Im On Top 1st Freestyle Ever(Mini Freestyle)

13ubba · 08-20-2008, 11:51 AM

Iam On Top Im Looking Down
At You Nigggas Flop Ha!
That wassup There is No Hope
Nigga So Grab a Rope Nigga & Kill Yourself HA!

But will In Improve In The Upcomin Plz Dont Hate lol

billgatz · 08-20-2008, 12:31 PM

this shit needs some soap... wow woops

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 08-20-2008, 01:07 PM

Die Slow Pop A Pill

Jay-T · 08-20-2008, 01:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by 13ubba

Iam On Top Im Looking Down
At You Nigggas Flop Ha!
That wassup There is No Hope
Nigga So Grab a Rope Nigga & Kill Yourself HA!

But will In Improve In The Upcomin Plz Dont Hate lol

LMAO...

Shogun · 08-20-2008, 01:25 PM

If you're being serious: you know this is not good. You need to write, write, write & write some more. Don't post another "freestyle" until you think that it is approaching "good". Then we'll see if you've improved.

Practice doesn't make perfect itself; you need to have other attributes. However, enough practice could see you approach mediocre. Good luck.

13ubba · 08-20-2008, 01:37 PM

Ye I No Lol Lmao I have to write more this just Medicore Itsz 1st one ever just give it more tyme im practicing everyday so itsz all good

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 08-20-2008, 01:48 PM

Lmao At People Leaving Feed When he Dropped 2 Bars.

Shogun · 08-20-2008, 01:56 PM

It's a lot worse than mediocre.

And hey, 2 bars means he might be young. In that case, he's going to need a mentor. Tell me 13ubba, do you like ponies &/or sugary treats?

Tom Chambers · 08-20-2008, 06:29 PM

^who doesn't?

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 08-20-2008, 11:07 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by T0M CH4MBERS

^who doesn't?

Co-Sign

youngking187 · 08-21-2008, 01:48 AM

these two bars better then my
full verses...........

TheRealProtege · 08-21-2008, 04:34 AM

why are people even commening on this? his shit wasnt even a full two bars, let alone that shit didnt even rhyme? i mean are you mentally retarded? why would you ever even think about posting this?

08-20-2008, 11:51 AM	#1
13ubba Veteran Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: canada Posts: 3,402 Repped: 468 Repped 1,503 Times in 357 Posts Neg Reps: 441 Neg Repped at 159 Times in 114 Posts	Im On Top 1st Freestyle Ever(Mini Freestyle) Im On Top 1st Freestyle Ever(Mini Freestyle) Iam On Top Im Looking Down At You Nigggas Flop Ha! That wassup There is No Hope Nigga So Grab a Rope Nigga & Kill Yourself HA! But will In Improve In The Upcomin Plz Dont Hate lol

08-20-2008, 01:07 PM	#3
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,902 Repped: 79 Repped 311 Times in 147 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Die Slow Pop A Pill __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

08-20-2008, 01:48 PM	#7
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,902 Repped: 79 Repped 311 Times in 147 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Lmao At People Leaving Feed When he Dropped 2 Bars. __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

08-21-2008, 01:48 AM	#11
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,517 Repped: 305 Repped 607 Times in 143 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	these two bars better then my full verses........... __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

08-21-2008, 04:34 AM	#12
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 2,026 Repped: 165 Repped 593 Times in 171 Posts Neg Reps: 149 Neg Repped at 86 Times in 74 Posts	why are people even commening on this? his shit wasnt even a full two bars, let alone that shit didnt even rhyme? i mean are you mentally retarded? why would you ever even think about posting this? __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

08-20-2008, 12:31 PM	#2
billgatz Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: Queens Bridge USA Posts: 31 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	this shit needs some soap... wow woops

08-20-2008, 01:25 PM	#5
Shogun Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 718 Repped: 0 Repped 13 Times in 12 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	If you're being serious: you know this is not good. You need to write, write, write & write some more. Don't post another "freestyle" until you think that it is approaching "good". Then we'll see if you've improved. Practice doesn't make perfect itself; you need to have other attributes. However, enough practice could see you approach mediocre. Good luck.

08-20-2008, 01:37 PM	#6
13ubba Veteran Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: canada Posts: 3,402 Repped: 468 Repped 1,503 Times in 357 Posts Neg Reps: 441 Neg Repped at 159 Times in 114 Posts	Ye I No Lol Lmao I have to write more this just Medicore Itsz 1st one ever just give it more tyme im practicing everyday so itsz all good

08-20-2008, 01:56 PM	#8
Shogun Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 718 Repped: 0 Repped 13 Times in 12 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	It's a lot worse than mediocre. And hey, 2 bars means he might be young. In that case, he's going to need a mentor. Tell me 13ubba, do you like ponies &/or sugary treats?

08-20-2008, 06:29 PM	#9
Tom Chambers AkA Sur-Vis-U-All Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: pittsburgh Posts: 11,278 Repped: 132 Repped 477 Times in 296 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 68 Times in 54 Posts	^who doesn't?

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