just something i wrote

hans1992 · 03-25-2009, 04:32 PM

ok im not that good at writing freestyle but i try

my endeavor is ya death coming into ya decease
i pledge with my eyes and muder the fucking beat
got a army of talibans niggas is startin to retreat
throw niggas in lava and define kentic theory of heat
smashing niggas brains on reinforced concrete
looking at life stressing with endorsed grief
im bout to go all out with this killer preach

sofis2cated · 03-26-2009, 04:43 AM

wasn't bad for claiming to not be that good.. make it longer is all i can suggest

Threyev · 03-29-2009, 03:56 PM

Yeah try at least 12 or 14, but aim for 16 or more.

03-25-2009, 04:32 PM	#1
hans1992 Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: ct Posts: 5 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	just something i wrote just something i wrote ok im not that good at writing freestyle but i try my endeavor is ya death coming into ya decease i pledge with my eyes and muder the fucking beat got a army of talibans niggas is startin to retreat throw niggas in lava and define kentic theory of heat smashing niggas brains on reinforced concrete looking at life stressing with endorsed grief im bout to go all out with this killer preach

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03-26-2009, 04:43 AM	#2
sofis2cated California Lyricist Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Bakersfield, CA Posts: 762 Repped: 33 Repped 10 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	wasn't bad for claiming to not be that good.. make it longer is all i can suggest

03-29-2009, 03:56 PM	#3
Threyev Join Date: May 2006 Location: The Bronx Posts: 553 Repped: 82 Repped 46 Times in 29 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	Yeah try at least 12 or 14, but aim for 16 or more.