Movin' These Keys

Lil Brizzle · 08-06-2008, 02:27 AM

this is just a metaphor drop i thought about a few days ago.....its a drop where when u read it.....u could read two stories at once......ive focused more on the concept than the lyricism right here.....ive also focused on alot of wordplay.....this story is about either a thief who has managed to picklocked his way into a house or a piano player who has fucked up during a concert.......btw i got my inspiration from the song "Piano Man" by gunit.....haha......i turned the hook into a metaphor somehow but here it is......the ending also provides another meaning in the same word =P

Hear the sounds of the "piano" while locating ~ the ~ ground
Treat ya hands like a "tuner" cause they be rotating ~ around
But instead of making ~ a ~ sound, just get ya sight ~ on ~ the ~ "chord"
Let's stay soft cause a mistake would enlighten ~ the ~ porch
Make a "press" through the "notes" to cover up ~ ya ~ mess
Fast planning in the dark is the type of luck ~ that's ~ best
Fingers over the "flat" without an expression of a dumping ~ face
But the heart changes once the guilty conscience comes ~ in ~ place
Money making's the future, your abilities solve ~ the ~ problem
Get ya mission accomplished without the revolver ~ on ~ 'em
Save your last "resorts" till he finds your pending ~ the ~ prank
So put your feet on the "pedal" before you end ~ with ~ a ~ bang
Halt up to a "stand" cause the clap ~ is ~ on
Realize how I've been movin' these "keys"? The screen shows the rappers ~ song!!!!!

youngking187 · 08-06-2008, 02:35 AM

u gettin better...
keep practicing and u'll get even better..
u got wayz to go..but if u keep tryin
u will get better..dont let no body tell
u..u cant do this shit..stay up kid....

Lil Brizzle · 08-06-2008, 02:38 AM

thanks man......this was just an experimental drop btw.....i wasnt so confident about it.....but good looks on the feed.....

Lil Brizzle · 08-06-2008, 04:07 AM

uppin for more feed....

ReFleXiOn · 08-06-2008, 04:54 AM

this was pretty good, areas could've been altered differently to make the metaphors more impressing and such, but overall I'm rather impressed...you took a concept and multiplied it's intention with slight compexity. However, sometimes a LESS direct approach can stand for a more genuine piece, a head scratcher if u will. Plus lyricism/vocabulary always come in handy...but as stated this is pretty solid man, specially since I don't recall reading too much from you...stay up and do you playa...

p.s. return the feed on my drop if you can

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Lil Brizzle · 08-06-2008, 05:12 AM

thanks reflexion.....appreciated ya feed....and ur drop's also solid.....

DOJA FLOPS HARD · 08-06-2008, 06:05 AM

good looks homie like the concept.

Lil Brizzle · 08-06-2008, 08:13 AM

thanks for the feed doja flops hard......

Lil Brizzle · 08-06-2008, 10:00 AM

uppin for feed.......

abominor · 08-06-2008, 10:39 AM

Nice one Brizzle

Lil Brizzle · 08-06-2008, 12:57 PM

thanks homie......ill keep a look out for ya beat too.....

Bunny_Rabbit · 08-06-2008, 09:52 PM

Do you seriously have to always be a G Unit Stan? I mean, you said Curtis was better than Graduation. What kind of shit is that? You know Kanye shits on 50 anyday. I mean, he used to be good back in the day, but he just sucks ass and you need to quit riding G Unit all the time. Anyway, this was good. The metaphors were pretty nice and they sounded alright. 7/10

Lil Brizzle · 08-06-2008, 11:43 PM

im not being a gunit stan.......curtis was better than graduation in my opinion because it the standout tracks were better.......i didnt really like any song in graduation.....i think kanye is overrated as a producer.......and u should take a listen to T.O.S.......thats a good album....and the inspiration i got from this song "Piano Man" is also a good song......but thanks for the feed.....

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 08-07-2008, 12:15 AM

Omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! A metaphor for typing verses because you'll never record a song!

Lil Brizzle · 08-07-2008, 01:19 AM

^^ stfu and give feed.....and ive recorded some songs....

DOJA FLOPS HARD · 08-07-2008, 01:40 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by MarshallMathers06

Do you seriously have to always be a G Unit Stan? I mean, you said Curtis was better than Graduation. What kind of shit is that? You know Kanye shits on 50 anyday. I mean, he used to be good back in the day, but he just sucks ass and you need to quit riding G Unit all the time. Anyway, this was good. The metaphors were pretty nice and they sounded alright. 7/10

curtis > graduation anyday bitch boy.

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 08-07-2008, 01:42 AM

Nastradamus>>>Curtis

Lil Brizzle · 08-07-2008, 01:44 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DOJA FLOPS HARD

curtis > graduation anyday bitch boy.

^^ exactly

straight to the bank > cant tell me nothing

ayo technology > stronger

i get money > good life

ill still kill > homecoming

DOJA FLOPS HARD · 08-07-2008, 01:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by *Pistol Banger*

Omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! A metaphor for typing verses because you'll never record a song!

shut da fuk up faggot. his verse > your life.

young trey · 08-07-2008, 01:47 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DOJA FLOPS HARD

shut da fuk up faggot. his verse > your life.

smh lmfaoooooooooo

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 08-07-2008, 01:47 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lil Brizzle

^^ exactly

straight to the bank > cant tell me nothing

ayo technology > stronger

i get money > good life

ill still kill > homecoming

Lmaooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooo

And DOJA... Try Not To Kill Yourself.

DOJA FLOPS HARD · 08-07-2008, 01:47 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by *Pistol Banger*

Nastradamus>>>Curtis

nigga wat you talkin bout. nastradums = garbage, curtis = classic.

