[V]enting by ThA [V]iiRu5 - - - * [V]

ThA ViiRu5 · 08-14-2008, 03:15 AM

..You can follow that of rumours, Tha Virus's diagnostics call it an automatic tumour..
..when the propriety of society is to pull an MJ or a Robert Downey Junior..
..copy-cats of Bueller, they may stave off school but they not cool..
..in a world where the pay off rules, they wont take our views but they'll taste our food..
..and they may not lose, there's no urgence, lost deterrence, clouded views an unwelcome occurence..
..Acerbic.. justice served cold so the hottest heroes never serve it..
..Learn it. b/c what was once a mission's now a prison, a prism.. they dont want to step out of the limelight..
..they can't see when the time's right, kuz they don't notice time's flight..
..a climbing crime plight..crying cracked tears for the mother of a son..
..who loved him number one, Please....no eternal slumber puns..
..But what about the brother who thought that he'd wake up..
..who grew up around fake thugs, forced to participate in a late love..
..for he has no memories, just pictures and "Im so sorrys" from his mommy..
..the women who collapsed facing her dead son's clothes when she opened up the laundry..
..& calmly, I sit here writing about my family and my brother's SIDS disease..
..Jealous of the other kids he sees, i utter the ghost of a missing plea..
..It goes unanswered but i value life now, enough not to put the mic down..
..we need to start educating our kids right now..
..I'm often amazed at the kind of stuff they don't know..
..like "their", "they're" and "there", like "Lose" is only spelt with one "O"..
..I almost go crazy in the calm and quiet..
..my thoughts scream too loud, I almost start a riot..
..and i start to notice how erratic my topics are..
..a 5-star general? you may have lost a star..
.."Virus, at the top is where they rank you", "Please man, any number of cats could spank you"..
..I'm overrated myself, I don't need 10/10's all I need is one thank you..

Written to the beat of "America" by Nas

ITasteSandwich · 08-14-2008, 04:29 AM

wasn't feeling this, too long and too stretched but hey, at least you tried

Projec F2D · 08-14-2008, 04:32 AM

Dude I Didnt Even Read The Whole Thing But I Gotta Prop For The Bueller Line Thats My Fav Movie So The Reference Was A Surprise

Edit:

This Was Very Good Yea Your Lines Are Allows Stretch But Thats Your Signature It Sets You Apart From Others

But The Flow Was On Point, Very Interesting/Entertaining Topic(I Was Writing One Similar Until My Computer Restarted Itself), Nice Vocabulary, Mulites, & Punches

So Thank You For This Drop I Enjoyed It

ThA ViiRu5 · 08-14-2008, 01:04 PM

^^ no problem man. Thank you for your feed. Much love.

Yea i was trying to make this a tighter piece but I started getting really into it and kind of rambled for awhile.

anyways, more feed would be appreciated.

08-14-2008, 03:15 AM	#1
ThA ViiRu5 ``Enlightened Emcee::.. Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: ................ Posts: 2,617 Repped: 525 Repped 179 Times in 104 Posts Neg Reps: 81 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	*[V]enting by ThA [V]iiRu5 - - - [V] [V]enting by ThA [V]iiRu5 - - - * [V]** ..You can follow that of rumours, Tha Virus's diagnostics call it an automatic tumour.. ..when the propriety of society is to pull an MJ or a Robert Downey Junior.. ..copy-cats of Bueller, they may stave off school but they not cool.. ..in a world where the pay off rules, they wont take our views but they'll taste our food.. ..and they may not lose, there's no urgence, lost deterrence, clouded views an unwelcome occurence.. ..Acerbic.. justice served cold so the hottest heroes never serve it.. ..Learn it. b/c what was once a mission's now a prison, a prism.. they dont want to step out of the limelight.. ..they can't see when the time's right, kuz they don't notice time's flight.. ..a climbing crime plight..crying cracked tears for the mother of a son.. ..who loved him number one, Please....no eternal slumber puns.. ..But what about the brother who thought that he'd wake up.. ..who grew up around fake thugs, forced to participate in a late love.. ..for he has no memories, just pictures and "Im so sorrys" from his mommy.. ..the women who collapsed facing her dead son's clothes when she opened up the laundry.. ..& calmly, I sit here writing about my family and my brother's SIDS disease.. ..Jealous of the other kids he sees, i utter the ghost of a missing plea.. ..It goes unanswered but i value life now, enough not to put the mic down.. ..we need to start educating our kids right now.. ..I'm often amazed at the kind of stuff they don't know.. ..like "their", "they're" and "there", like "Lose" is only spelt with one "O".. ..I almost go crazy in the calm and quiet.. ..my thoughts scream too loud, I almost start a riot.. ..and i start to notice how erratic my topics are.. ..a 5-star general? you may have lost a star.. .."Virus, at the top is where they rank you", "Please man, any number of cats could spank you".. ..I'm overrated myself, I don't need 10/10's all I need is one thank you.. Written to the beat of "America" by Nas __________________ "The only thing that comes to a sleeping man is dreams" ReCkoRd - [Victoriez]: 27 [Slipp Uppz]: 8 [KO]: 13 [TKO]: 1 ~~``!!...::Forever Undefeated::...!!``~~ HeAvYwEiGhT

08-14-2008, 04:32 AM	#3
Projec F2D TheTributeToUs.Blogspot.C Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: TheTributeToUs.Blogspot.Com my blog Posts: 674 Repped: 53 Repped 217 Times in 79 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Dude I Didnt Even Read The Whole Thing But I Gotta Prop For The Bueller Line Thats My Fav Movie So The Reference Was A Surprise Edit: This Was Very Good Yea Your Lines Are Allows Stretch But Thats Your Signature It Sets You Apart From Others But The Flow Was On Point, Very Interesting/Entertaining Topic(I Was Writing One Similar Until My Computer Restarted Itself), Nice Vocabulary, Mulites, & Punches So Thank You For This Drop I Enjoyed It __________________ The Team Is GT Only Niggas I'm Cool Wit On My XI Bred Jordan, Ya Know Original Bull Shit- ++BoRn++

08-14-2008, 01:04 PM	#4
ThA ViiRu5 ``Enlightened Emcee::.. Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: ................ Posts: 2,617 Repped: 525 Repped 179 Times in 104 Posts Neg Reps: 81 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	^^ no problem man. Thank you for your feed. Much love. Yea i was trying to make this a tighter piece but I started getting really into it and kind of rambled for awhile. anyways, more feed would be appreciated. __________________ "The only thing that comes to a sleeping man is dreams" ReCkoRd - [Victoriez]: 27 [Slipp Uppz]: 8 [KO]: 13 [TKO]: 1 ~~``!!...::Forever Undefeated::...!!``~~ HeAvYwEiGhT

Thread Tools
Show Printable Version Email this Page
Display Modes
Linear Mode Switch to Hybrid Mode Switch to Threaded Mode

08-14-2008, 04:29 AM	#2
ITasteSandwich Banned Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Minnesota Posts: 59 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	wasn't feeling this, too long and too stretched but hey, at least you tried