TheMadWriter

Fuck what the critics say...i'ma solidify my title as a legend; hate me or love me...here it is HHB

A legend in hip hop advocated not fabricated/
Elaborated on how my skill is so damn saturated/
People anticipatin the next advancement MC's waitin/
To see if they'll be berated never run through lines like Payton/
If I falter waitin then no one will ever take my placement/
Because I am adjacent to bein the Hip Hop Jason/
A microphone for machete chop intestines to speghetti/
Another Andretti my drive is fast and I feel i'm ready/
To celebrate goin steady none of these rappers can dead me/
I rain like confetti though in bad context i'm passin testing/
And manifesting to something bigger and better and messy/
These fuckers regressing cuz watching me itself is a blessing/
To see an MC besting leavin all of these whack out fans guessing/
With the mic i'm caressing I could cause a riot addressing/
The hidden wrongs of the government or the kids that are deftly/
Destroying themselves in a deathly hefty trap/
The grabs of rap on the mind that seems to collapse/
As these kids listen and fap or download and tap it seems/
They lost the respect that came with dreams now cream/
Is the goal that teams aim to grasp and retrieve/
Redeem themselves from idiocy that deceives/
See me? A superstar in prime now get in your line/
The rhyme is refined so fine it should be a crime/
To drop a verse that can make an MC burst/
And disperse with nasty remains the size of a purse/
Pumpin the blood that'll bring hemophobia to a nurse/
Welcome to your herse, watch the legendary MC inspired from the first...

I wonder what beef I would cause to say 'Fuck diddy'/
Fuck your city, fuck your censorship fucking committe/
Or fuck a titty, fuck the MCs that bit me/
I fucked up Combustion i'll fuck up anyone who fucks with me.../
Establish my ground, I pressure my footing/
Measure those looking I turn those hard black abs to PUDDING/
I'm a monster, Boy in the Hood like Gooding/
I can take land, succeed primarily begin the wooding/
I'm just one of the best, fuck what you think i'm butching/
Every dream you have or had, try and stop me/
I'm top rank, you skank just try and top me/
Like wet planks, you prolly break in half all easy/
Believe me you ain't a mac you're just cheesy.../
Like Tupac, you fucking faggots can't see me/
And for you Combustions, you whack MCs can't be me/
Why mention his name? Not an achievement to his game/
But he was an example, and i'll take the blame/
For his silence, he went from irrelevant to malevolent/
From prevalent with five disses to a trailer vent/
Now he only gives heat to the poor, he's beat to the floor/
Fuck him I do my enemies like that anymore/
Because compromise is comprised of a slight submission/
That can bring embarassment without the abolition/
And your position is now a transition to loss by decision/
The peacemaker never got shit with petitions/
So fuck it, let the MCs call it a challenge/
Matter fact that's invalid scratch that out, call it malice/
Toward HHB, and any bitch hating me degrading me, underrate and berating me, fuck em!

Engrave my name in the memorial, fuck a tutorial I came in the game with a fuckin editorial, controversial opinions stayin mean and terriotorial, defendin the turf I surf with a wave i'm splashin in hate, I laugh neck stretched out nose higher than giraffes, no whack MC could follow my outlined path, without stumblin grumblin fallin and tumbling mumblin;

Writer's amazin immaculate no use in rumblin....

Threyev

I feel like you had a lot of mulites here, which is a start, but they were mad conventional and led to a lot of forced lines. you had some good moments here and there (i liked that cream line), but overall this was a bit weak. it means more if it isn't lyrically perfect to say something original or surprising. push your limits a bit, past just the first word that comes to mind.

this might be a bit harsh, but i think it can help you. good luck with your next drops, keep posting.

GILoTINE

yo man you was going hard like you was high n pissed off or somthin lol.

10 outa 10

To see if they'll be berated never run through lines like Payton

this line i understood it but it was confusing at first like, your saying you never run through lines like walter payton did. but it reads like your saying payton never owwwwwwww shit just got it yo your talkin payton manning sorry dude lol my bad. 100

TheMadWriter

Walter Payton was right actually...