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Old 08-17-2008, 11:14 AM   #1
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my mindstate is zoned out
cuz of the chron that waz inhaled n smoked out
brain damaged from liqour...hopin ill die quiker
verse full of emotion like a shot u gotta feel it nigga
used to b ahead of THE GAME now im way back like lloyd banks
feeling like niggas r duckin my sharp bars they tryna avoid shanks
actin like im not ill...like i had no healthcare
a mind like mine can't b bought nigga my wealths rare
zonin out feelin like jay -z in a beach chair
or on reasonable doubt when he waz feelin it
drugs are almost gone do u kno how it feels to b feindin shit?
gotta b worse then feelin sick..i cant evn breathe i quit
i stopped smokin for about two months now
but im feelin like i need a blunt right now
thats why i write now...
just to keep me away from drugs now...
...but im still zoned the fuck out...
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Old 08-17-2008, 03:21 PM   #2
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ya shits decent bro....but try to use ya grammar better....you had some misused words....kinda forced to rhyme....think out ya shit a lil more but make it natural n dont force it...i'll show examples if yu feel the need for em
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Old 08-17-2008, 03:44 PM   #3
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^like Baller said it wasn't to bad...flow was OK...had multi's and a deep side to it...stay up...
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