Lyricism

sofis2cated · 05-31-2009, 05:49 PM

Hustlin like Cassidy when I'm on these Cali streets
I'm like a fucken millionaire cuz all I do is laugh at G's
No limit to my game, so you can call it Master P
Soak the mic with gasoline, tell ya bitch to pass the weed
Ignite the shit blasphemy and spread my fucken rap disease
Breath is that of dragon heat, turn victims into ash then leave
Rap to me is actually my spiritual path to peace
A mother fucken tragedy the way these fucken rappers be
Rappin about strappin heat and their cars with massive feet
These wanna be majesties couldn't seduce a Catholic priest
We was kids playin gangsta ridin bikes pullin plastic heat
Livin round the savage teens who's mommas were the cracked out phenes
But in the booth it's the truth not spittin out a fantasy
We be glad to see the trick of becoming G magically
Instead let's surpass the beef, let our pens unstrap it's piece
And become the man the speaks over beats so classically

Threyev · 05-31-2009, 05:58 PM

pretty good. some of the lines were forced, and some of them were weak, but you also had moments where you set on fire (that Catholic priest was pretty dope, IMO, if a bit tired). you did a good job with this, but at times you Vinnie Paz-d it; tried too hard to make each line continue the multi-fest. i get what you were going for, but it's a bit much at time. good shit though, keep spitting.

sofis2cated · 05-31-2009, 06:44 PM

^^

props man, yeah i need to take my time a bit more, i tend to rush through these to finish off the 16 but thanks for the comment

TheMadWriter · 05-31-2009, 09:34 PM

Lol, I loved the first punchline about the millionaire. I also loved how these lines flowed and the way you put together the multis:

Quote:

A mother fucken tragedy the way these fucken rappers be
Rappin about strappin heat and their cars with massive feet
These wanna be majesties couldn't seduce a Catholic priest
We was kids playin gangsta ridin bikes pullin plastic heat
Livin round the savage teens who's mommas were the cracked out phenes

"Ignite the shit blasphemy and spread my fucken rap disease" felt a bit forced to me, but other than that this was a nice drop. Good shit.

sofis2cated · 06-01-2009, 04:58 PM

I forgot to type "with" before 'blasphemy'... but thanks for the reply, I see what you're sayin, doesn't truly fit

05-31-2009, 05:49 PM	#1
sofis2cated California Lyricist Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Bakersfield, CA Posts: 762 Repped: 33 Repped 10 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	Lyricism Lyricism Hustlin like Cassidy when I'm on these Cali streets I'm like a fucken millionaire cuz all I do is laugh at G's No limit to my game, so you can call it Master P Soak the mic with gasoline, tell ya bitch to pass the weed Ignite the shit blasphemy and spread my fucken rap disease Breath is that of dragon heat, turn victims into ash then leave Rap to me is actually my spiritual path to peace A mother fucken tragedy the way these fucken rappers be Rappin about strappin heat and their cars with massive feet These wanna be majesties couldn't seduce a Catholic priest We was kids playin gangsta ridin bikes pullin plastic heat Livin round the savage teens who's mommas were the cracked out phenes But in the booth it's the truth not spittin out a fantasy We be glad to see the trick of becoming G magically Instead let's surpass the beef, let our pens unstrap it's piece And become the man the speaks over beats so classically

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05-31-2009, 05:58 PM	#2
Threyev Join Date: May 2006 Location: The Bronx Posts: 553 Repped: 82 Repped 46 Times in 29 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	pretty good. some of the lines were forced, and some of them were weak, but you also had moments where you set on fire (that Catholic priest was pretty dope, IMO, if a bit tired). you did a good job with this, but at times you Vinnie Paz-d it; tried too hard to make each line continue the multi-fest. i get what you were going for, but it's a bit much at time. good shit though, keep spitting.

05-31-2009, 06:44 PM	#3
sofis2cated California Lyricist Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Bakersfield, CA Posts: 762 Repped: 33 Repped 10 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	^^ props man, yeah i need to take my time a bit more, i tend to rush through these to finish off the 16 but thanks for the comment

06-01-2009, 04:58 PM	#5
sofis2cated California Lyricist Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Bakersfield, CA Posts: 762 Repped: 33 Repped 10 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	I forgot to type "with" before 'blasphemy'... but thanks for the reply, I see what you're sayin, doesn't truly fit