Punchline flow

Fre3dom · 03-30-2009, 12:05 PM

Imma…lyrical rider spitting that fire
Cant be fucked with, your sell by date has expired
You say your better? You a liar, so when the AK buck
You better pray to God or go down on Lady luck
You a shady fuck so when the beef erupts
Bullets will leave ya chest leaking faster then “Before I self Destruct!”
I buy the lease, you steal beats like polow da don
Im a beast you want beef? Catch a hollow in ya lungs
You following me son, but I’ll just give you the Lama
I’ll harm ya, put 3 guns on ya body like Rhianna
Send you into trauma, you cant see me honestly
Coz this rhyme section fell off worse than the economy
Do your geography,
I’m from the place where we stab kids with a blade
It aint a BBQ but we’ll leave ya Ribs on a plate
Ya spits are just played, pop another Tampon in
Before I make you disappear like Camron did

Yeah jus a lil 3 min piece good or bad hit me with it its all good

Rebel INS {CF} · 03-30-2009, 02:00 PM

"I’m from the place where we stab kids with a blade"

What happened to put the knives down ?

Fre3dom · 03-30-2009, 03:29 PM

Its a freestyle so im just talkin shit lol
Plus that "Put the knives down" was for an MTV Competition....where I was voted number 1 out of 446 entrees by the public :)
And Its a true statement I am from a place where kids get stabbed all the time...so its just describing my environment....how come a question but no feed?

Rebel INS {CF} · 03-30-2009, 03:37 PM

I was just curious thats all and wanted to address the issue, seemed a bit hypocritical, and if kids get stabbed u could say THEY oppossed to WE ... u say that was for an MTV competition so basically u were just whoring the competition for the hell of it ? You dont actually believe ur own message ?

You better pray to God or go down on Lady luck

^ That was good though

Fre3dom · 03-30-2009, 03:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rebel INS {CF}

I was just curious thats all and wanted to address the issue, seemed a bit hypocritical, and if kids get stabbed u could say THEY oppossed to WE ... u say that was for an MTV competition so basically u were just whoring the competition for the hell of it ? You dont actually believe ur own message ?

You better pray to God or go down on Lady luck

^ That was good though

Thanks for the feed...when I said we...i mean "London" not literally ME i see what ur saying tho...and nah...i believe in my message thats why i made a video and everything...shame MTV fixed their own competition tho lol..they chose entrees that werent even submitted to the website...and the website is the only place u could submit ur entry....shame on MTV oh well

Blizzy · 03-31-2009, 08:24 AM

This was OK....flowed well and had some multi's but on the punchline tip most were either played or forced.....overall worth reading tho.....stay up

Threyev · 03-31-2009, 04:24 PM

Dope shit. The flow was the best part of this, and made it a better feat that you could still come with pretty good punches while keeping consistent. Good shit. Stay up.

03-30-2009, 12:05 PM	#1
Fre3dom Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: London Posts: 924 Repped: 65 Repped 117 Times in 61 Posts Neg Reps: 63 Neg Repped at 17 Times in 15 Posts	Punchline flow Punchline flow Imma…lyrical rider spitting that fire Cant be fucked with, your sell by date has expired You say your better? You a liar, so when the AK buck You better pray to God or go down on Lady luck You a shady fuck so when the beef erupts Bullets will leave ya chest leaking faster then “Before I self Destruct!” I buy the lease, you steal beats like polow da don Im a beast you want beef? Catch a hollow in ya lungs You following me son, but I’ll just give you the Lama I’ll harm ya, put 3 guns on ya body like Rhianna Send you into trauma, you cant see me honestly Coz this rhyme section fell off worse than the economy Do your geography, I’m from the place where we stab kids with a blade It aint a BBQ but we’ll leave ya Ribs on a plate Ya spits are just played, pop another Tampon in Before I make you disappear like Camron did Yeah jus a lil 3 min piece good or bad hit me with it its all good

03-30-2009, 02:00 PM	#2
Rebel INS {CF} - iLLuminati ~ Rapsody - Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Ireland Posts: 11,454 Repped: 151 Repped 647 Times in 303 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 77 Times in 69 Posts	"I’m from the place where we stab kids with a blade" What happened to put the knives down ? __________________ "Fighting Ignorance every day is gettin weary" [name pending] --- The Gateway Drug --- Sometime Soon --- myspace.com/namepending08

03-30-2009, 03:37 PM	#4
Rebel INS {CF} - iLLuminati ~ Rapsody - Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Ireland Posts: 11,454 Repped: 151 Repped 647 Times in 303 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 77 Times in 69 Posts	I was just curious thats all and wanted to address the issue, seemed a bit hypocritical, and if kids get stabbed u could say THEY oppossed to WE ... u say that was for an MTV competition so basically u were just whoring the competition for the hell of it ? You dont actually believe ur own message ? You better pray to God or go down on Lady luck ^ That was good though __________________ "Fighting Ignorance every day is gettin weary" [name pending] --- The Gateway Drug --- Sometime Soon --- myspace.com/namepending08

03-31-2009, 08:24 AM	#6
Blizzy Wordsmith Join Date: May 2008 Location: In Battlefield's Posts: 3,369 Repped: 691 Repped 345 Times in 158 Posts Neg Reps: 25 Neg Repped at 26 Times in 25 Posts	This was OK....flowed well and had some multi's but on the punchline tip most were either played or forced.....overall worth reading tho.....stay up __________________ MY MUSIC CHECK IT OUT myspace.com/ttpbloodshot

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03-30-2009, 03:29 PM	#3
Fre3dom Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: London Posts: 924 Repped: 65 Repped 117 Times in 61 Posts Neg Reps: 63 Neg Repped at 17 Times in 15 Posts	Its a freestyle so im just talkin shit lol Plus that "Put the knives down" was for an MTV Competition....where I was voted number 1 out of 446 entrees by the public :) And Its a true statement I am from a place where kids get stabbed all the time...so its just describing my environment....how come a question but no feed?

03-31-2009, 04:24 PM	#7
Threyev Join Date: May 2006 Location: The Bronx Posts: 553 Repped: 82 Repped 46 Times in 29 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	Dope shit. The flow was the best part of this, and made it a better feat that you could still come with pretty good punches while keeping consistent. Good shit. Stay up.