I Need To Vent..

Homicidal Thots · 06-01-2009, 10:12 PM

Pages full of demonic thoughts and homicides
So much shit in my life I'm thinkin of suicide
I use the BIC tip to brainstorm this sick shit
Pen tip to the page where I create six hits
The tip of the pen bends as I try to vent my rage
Feel like a demon in a cage, gotta make it past these days

Homicidal Thots · 06-02-2009, 07:40 PM

aw man this is gettin slept on bump!

Kidss · 06-03-2009, 06:40 PM

pretty good needs work though

Threyev · 06-03-2009, 07:34 PM

this is really short, and the first two lines are pretty weak. i appreciate the real talk, but i think you need to channel it better. keep posting, the second bar was hot.

Komplex · 06-03-2009, 07:45 PM

This has the potential to be a dope freestyle if you finish it and add a bit more to the lines. For a quick jot this was actually decent.

Homicidal Thots · 06-03-2009, 07:57 PM

Pages full of demonic thoughts of homicide
So much shit in my life I'm thinkin of suicide
I use the BIC tip to brainstorm this sick shit
Pen tip to the page where I create six hits
The tip of the pen bends as I try to vent my rage
A demon in a cage, gotta make it past these days
So many bars of pleasure and pain bitch I got plenty
So carefree swimming in ones wipin ass with twenty's
Fucked up mentally mixin liquor and pills
I'm gamesharkin u faggots for quicker kills
I spit venom at random hittin every direction
I express my feelings not hiding my erection(no homo)
My dicks gotta hard on for these pussies
Waitin to get fucked with PLEASE push me

i added more n what not

TheRealProtege · 06-04-2009, 03:22 AM

lol........................................

06-01-2009, 10:12 PM	#1
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	I Need To Vent.. I Need To Vent.. Pages full of demonic thoughts and homicides So much shit in my life I'm thinkin of suicide I use the BIC tip to brainstorm this sick shit Pen tip to the page where I create six hits The tip of the pen bends as I try to vent my rage Feel like a demon in a cage, gotta make it past these days Last edited by Homicidal Thots; 06-03-2009 at 07:58 PM.

06-03-2009, 07:45 PM	#5
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	This has the potential to be a dope freestyle if you finish it and add a bit more to the lines. For a quick jot this was actually decent. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

06-04-2009, 03:22 AM	#7
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 1,962 Repped: 139 Repped 582 Times in 167 Posts Neg Reps: 135 Neg Repped at 78 Times in 67 Posts	lol........................................ __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

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06-02-2009, 07:40 PM	#2
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	aw man this is gettin slept on bump!

06-03-2009, 06:40 PM	#3
Kidss Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Bloomington Posts: 380 Repped: 0 Repped 34 Times in 26 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	pretty good needs work though

06-03-2009, 07:34 PM	#4
Threyev Join Date: May 2006 Location: The Bronx Posts: 553 Repped: 82 Repped 46 Times in 29 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	this is really short, and the first two lines are pretty weak. i appreciate the real talk, but i think you need to channel it better. keep posting, the second bar was hot.

06-03-2009, 07:57 PM	#6
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	Pages full of demonic thoughts of homicide So much shit in my life I'm thinkin of suicide I use the BIC tip to brainstorm this sick shit Pen tip to the page where I create six hits The tip of the pen bends as I try to vent my rage A demon in a cage, gotta make it past these days So many bars of pleasure and pain bitch I got plenty So carefree swimming in ones wipin ass with twenty's Fucked up mentally mixin liquor and pills I'm gamesharkin u faggots for quicker kills I spit venom at random hittin every direction I express my feelings not hiding my erection(no homo) My dicks gotta hard on for these pussies Waitin to get fucked with PLEASE push me i added more n what not