Little Girl Lost

TheRealProtege · 08-31-2008, 06:41 PM

Not the usual multi/punchline shit i usually drop, yet if you have a hiphop eye you can still see its very lyrical.. nyway just showin mah versatility. Stories bout a girl wit an abusive father...

stacys eleven N god aint ever bothered to bless her
shes poor, has no friends.. n her father molests her
from the time she was a baby, her life has been shit
so at night she just sits, stickin tha knife in her wrist
shes insane from the pressure... pain is her pleasure
its a shame she aint ever.. seen her brain as a treasure
the rain aint been measured though she drownin in tears
wishin to god.. that she could be surrounded by peers
the sound in her ears; Death. All she sees is a grave
her weakened knees cave n she pleads to be saved
he broke in the door Stacy was choked to the floor
he tore off her clothes.. it's time to open you whore
she begged him to stop, but he continued to rape her
stuffin himself inside her, tearin her tissues like paper
when he finished, he turn to her n said.. I Love You
she sat in a corner, looked at him n said, "Fuck You!"
thats when he flipped.. so she got smacked in her lip
if you shut the fuck up this wouldnt happen ya bitch
he laughed n he spit, and Said the ways of a whore..
then left the room in silence as she layed on the floor

..A LITTLE GIRL LOST..

If ya feel mah shit, i got music in da audio section and a battle floating around in the battle section, drop some love and i will mos def return it.

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 08-31-2008, 07:14 PM

Get A Razor, Ya Emo Fuck.

Bunny_Rabbit · 08-31-2008, 08:16 PM

"God" is capitalized dummy; you emo ass nigga.

TheRealProtege · 09-01-2008, 04:41 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by *Pistol Banger*

Get A Razor, Ya Emo Fuck.

dude shut your fat ass up. you know nothing about music. all you do is dickride your so called " vets " on this site. stay away from my threads you faggot.

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 09-01-2008, 04:44 AM

Don't Be Mad MM06 ^^^^^

I'm Quite Sure You Was In My Thread Saying My Audio Surprised You. SO You Lose And Fail.. 1 Yaself.

TheRealProtege · 09-01-2008, 05:00 AM

cuz unline you i dont hate or dickride niggas? i speak the truth if im feeling something i say i feel it i dont give a fuck who spit it if somethings wack i say its wack

unlike your stupid dickriding co tailing ass

TheMadWriter · 09-01-2008, 06:26 PM

I think it's okay, a little bit exaggerated though.

TheRealProtege · 09-02-2008, 01:15 PM

hmmmm. thanks 4 da feed

Blizzy · 09-02-2008, 05:36 PM

how can a fictional story be exaggerated???

TheRealProtege · 09-02-2008, 08:51 PM

LoL thats what i was thinking...

TheMadWriter · 09-02-2008, 08:56 PM

I just mean the subject and all of this that happens to it, an interesting sequence of events but I think the kicking down the door and what not is exaggerated. Baller you need to get the fuck off my dick and stop fucking with me man, i'm serious. I didn't do shit to you, so fall back.

Tom Chambers · 09-02-2008, 10:58 PM

^lol.........baller wasn't anywhere in this thread....................................some1 got some dick on their mind?

TheMadWriter · 09-03-2008, 11:33 AM

Damn, you're right...fuck both them faggots LOL

Dan Russell · 09-04-2008, 12:12 PM

fuck a bitch holla at my thread 1

Blizzy · 09-04-2008, 01:11 PM

TheMadWriter were you talkin to me? BTW Chambers just mugged you off...read his and yours comments again...lmao

youngking187 · 09-04-2008, 06:03 PM

I waz feelin dis joint..decent concept..flow waz good..keep em comin.

crazy_mofo · 09-05-2008, 01:55 AM

this was bad, forced like the shit im about to go take

anyone who says this had good flow should die

you should die

J~Souljah · 09-05-2008, 11:01 AM

^^^^it actually flowed greatly.......

crazy_mofo · 09-05-2008, 03:48 PM

^^^ naw

from the time she was a baby, her life has been shit
so at night she just sits, stickin tha knife in her wrist

when he finished, he turn to her n said.. I Love You
she sat in a corner, looked at him n said, "Fuck You!"

