Sour....

Baller · 06-26-2009, 01:22 AM

I reach for a pen and write deep from with in
Getting my feet wet, and find myself thinking again
One word that could describe me, passive
And the rage building inside me’s massive
Fighting ignorance, but for how much longer
It’s a bitch and can’t one punch stop her
My brains about to spas out, I can’t take it
So to make it basic, I hit the weed n pass out
Dreaming of a cash route, and I hate this
I know its fake shit, but I’m full of mad clout
Because I wake up to another day jobless
And unemployment checks can’t stop this…
Struggle, of getting out of a six foot hole
Taxing cash they give you, but its good though
Because the peoples word is redundant
And you being funded is enough shit, so fuck it
It doesn’t make sense, I’m done being patient
Stay bent, sitting around just doesn’t pay rent
So I brainstorm on how to diminish obstacles
But it seems being all you can be is mission impossible

Komplex · 06-26-2009, 12:45 PM

Fighting ignorance, but for how much longer
It’s a bitch and can’t one punch stop her

It doesn’t make sense, I’m done being patient
Stay bent, sitting around just doesn’t pay rent
So I brainstorm on how to diminish obstacles
But it seems being all you can be is mission impossible

For the lines to be as short as they were, you managed still to say alot in terms of delivering a coherent message. on top of that, the fact that the lines were shorter made the multies and the flow better. solid drop but I've most def seen greater from you. stay up fam.

Kidss · 06-26-2009, 03:32 PM

good freestyle dawg

06-26-2009, 01:22 AM	#1
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,039 Repped: 105 Repped 232 Times in 138 Posts Neg Reps: 67 Neg Repped at 57 Times in 38 Posts	Sour.... Sour.... I reach for a pen and write deep from with in Getting my feet wet, and find myself thinking again One word that could describe me, passive And the rage building inside me’s massive Fighting ignorance, but for how much longer It’s a bitch and can’t one punch stop her My brains about to spas out, I can’t take it So to make it basic, I hit the weed n pass out Dreaming of a cash route, and I hate this I know its fake shit, but I’m full of mad clout Because I wake up to another day jobless And unemployment checks can’t stop this… Struggle, of getting out of a six foot hole Taxing cash they give you, but its good though Because the peoples word is redundant And you being funded is enough shit, so fuck it It doesn’t make sense, I’m done being patient Stay bent, sitting around just doesn’t pay rent So I brainstorm on how to diminish obstacles But it seems being all you can be is mission impossible

06-26-2009, 12:45 PM	#2
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Fighting ignorance, but for how much longer It’s a bitch and can’t one punch stop her It doesn’t make sense, I’m done being patient Stay bent, sitting around just doesn’t pay rent So I brainstorm on how to diminish obstacles But it seems being all you can be is mission impossible For the lines to be as short as they were, you managed still to say alot in terms of delivering a coherent message. on top of that, the fact that the lines were shorter made the multies and the flow better. solid drop but I've most def seen greater from you. stay up fam. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

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06-26-2009, 03:32 PM	#3
Kidss Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Bloomington Posts: 380 Repped: 0 Repped 34 Times in 26 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	good freestyle dawg