05/28/08 - Zone Out (Just My Thoughts @ The Time)

J~Souljah · 05-28-2008, 06:05 PM

It Seems The World Is Full Of Lies..Lullabies Of A Shooken Sky/
Viewin' The Plane That Harbors These Rooks And I/
All The Tooken Lives...That's Why I Spit It 1 Line At A Time/
Ghosts Form Lines At My Lines As I Deskribe Their Lives/
So This Mind Of Mind.....Gets A Glimpse Of Hope/
So I Put My Life On The Line With A Different Rope/
Different Strokes...Orphans Despise The Womb That Bore Them/
So I Distance My Soul From My Heart...Emotions Seem Foreign/
So I Ignore Em...Just The Tip Of The Iceberg/
Gotta Perfekt My Skill With The Passion Of Christ Words/
And No Im Not A Christian...My Mindstate Is Different/
Prayin 2 God..Im Jaded...The Krime Rate Is Liftin/
And With That Said...Im Sure I Wont Reach Him/
I'll Keep It Kozy In Hell..Hell's Flames Kan't Breach Him/
They May Breach Skin...Memory's Kold/
When I'm Deceased Then..I Will Reach Foes/
Approach Them With No Fear..No Air/
In My Lungs To Breathe...Just Ashes Of Deceased/
Still....While Im In The Physikal...I Visit Fools/
With Murderous Intentions..Sendin' Them To The Spiritual/
Forgive Me...Souljah Doesnt Know His Worth/
I Been Dead Since Birth...Let Me Live 1st/

Komplex · 05-29-2008, 10:48 PM

All The Tooken Lives...That's Why I Spit It 1 Line At A Time/
Ghosts Form Lines At My Lines As I Deskribe Their Lives/
So This Mind Of Mind.....Gets A Glimpse Of Hope/
So I Put My Life On The Line With A Different Rope/

^This was creative..the way you incorporated 3 different meanings of "line". some were double Es too. good shit.

the content of the piece overall was pretty vivid. you had a nice mix of flow, substance, and vocabulary. not too heavy on similies which makes it even better. good drop homie.

J~Souljah · 05-31-2008, 07:25 PM

thankz komp

Tha Truth · 05-31-2008, 07:46 PM

yo this ill my nigga and i sent that verse if u still tryin to collabo

J~Souljah · 05-31-2008, 07:59 PM

red...lol if u aint noticed...i usually drop a few dropz @ once then take a break...(i only write when i get inspiration...plus my verse got deleted) but i got u..it'll drop soon!

Blizzy · 05-31-2008, 09:48 PM

this was ill...8.5/10...deep content/multi's/flowed well...keep it up...stay up...Peace

J~Souljah · 05-31-2008, 10:22 PM

thankz h20mie....apprec/iate it

J~Souljah · 08-18-2008, 04:13 PM

uppin from the grave

05-28-2008, 06:05 PM	#1
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	05/28/08 - Zone Out (Just My Thoughts @ The Time) 05/28/08 - Zone Out (Just My Thoughts @ The Time) It Seems The World Is Full Of Lies..Lullabies Of A Shooken Sky/ Viewin' The Plane That Harbors These Rooks And I/ All The Tooken Lives...That's Why I Spit It 1 Line At A Time/ Ghosts Form Lines At My Lines As I Deskribe Their Lives/ So This Mind Of Mind.....Gets A Glimpse Of Hope/ So I Put My Life On The Line With A Different Rope/ Different Strokes...Orphans Despise The Womb That Bore Them/ So I Distance My Soul From My Heart...Emotions Seem Foreign/ So I Ignore Em...Just The Tip Of The Iceberg/ Gotta Perfekt My Skill With The Passion Of Christ Words/ And No Im Not A Christian...My Mindstate Is Different/ Prayin 2 God..Im Jaded...The Krime Rate Is Liftin/ And With That Said...Im Sure I Wont Reach Him/ I'll Keep It Kozy In Hell..Hell's Flames Kan't Breach Him/ They May Breach Skin...Memory's Kold/ When I'm Deceased Then..I Will Reach Foes/ Approach Them With No Fear..No Air/ In My Lungs To Breathe...Just Ashes Of Deceased/ Still....While Im In The Physikal...I Visit Fools/ With Murderous Intentions..Sendin' Them To The Spiritual/ Forgive Me...Souljah Doesnt Know His Worth/ I Been Dead Since Birth...Let Me Live 1st/

05-29-2008, 10:48 PM	#2
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	All The Tooken Lives...That's Why I Spit It 1 Line At A Time/ Ghosts Form Lines At My Lines As I Deskribe Their Lives/ So This Mind Of Mind.....Gets A Glimpse Of Hope/ So I Put My Life On The Line With A Different Rope/ ^This was creative..the way you incorporated 3 different meanings of "line". some were double Es too. good shit. the content of the piece overall was pretty vivid. you had a nice mix of flow, substance, and vocabulary. not too heavy on similies which makes it even better. good drop homie. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

05-31-2008, 07:46 PM	#4
Tha Truth ..:General Truth:... Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: at ya girl crib Posts: 5,225 Repped: 675 Repped 1,045 Times in 251 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 3 Times in 2 Posts	yo this ill my nigga and i sent that verse if u still tryin to collabo __________________ {~Undisputed G$~}/Mechanical workin, Hechler handle's jerkin That'll pull the Gate in after you Heavenly church him-Bank$

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05-31-2008, 07:25 PM	#3
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	thankz komp

05-31-2008, 07:59 PM	#5
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	red...lol if u aint noticed...i usually drop a few dropz @ once then take a break...(i only write when i get inspiration...plus my verse got deleted) but i got u..it'll drop soon!

05-31-2008, 09:48 PM	#6
Blizzy Wordsmith Join Date: May 2008 Location: In Battlefield's Posts: 3,369 Repped: 691 Repped 345 Times in 158 Posts Neg Reps: 25 Neg Repped at 26 Times in 25 Posts	this was ill...8.5/10...deep content/multi's/flowed well...keep it up...stay up...Peace

05-31-2008, 10:22 PM	#7
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	thankz h20mie....apprec/iate it

08-18-2008, 04:13 PM	#8
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	uppin from the grave