thats when he flipped.. so she got smacked in her lip
if you shut the fuck up this wouldnt happen ya bitch

no flow in these bars

flow X 3 bars with no flow = no flow

lemme know if you need me to go over that again

TheRealProtege · 09-05-2008, 05:03 PM

^^. you my friend, are a hater. hello =)

crazy_mofo · 09-05-2008, 05:15 PM

how you doin

J~Souljah · 09-05-2008, 05:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by crazy_mofo

^^^ naw

from the time she was a baby, her life has been shit
so at night she just sits, stickin tha knife in her wrist

when he finished, he turn to her n said.. I Love You
she sat in a corner, looked at him n said, \"Fuck You!\"

thats when he flipped.. so she got smacked in her lip
if you shut the fuck up this wouldnt happen ya bitch

no flow in these bars

flow X 3 bars with no flow = no flow

lemme know if you need me to go over that again

ummm the middle bar was questionable...everything else flowed well

dont u have a job or somethin'....or do u donate to sperm bankz 4 ya money?

either way...drop sumthin of ya own or stop hatin in dudes thread

TheRealProtege · 11-02-2008, 04:14 PM

hahahahhahaa

TheRealProtege · 03-04-2009, 06:00 PM

tell me this wasnt slept on -_-

Witty Qwan · 03-04-2009, 08:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TheMadWriter

I just mean the subject and all of this that happens to it, an interesting sequence of events but I think the kicking down the door and what not is exaggerated. Baller you need to get the fuck off my dick and stop fucking with me man, i'm serious. I didn't do shit to you, so fall back.

wtf?

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tom Chambers

^lol.........baller wasn't anywhere in this thread....................................some1 got some dick on their mind?

lol

thats when he flipped.. so she got smacked in her lip
if you shut the fuck up this wouldnt happen ya bitch

lmaooooooooooo....that reminds me of sum eminem type ish...but great story telling...flowed good., with the exception of maybe 1 bar...i assume the picture u was tryna paint wouldve resembled the one posted...and it did, somewhat depressing piece...dont see how some of the dudes in here could hate on it...but keep doing u...stay ^

08-31-2008, 06:41 PM	#1
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	Little Girl Lost Little Girl Lost Not the usual multi/punchline shit i usually drop, yet if you have a hiphop eye you can still see its very lyrical.. nyway just showin mah versatility. Stories bout a girl wit an abusive father... stacys eleven N god aint ever bothered to bless her shes poor, has no friends.. n her father molests her from the time she was a baby, her life has been shit so at night she just sits, stickin tha knife in her wrist shes insane from the pressure... pain is her pleasure its a shame she aint ever.. seen her brain as a treasure the rain aint been measured though she drownin in tears wishin to god.. that she could be surrounded by peers the sound in her ears; Death. All she sees is a grave her weakened knees cave n she pleads to be saved he broke in the door Stacy was choked to the floor he tore off her clothes.. it's time to open you whore she begged him to stop, but he continued to rape her stuffin himself inside her, tearin her tissues like paper when he finished, he turn to her n said.. I Love You she sat in a corner, looked at him n said, "Fuck You!" thats when he flipped.. so she got smacked in her lip if you shut the fuck up this wouldnt happen ya bitch he laughed n he spit, and Said the ways of a whore.. then left the room in silence as she layed on the floor ..A LITTLE GIRL LOST.. If ya feel mah shit, i got music in da audio section and a battle floating around in the battle section, drop some love and i will mos def return it. __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag Last edited by TheRealProtege; 08-31-2008 at 06:44 PM.

08-31-2008, 07:14 PM	#2
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,901 Repped: 79 Repped 310 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Get A Razor, Ya Emo Fuck. __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

08-31-2008, 08:16 PM	#3
Bunny_Rabbit Rorshak Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: The Tangent Universe Posts: 885 Repped: 44 Repped 117 Times in 52 Posts Neg Reps: 52 Neg Repped at 59 Times in 54 Posts	"God" is capitalized dummy; you emo ass nigga. __________________ Last edited by Bunny_Rabbit; 10-14-2009 at 03:50 PM. Reason: Protege's a depressed little faggot.

