TheMadWriter

This is that laid back flow...

Ain't got an expensive chain, I duck lyin/
No money for snow bunnies so fuck diamonds/
I relapse on this shit, OD on rhymin/
Catch me on the corner flowing like broken hymens/ (hahaha)
Watch your timin, I stay grindin/
I bustle with hustle crush you and keep drivin/
You tussel? I muffle noise while you're dyin/
A muzzle on your cum guzzler keep cryin/
I'm so cynical, sometimes demented/
Sometimes defensive lines are implemented/
For my protection, the winter veteran/
Used to bein the coldest say that with affection/
I see ya'll detestin, fuck a recession/
Ya'll go in the future, i'm havin regressions/
That makes me richer, look at the bigger picture/
Squeeze the game like constrictors puttin it in a fixture/
Seize it with ease bitch, tell ya girl 'on your knees bitch'/
Disrespectful negligent but for a reason/
Cuz I have the power to devour these legions/
Of whack mcs, committin bout three treasons/
But I don't blame these demons they want impeachment/
So then they start fakin betrayin so they can preach it/
But this shit is in my blood, so fuck the leaches/
Ain't got money now but I can make cream without peaches.../
That required a pause, bow to greatness/
A prisoner to my mind, but not to fate...shit/
I guess FDR had right down to the basics/
Pieced together a puzzle made a mosaic/
Of course he put in a message and then he laced it/
With morality never cowardly that's great shit/
My rhyme mortality rate makes it berated/
Numerous fatalities makin it heavily hated/
And in turn, I get penance stares but I maced it/
They get mad grabbin their eyes you've been defaced BITCH/
Fuck critics, Check The Perspective went hard, now pause/

That's allusion I just referenced a work of art...

And with enough heart I pushed to the finish straight from the start/
So i've already crossed the line i'm Hip Hop's Mozart/
Some of these critics seem to show personal loathin/
But I encourage it, the bad ones I consider Beethoven/(Hahahahaha!!!)
They don't want it with me, i'm the fuckin future/
Raisin more of the masses than Martin Luther/
Nah, i'd rather sit back kill these rap fags/
With tire irons and knap sacks shove em in glad bags/
And rip up the fad rags the bapes and rad raps/
And listen to the sad gripes I turn em to bad sights/
While grippin the mag I call em bagged pipes from Baghdad...

Hahahaha...laid back..criticism is wanted so come on in.

sofis2cated

criticism huh?

some was good, some was "off", not necessarily bad but I think this kinda writing is more for audio, seeing how the structure is again, off.. positives, vocab. was good, threw in some 3 and 4 syllable multi's, and the punches are there just could've been worded a little better.. just my opinion tho, keep writin