DX - Benjamin Button

DXavier23 · 12-30-2008, 04:49 PM

A life in reverse, his death before his birth
Turned out to be both a blessing and a curse
Received a blessing in the church to lessen all the hurt
But he had to wait for fate's regression that would lurk
Experiencing all his firsts, with zest and mirth
But he still somehow felt depressed and hurt
Knowing he was different from the rest of Earth
Before he eats breakfast, he digests dessert
Constantly getting younger, while others are aging
Follows the ideals under which his mother had raised him
Every time she sees him, she sees a younger Caucasian
And he sees a mother who loves him, not phased
By the look of his face when he was a baby
Unsavory, but still was given love by this lady
But then there was Daisy, a happy little child
She held the key that drove his imagination wild
They snuck out at night, became friends and connected
Even though they were on opposite ends of the spectrum
But their curiosity was equal, equally cerebral
Although they appeared to be entirely different people
Daisy grew up to be an adored dancer
His life was like having kimo before cancer
He meets an older woman that he has an affair with
If she could fix her past, shed be glad to repair it
She could kill time but couldnt kill her sorrow
Of not acting in the present, instead waitin til' tomorrow
He experiences love for the very first time
But the memory of Daisy lingered in his mind
Affairs over, becomes a soldier, wisdom gained through exposure
People question how he abstains from gettin older
His cherished mother perished and they attended her funeral
Daisy appears out the blue, looking splendid and beautiful
He married the girl that he sworn that he loved
He feared that his baby would be born as he was
But his worries were subsided, and his anxieties were lowered
When he learned that their baby's life would move forward
He wished he could stay the same age as Daisy
But he was getting younger while she was aging
He spent time with his daughter while he could
Realizing he'd soon regress back to childhood
He knew it would give Daisy stress if
She had to raise their baby and a adolescent
So one night he got dressed n', left at his discretion
He made sure to leave them all of his possessions
He loses his intelligence, everyone's irrelevant
Backwards development, his life, he cant remember it
Dementia of the brain, all the friendships that he made
And the rich life he lived just descended down the drain
He was the hands of a clock that ticked backwards
Or the eyes of a dyslexic reading through a book's chapters
The river kept flowing, but the clock stopped ticking
As the end of his life was only the beginning

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 12-31-2008, 01:21 AM

I was Old since I was young, Call me Benjamin Button.

ThA ViiRu5 · 12-31-2008, 02:08 PM

I'll press the Benjamin Button & you'll see your whole life backwards

?

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 12-31-2008, 04:23 PM

Piff Got Me Feeling Something Like a Silhouette
I See My Life Backwards, Benjamin Button Or Crystal Meth?

?

DXavier23 · 12-31-2008, 04:36 PM

yo could u guys drop some feed on this?

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 12-31-2008, 05:22 PM

My bad

Loved the Movies (old & new one)

You portrayed Benjamin just like the Movie would.. Not only did you stay On topic Very well.. But executed it perfectly.

I'm not gon post Fav. Lines.. Cuz, Well.. It's not one Of those Verses..

ThA ViiRu5 · 12-31-2008, 06:23 PM

dope.

nah i liked it, at first i wasnt going to read it b/c it looked too lengthy and then i realised, i hate people that do that

You followed the topic well, and i didnt get bored.

Constructive criticism..sometimes the lines were wordy, and some sub-topics were visited for too long.

Dont take it personally it was a very solid drop. i just refuse to go jumping up and down, waving my arms about shouting

"OH YEAAAAA 10/10 YEAAAAAAA WOOOOOOOOOOO

" like 90% of this damn board.

Blizzy · 01-01-2009, 04:26 PM

Benjamin Button is from what film?

DXavier23 · 01-03-2009, 07:01 PM

thanx for the feed

Str8Shooter · 01-03-2009, 07:43 PM

cool concept nice multies

DXavier23 · 01-05-2009, 09:24 PM

appreciate the feed family

DXavier23 · 01-11-2009, 01:31 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ThA ViiRu5

dope.

nah i liked it, at first i wasnt going to read it b/c it looked too lengthy and then i realised, i hate people that do that

You followed the topic well, and i didnt get bored.

Constructive criticism..sometimes the lines were wordy, and some sub-topics were visited for too long.

Dont take it personally it was a very solid drop. i just refuse to go jumping up and down, waving my arms about shouting

"OH YEAAAAA 10/10 YEAAAAAAA WOOOOOOOOOOO

" like 90% of this damn board.

thx for the honest feed man

Komplex · 01-14-2009, 04:16 PM

Knowing he was different from the rest of Earth
Before he eats breakfast, he digests dessert

The river kept flowing, but the clock stopped ticking
As the end of his life was only the beginning

Ah man..where do I start? Rhyme schemes and multies were dope. The story itself is very interesting. Each line made you want to read the next. The way you ended it was dope. Overall, the imagery throughout this verse was consistent and that's important when it comes to making a verse interesting. Great drop fam. Keep em comin.