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 08-07-2008, 01:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DOJA FLOPS HARD

nigga wat you talkin bout. nastradums = garbage, curtis = classic.

Ima Just Stop Now

DOJA FLOPS HARD · 08-07-2008, 01:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by *Pistol Banger*

Lmaooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooo

And DOJA... Try Not To Kill Yourself.

fuk up u little bitch. go suk on aids tipped dik and choke to death for runnin ya mouth like that.

Lil Brizzle · 08-07-2008, 01:51 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by *Pistol Banger*

Lmaooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ooooo

And DOJA... Try Not To Kill Yourself.

cant tell me nothing, stronger, good life, homecoming are all bad songs.....not only bad.....horrible songs.....

08-06-2008, 02:27 AM	#1
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	Movin' These Keys Movin' These Keys this is just a metaphor drop i thought about a few days ago.....its a drop where when u read it.....u could read two stories at once......ive focused more on the concept than the lyricism right here.....ive also focused on alot of wordplay.....this story is about either a thief who has managed to picklocked his way into a house or a piano player who has fucked up during a concert.......btw i got my inspiration from the song "Piano Man" by gunit.....haha......i turned the hook into a metaphor somehow but here it is......the ending also provides another meaning in the same word =P Hear the sounds of the "piano" while locating ~ the ~ ground Treat ya hands like a "tuner" cause they be rotating ~ around But instead of making ~ a ~ sound, just get ya sight ~ on ~ the ~ "chord" Let's stay soft cause a mistake would enlighten ~ the ~ porch Make a "press" through the "notes" to cover up ~ ya ~ mess Fast planning in the dark is the type of luck ~ that's ~ best Fingers over the "flat" without an expression of a dumping ~ face But the heart changes once the guilty conscience comes ~ in ~ place Money making's the future, your abilities solve ~ the ~ problem Get ya mission accomplished without the revolver ~ on ~ 'em Save your last "resorts" till he finds your pending ~ the ~ prank So put your feet on the "pedal" before you end ~ with ~ a ~ bang Halt up to a "stand" cause the clap ~ is ~ on Realize how I've been movin' these "keys"? The screen shows the rappers ~ song!!!!! __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-06-2008, 02:35 AM	#2
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,517 Repped: 305 Repped 607 Times in 143 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	u gettin better... keep practicing and u'll get even better.. u got wayz to go..but if u keep tryin u will get better..dont let no body tell u..u cant do this shit..stay up kid.... __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

08-06-2008, 02:38 AM	#3
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	thanks man......this was just an experimental drop btw.....i wasnt so confident about it.....but good looks on the feed..... __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-06-2008, 04:07 AM	#4
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	uppin for more feed.... __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-06-2008, 04:54 AM	#5
ReFleXiOn Blissful Poetry Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Canada, SK. Posts: 1,052 Repped: 0 Repped 26 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 2 Posts	this was pretty good, areas could've been altered differently to make the metaphors more impressing and such, but overall I'm rather impressed...you took a concept and multiplied it's intention with slight compexity. However, sometimes a LESS direct approach can stand for a more genuine piece, a head scratcher if u will. Plus lyricism/vocabulary always come in handy...but as stated this is pretty solid man, specially since I don't recall reading too much from you...stay up and do you playa... p.s. return the feed on my drop if you can 1 __________________ Knowledge is Bliss...Poetic Pimpin' Biatch!!! Battle Record: 10-1

08-06-2008, 05:12 AM	#6
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	thanks reflexion.....appreciated ya feed....and ur drop's also solid..... __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-06-2008, 06:05 AM	#7
DOJA FLOPS HARD Veteran Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: Crime side of NY Southside Posts: 1,477 Repped: 287 Repped 318 Times in 49 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 10 Posts	good looks homie like the concept. __________________ Free dload of LAX: rapidshare.com/files/138071267/gme-lxcl.rar

08-06-2008, 08:13 AM	#8
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	thanks for the feed doja flops hard...... __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-06-2008, 10:00 AM	#9
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	uppin for feed....... __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-06-2008, 10:39 AM	#10
abominor Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Scotland Posts: 11 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Nice one Brizzle

08-06-2008, 12:57 PM	#11
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	thanks homie......ill keep a look out for ya beat too..... __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-06-2008, 09:52 PM	#12
Bunny_Rabbit Rorshak Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: The Tangent Universe Posts: 886 Repped: 44 Repped 118 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 52 Neg Repped at 59 Times in 54 Posts	Do you seriously have to always be a G Unit Stan? I mean, you said Curtis was better than Graduation. What kind of shit is that? You know Kanye shits on 50 anyday. I mean, he used to be good back in the day, but he just sucks ass and you need to quit riding G Unit all the time. Anyway, this was good. The metaphors were pretty nice and they sounded alright. 7/10 __________________

08-06-2008, 11:43 PM	#13
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	im not being a gunit stan.......curtis was better than graduation in my opinion because it the standout tracks were better.......i didnt really like any song in graduation.....i think kanye is overrated as a producer.......and u should take a listen to T.O.S.......thats a good album....and the inspiration i got from this song "Piano Man" is also a good song......but thanks for the feed..... __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-07-2008, 12:15 AM	#14
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,902 Repped: 79 Repped 311 Times in 147 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! A metaphor for typing verses because you'll never record a song! __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

08-07-2008, 01:19 AM	#15
Lil Brizzle S.F.S. Coming! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Land Of The Latent Posts: 1,795 Repped: 75 Repped 125 Times in 68 Posts Neg Reps: 109 Neg Repped at 142 Times in 81 Posts	^^ stfu and give feed.....and ive recorded some songs.... __________________ S.F.S. to be out on 23/11/2009!!!

08-07-2008, 01:42 AM	#17
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,902 Repped: 79 Repped 311 Times in 147 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Nastradamus>>>Curtis __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

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