09-01-2008, 04:44 AM	#5
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,901 Repped: 79 Repped 310 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Don't Be Mad MM06 ^^^^^ I'm Quite Sure You Was In My Thread Saying My Audio Surprised You. SO You Lose And Fail.. 1 Yaself. __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

09-01-2008, 05:00 AM	#6
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	cuz unline you i dont hate or dickride niggas? i speak the truth if im feeling something i say i feel it i dont give a fuck who spit it if somethings wack i say its wack unlike your stupid dickriding co tailing ass __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

09-01-2008, 06:26 PM	#7
TheMadWriter Veteran Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Virginia Posts: 1,376 Repped: 149 Repped 414 Times in 245 Posts Neg Reps: 68 Neg Repped at 153 Times in 97 Posts	I think it's okay, a little bit exaggerated though.

09-02-2008, 01:15 PM	#8
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	hmmmm. thanks 4 da feed __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

09-02-2008, 05:36 PM	#9
Blizzy Wordsmith Join Date: May 2008 Location: In Battlefield's Posts: 3,359 Repped: 687 Repped 345 Times in 158 Posts Neg Reps: 25 Neg Repped at 25 Times in 24 Posts	how can a fictional story be exaggerated??? __________________ MY MUSIC CHECK IT OUT myspace.com/ttpbloodshot

09-02-2008, 08:51 PM	#10
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	LoL thats what i was thinking... __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

09-02-2008, 08:56 PM	#11
TheMadWriter Veteran Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Virginia Posts: 1,376 Repped: 149 Repped 414 Times in 245 Posts Neg Reps: 68 Neg Repped at 153 Times in 97 Posts	I just mean the subject and all of this that happens to it, an interesting sequence of events but I think the kicking down the door and what not is exaggerated. Baller you need to get the fuck off my dick and stop fucking with me man, i'm serious. I didn't do shit to you, so fall back.

09-02-2008, 10:58 PM	#12
Tom Chambers AkA Sur-Vis-U-All Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: pittsburgh Posts: 11,277 Repped: 132 Repped 477 Times in 296 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 68 Times in 54 Posts	^lol.........baller wasn't anywhere in this thread....................................some1 got some dick on their mind?

09-03-2008, 11:33 AM	#13
TheMadWriter Veteran Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Virginia Posts: 1,376 Repped: 149 Repped 414 Times in 245 Posts Neg Reps: 68 Neg Repped at 153 Times in 97 Posts	Damn, you're right...fuck both them faggots LOL

09-04-2008, 12:12 PM	#14
Dan Russell D-Block 4 Life Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Perth City Posts: 1,374 Repped: 6 Repped 34 Times in 32 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	fuck a bitch holla at my thread 1

09-04-2008, 01:11 PM	#15
Blizzy Wordsmith Join Date: May 2008 Location: In Battlefield's Posts: 3,359 Repped: 687 Repped 345 Times in 158 Posts Neg Reps: 25 Neg Repped at 25 Times in 24 Posts	TheMadWriter were you talkin to me? BTW Chambers just mugged you off...read his and yours comments again...lmao __________________ MY MUSIC CHECK IT OUT myspace.com/ttpbloodshot

09-04-2008, 06:03 PM	#16
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,517 Repped: 305 Repped 607 Times in 143 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	I waz feelin dis joint..decent concept..flow waz good..keep em comin.

09-05-2008, 01:55 AM	#17
crazy_mofo Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 156 Repped: 1 Repped 4 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 4 Neg Repped at 6 Times in 5 Posts	this was bad, forced like the shit im about to go take anyone who says this had good flow should die you should die

09-05-2008, 11:01 AM	#18
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	^^^^it actually flowed greatly.......

09-05-2008, 03:48 PM	#19
crazy_mofo Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 156 Repped: 1 Repped 4 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 4 Neg Repped at 6 Times in 5 Posts	^^^ naw from the time she was a baby, her life has been shit so at night she just sits, stickin tha knife in her wrist when he finished, he turn to her n said.. I Love You she sat in a corner, looked at him n said, "Fuck You!" thats when he flipped.. so she got smacked in her lip if you shut the fuck up this wouldnt happen ya bitch no flow in these bars flow X 3 bars with no flow = no flow lemme know if you need me to go over that again

09-05-2008, 05:03 PM	#20
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	^^. you my friend, are a hater. hello =) __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

09-05-2008, 05:15 PM	#21
crazy_mofo Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 156 Repped: 1 Repped 4 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 4 Neg Repped at 6 Times in 5 Posts	how you doin

11-02-2008, 04:14 PM	#23
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	hahahahhahaa __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

03-04-2009, 06:00 PM	#24
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	tell me this wasnt slept on -_- __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

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