G-Shook · 01-15-2009, 02:18 AM

I like how you integrated the movie into the subject of your freestlye...stay up man

DXavier23 · 01-18-2009, 05:37 PM

^^ appreciate the love

Threyev · 01-26-2009, 12:24 PM

as usual, dope shit. really liked the topic (thought the movie was sick, too), and how you went with it. excellent job.

E.Conn · 01-28-2009, 12:31 AM

A life in reverse, his death before his birth
Turned out to be both a blessing and a curse
Received a blessing in the church to lessen all the hurt
But he had to wait for fate's regression that would lurk

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Didn't see the movie but you set it off on the first 4 bars, feeling the flow had me reading the whole way through. STAY UP

KING BHOB · 01-28-2009, 04:54 PM

Best Thing Ive Seen In 2009

DXavier23 · 02-10-2009, 02:36 PM

^^ appreciate that homie

12-30-2008, 04:49 PM	#1
DXavier23 ----------DX------------- Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NYC Posts: 1,784 Repped: 193 Repped 1,685 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 1 Post	DX - Benjamin Button DX - Benjamin Button A life in reverse, his death before his birth Turned out to be both a blessing and a curse Received a blessing in the church to lessen all the hurt But he had to wait for fate's regression that would lurk Experiencing all his firsts, with zest and mirth But he still somehow felt depressed and hurt Knowing he was different from the rest of Earth Before he eats breakfast, he digests dessert Constantly getting younger, while others are aging Follows the ideals under which his mother had raised him Every time she sees him, she sees a younger Caucasian And he sees a mother who loves him, not phased By the look of his face when he was a baby Unsavory, but still was given love by this lady But then there was Daisy, a happy little child She held the key that drove his imagination wild They snuck out at night, became friends and connected Even though they were on opposite ends of the spectrum But their curiosity was equal, equally cerebral Although they appeared to be entirely different people Daisy grew up to be an adored dancer His life was like having kimo before cancer He meets an older woman that he has an affair with If she could fix her past, shed be glad to repair it She could kill time but couldnt kill her sorrow Of not acting in the present, instead waitin til' tomorrow He experiences love for the very first time But the memory of Daisy lingered in his mind Affairs over, becomes a soldier, wisdom gained through exposure People question how he abstains from gettin older His cherished mother perished and they attended her funeral Daisy appears out the blue, looking splendid and beautiful He married the girl that he sworn that he loved He feared that his baby would be born as he was But his worries were subsided, and his anxieties were lowered When he learned that their baby's life would move forward He wished he could stay the same age as Daisy But he was getting younger while she was aging He spent time with his daughter while he could Realizing he'd soon regress back to childhood He knew it would give Daisy stress if She had to raise their baby and a adolescent So one night he got dressed n', left at his discretion He made sure to leave them all of his possessions He loses his intelligence, everyone's irrelevant Backwards development, his life, he cant remember it Dementia of the brain, all the friendships that he made And the rich life he lived just descended down the drain He was the hands of a clock that ticked backwards Or the eyes of a dyslexic reading through a book's chapters The river kept flowing, but the clock stopped ticking As the end of his life was only the beginning __________________ So save me your sorrys I'm raisin a Army Revolutionary warfare with Damian Marley We sparkin da irons marchin to Zion You know how Nas be NYC state of mind I'm in Last edited by DXavier23; 12-30-2008 at 06:35 PM.

12-31-2008, 01:21 AM	#2
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 5,126 Repped: 90 Repped 375 Times in 198 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 52 Times in 38 Posts	I was Old since I was young, Call me Benjamin Button. __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

12-31-2008, 02:08 PM	#3
ThA ViiRu5 ``Enlightened Emcee::.. Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: ................ Posts: 2,733 Repped: 603 Repped 195 Times in 114 Posts Neg Reps: 86 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	I'll press the Benjamin Button & you'll see your whole life backwards ? __________________ "The only thing that comes to a sleeping man is dreams" ReCkoRd - [Victoriez]: 27 [Slipp Uppz]: 8 [KO]: 13 [TKO]: 1 ~~``!!...::Forever Undefeated::...!!``~~ HeAvYwEiGhT

12-31-2008, 04:23 PM	#4
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 5,126 Repped: 90 Repped 375 Times in 198 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 52 Times in 38 Posts	Piff Got Me Feeling Something Like a Silhouette I See My Life Backwards, Benjamin Button Or Crystal Meth?? __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

12-31-2008, 04:36 PM	#5
DXavier23 ----------DX------------- Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NYC Posts: 1,784 Repped: 193 Repped 1,685 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 1 Post	yo could u guys drop some feed on this? __________________ So save me your sorrys I'm raisin a Army Revolutionary warfare with Damian Marley We sparkin da irons marchin to Zion You know how Nas be NYC state of mind I'm in

12-31-2008, 05:22 PM	#6
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 5,126 Repped: 90 Repped 375 Times in 198 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 52 Times in 38 Posts	My bad Loved the Movies (old & new one) You portrayed Benjamin just like the Movie would.. Not only did you stay On topic Very well.. But executed it perfectly. I'm not gon post Fav. Lines.. Cuz, Well.. It's not one Of those Verses.. __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

