my subconsoius mind

mcduffee420 · 06-07-2009, 11:06 PM

my subconscious never leaves makes my brain like high times/
its an unforgettable memory how on my own sub-era divine-mines/
as in the era of my prime its gone and past which is my time/
this is my time so mother fuck it im going harder this is my rhyme/

This is life for me almost 20 i gotta tell ya something/
i got secrets un-earthed within my life called homebound im running/
staying still in my head is where i call home/
wishin i was in prison so the strangers i call family wont see me oh no,no/
I am a zombie in an empty body i wish i was not me but yet i am/
standing running convulsing just plumitting asking bout how i been/
talkin bout me i hear you no i dont wanna see/
fuckers holding shit back fuck em ill throw in my towel...peace/
fuck em i said fuck them fuckers dont fuck with me/
bitches are bitches fuck bitches causes bitches only want a dollar outta me/
fuck you and your crew fuck your mom and your son/
fuck your whip fuck your chain you aint shit n im done/

Str8Shooter · 06-08-2009, 04:20 PM

some lines don't even make sense. some bars are too long. nice attempt but work on ya bars.

06-07-2009, 11:06 PM	#1
mcduffee420 Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: minnesota_st.cloud Posts: 686 Repped: 169 Repped 81 Times in 40 Posts Neg Reps: 10 Neg Repped at 31 Times in 22 Posts	my subconsoius mind my subconsoius mind my subconscious never leaves makes my brain like high times/ its an unforgettable memory how on my own sub-era divine-mines/ as in the era of my prime its gone and past which is my time/ this is my time so mother fuck it im going harder this is my rhyme/ This is life for me almost 20 i gotta tell ya something/ i got secrets un-earthed within my life called homebound im running/ staying still in my head is where i call home/ wishin i was in prison so the strangers i call family wont see me oh no,no/ I am a zombie in an empty body i wish i was not me but yet i am/ standing running convulsing just plumitting asking bout how i been/ talkin bout me i hear you no i dont wanna see/ fuckers holding shit back fuck em ill throw in my towel...peace/ fuck em i said fuck them fuckers dont fuck with me/ bitches are bitches fuck bitches causes bitches only want a dollar outta me/ fuck you and your crew fuck your mom and your son/ fuck your whip fuck your chain you aint shit n im done/

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06-08-2009, 04:20 PM	#2
Str8Shooter Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: In the Dungeons of Rap Posts: 38 Repped: 0 Repped 5 Times in 5 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	some lines don't even make sense. some bars are too long. nice attempt but work on ya bars.