend on the block shoppin Asking god why the fuck is the game tainted Lookin back shits not the same aint it Now lets see, 8 years old stress free Pops still around, not yet on meth g My Uncle Troy’s face still present Hasn’t OD’d or does he feel restless See my families a bunch of addicts Developed some and I can’t crush the habits I mean, whats my future lookin like It aint lookin bright, I can get booked tonight Not into anything major yet But if history repeats, it’s a major threat Suffering from low self esteem Oh selfish me having selfish dreams Hit the lottery, the greed of green wealth is keen Bailing out on people that was helping me It’s part of a character Reflect on past women, like fuck I care for her? Shit in the present looks different in the future Or shit in the past seems different in the present Like lookin back, was I living in life’s essence Or held back, cuz the potential of the minds endless

06-27-2009, 09:22 AM	#5
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,598 Repped: 38 Repped 100 Times in 48 Posts Neg Reps: 44 Neg Repped at 72 Times in 42 Posts	Suffering from low self esteem Oh selfish me having selfish dreams Hit the lottery, the greed of green wealth is keen Bailing out on people that was helping me ^^ fav part.... the concept dominated this piece alot....whether its real and affected ur life....it kept me focused throughout and it had some real deep meanings as well.....flow was on point.....multies alright but couldve been better......but overall it was pretty good....8.5/10 __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

07-12-2009, 10:16 PM	#7
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,039 Repped: 105 Repped 232 Times in 138 Posts Neg Reps: 67 Neg Repped at 57 Times in 38 Posts	Quite sleepin __________________ Get mad at it, half beast, half addict Half ass it, and be better than rap bastids

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06-26-2009, 06:51 AM	#3
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,039 Repped: 105 Repped 232 Times in 138 Posts Neg Reps: 67 Neg Repped at 57 Times in 38 Posts	Thanks for the feed...

06-26-2009, 03:34 PM	#4
Kidss Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Bloomington Posts: 380 Repped: 0 Repped 34 Times in 26 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	dude this freestyle speaks to me

06-30-2009, 05:20 AM	#6
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,039 Repped: 105 Repped 232 Times in 138 Posts Neg Reps: 67 Neg Repped at 57 Times in 38 Posts	good looks........

07-14-2009, 02:38 AM	#8
Str8Shooter Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: In the Dungeons of Rap Posts: 38 Repped: 0 Repped 5 Times in 5 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Suffering from low self esteem Oh selfish me having selfish dreams Hit the lottery, the greed of green wealth is keen Bailing out on people that was helping me It’s part of a character deep subject matter. i liked it.

09-04-2009, 11:18 AM	#9
lamard Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: sweden Posts: 20 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	i aint feeling it u gotta go harder dawg.. at the end of the day thats what it is about

09-05-2009, 02:15 AM	#10
Braidz Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Melbourne City, Australia Posts: 285 Repped: 11 Repped 28 Times in 25 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 11 Times in 10 Posts	baller.... is back? lol

09-05-2009, 02:47 AM	#11
HipHopKnowledge Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: DA GUTT Posts: 8 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	very nice work my dude.. get at me collabs....