12-31-2008, 06:23 PM	#7
ThA ViiRu5 ``Enlightened Emcee::.. Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: ................ Posts: 2,733 Repped: 603 Repped 195 Times in 114 Posts Neg Reps: 86 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	dope. nah i liked it, at first i wasnt going to read it b/c it looked too lengthy and then i realised, i hate people that do that You followed the topic well, and i didnt get bored. Constructive criticism..sometimes the lines were wordy, and some sub-topics were visited for too long. Dont take it personally it was a very solid drop. i just refuse to go jumping up and down, waving my arms about shouting "OH YEAAAAA 10/10 YEAAAAAAA WOOOOOOOOOOO " like 90% of this damn board. __________________ "The only thing that comes to a sleeping man is dreams" ReCkoRd - [Victoriez]: 27 [Slipp Uppz]: 8 [KO]: 13 [TKO]: 1 ~~``!!...::Forever Undefeated::...!!``~~ HeAvYwEiGhT

01-01-2009, 04:26 PM	#8
Blizzy Wordsmith Join Date: May 2008 Location: In Battlefield's Posts: 3,437 Repped: 722 Repped 357 Times in 167 Posts Neg Reps: 29 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 26 Posts	Benjamin Button is from what film? __________________ MY MUSIC CHECK IT OUT myspace.com/ttpbloodshot

01-03-2009, 07:01 PM	#9
DXavier23 ----------DX------------- Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NYC Posts: 1,784 Repped: 193 Repped 1,685 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 1 Post	thanx for the feed __________________ So save me your sorrys I'm raisin a Army Revolutionary warfare with Damian Marley We sparkin da irons marchin to Zion You know how Nas be NYC state of mind I'm in

01-03-2009, 07:43 PM	#10
Str8Shooter Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: In the Dungeons of Rap Posts: 62 Repped: 1 Repped 5 Times in 5 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	cool concept nice multies

01-05-2009, 09:24 PM	#11
DXavier23 ----------DX------------- Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NYC Posts: 1,784 Repped: 193 Repped 1,685 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 1 Post	appreciate the feed family __________________ So save me your sorrys I'm raisin a Army Revolutionary warfare with Damian Marley We sparkin da irons marchin to Zion You know how Nas be NYC state of mind I'm in

01-14-2009, 04:16 PM	#13
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Knowing he was different from the rest of Earth Before he eats breakfast, he digests dessert The river kept flowing, but the clock stopped ticking As the end of his life was only the beginning Ah man..where do I start? Rhyme schemes and multies were dope. The story itself is very interesting. Each line made you want to read the next. The way you ended it was dope. Overall, the imagery throughout this verse was consistent and that's important when it comes to making a verse interesting. Great drop fam. Keep em comin. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz Last edited by Komplex; 01-14-2009 at 04:25 PM.

01-15-2009, 02:18 AM	#14
G-Shook BANN ME IF U CAN! Join Date: Feb 2006 Posts: 2,077 Repped: 2 Repped 107 Times in 25 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	I like how you integrated the movie into the subject of your freestlye...stay up man __________________ "...Overrated."

01-18-2009, 05:37 PM	#15
DXavier23 ----------DX------------- Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NYC Posts: 1,784 Repped: 193 Repped 1,685 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 1 Post	^^ appreciate the love __________________ So save me your sorrys I'm raisin a Army Revolutionary warfare with Damian Marley We sparkin da irons marchin to Zion You know how Nas be NYC state of mind I'm in

01-26-2009, 12:24 PM	#16
Threyev Join Date: May 2006 Location: The Bronx Posts: 553 Repped: 82 Repped 46 Times in 29 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	as usual, dope shit. really liked the topic (thought the movie was sick, too), and how you went with it. excellent job.

01-28-2009, 12:31 AM	#17
E.Conn Join Date: Mar 2004 Posts: 10 Repped: 1 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	A life in reverse, his death before his birth Turned out to be both a blessing and a curse Received a blessing in the church to lessen all the hurt But he had to wait for fate's regression that would lurk ---------- Didn't see the movie but you set it off on the first 4 bars, feeling the flow had me reading the whole way through. STAY UP

01-28-2009, 04:54 PM	#18
KING BHOB P.O.L.O/Attention:Deficit Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: East Side Pennsylvania Posts: 2,195 Repped: 0 Repped 590 Times in 201 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 25 Times in 20 Posts	Best Thing Ive Seen In 2009 __________________ >\|>\|>\|> http://twitter.com/KingBhob <\|<\|<\|< >>>>>>>LIFE

02-10-2009, 02:36 PM	#19
DXavier23 ----------DX------------- Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NYC Posts: 1,784 Repped: 193 Repped 1,685 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 1 Post	^^ appreciate that homie __________________ So save me your sorrys I'm raisin a Army Revolutionary warfare with Damian Marley We sparkin da irons marchin to Zion You know how Nas be NYC state of mind I'm in

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