12/16/07 - 12/16/07 - Simply Never (ill poetry ish)

ReFleXiOn · 12-16-2007, 07:33 AM

Alone, quite the opposite of my renouned state of perpetual bliss.
Thought to be known, truthfully in youth my seed intends malevolence.
Obscure contemplations brush my hair goodnight, my pillow regrets this.
Deception offers me a hand of simplicity, I correct it with serene indifference.
I close my eyes, yet it seems I merely blinked, time is a broken hour glass.
Never kept, never held, simply... never.
What does not exist does not resist or insist to inflict its fatal kiss.
Doom however is real, perhaps even surreal.
I do not trust what I do not understand, I hide in the shadows from my shadow.
Perhaps this fore--shadows my paranoid state, completely lacking surrenity.
Sanity depleting, insanity repeating, rattled conscience is revealing.
Never known, never understood, simply...never.
Deprived from the start, no blanket could ever warm a heartless chest.
A heartless chest?
Never cold, never warm, simply...never.

Komplex · 12-17-2007, 03:05 PM

Deception offers me a hand of simplicity, I correct it with serene indifference.

I do not trust what I do not understand, I hide in the shadows from my shadow.

The poetic element was strong here. I could tell you weren't really focused on being tightly structured. It was more about being abstract. I can dig it.

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 12-18-2007, 12:41 AM

~Ill~ 8.10

ReFleXiOn · 12-19-2007, 05:11 AM

thnx, ne other feed?

Reptillian · 12-19-2007, 06:22 AM

Poetic to the fullest.. the imagry here was great. I liked this alot I think I may go ahead and dig up some of your other threads and give them a read after this. Vocab usage here was very nicely distributed sounded intelligent rather than flamboiant. aye ima stick this with a solid 9 pimpin.

Respect
Reptillian

ReFleXiOn · 12-20-2007, 05:34 AM

thnx playa, def return the feed

12-16-2007, 07:33 AM	#1
ReFleXiOn Blissful Poetry Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Canada, SK. Posts: 1,052 Repped: 0 Repped 26 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 2 Posts	12/16/07 - 12/16/07 - Simply Never (ill poetry ish) 12/16/07 - 12/16/07 - Simply Never (ill poetry ish) Alone, quite the opposite of my renouned state of perpetual bliss. Thought to be known, truthfully in youth my seed intends malevolence. Obscure contemplations brush my hair goodnight, my pillow regrets this. Deception offers me a hand of simplicity, I correct it with serene indifference. I close my eyes, yet it seems I merely blinked, time is a broken hour glass. Never kept, never held, simply... never. What does not exist does not resist or insist to inflict its fatal kiss. Doom however is real, perhaps even surreal. I do not trust what I do not understand, I hide in the shadows from my shadow. Perhaps this fore--shadows my paranoid state, completely lacking surrenity. Sanity depleting, insanity repeating, rattled conscience is revealing. Never known, never understood, simply...never. Deprived from the start, no blanket could ever warm a heartless chest. A heartless chest? Never cold, never warm, simply...never. __________________ Knowledge is Bliss...Poetic Pimpin' Biatch!!! Battle Record: 10-1

12-17-2007, 03:05 PM	#2
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Deception offers me a hand of simplicity, I correct it with serene indifference. I do not trust what I do not understand, I hide in the shadows from my shadow. The poetic element was strong here. I could tell you weren't really focused on being tightly structured. It was more about being abstract. I can dig it. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

12-18-2007, 12:41 AM	#3
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,907 Repped: 80 Repped 311 Times in 147 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	~Ill~ 8.10 __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

12-19-2007, 05:11 AM	#4
ReFleXiOn Blissful Poetry Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Canada, SK. Posts: 1,052 Repped: 0 Repped 26 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 2 Posts	thnx, ne other feed? __________________ Knowledge is Bliss...Poetic Pimpin' Biatch!!! Battle Record: 10-1

12-20-2007, 05:34 AM	#6
ReFleXiOn Blissful Poetry Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Canada, SK. Posts: 1,052 Repped: 0 Repped 26 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 2 Posts	thnx playa, def return the feed __________________ Knowledge is Bliss...Poetic Pimpin' Biatch!!! Battle Record: 10-1

12-19-2007, 06:22 AM	#5
Reptillian Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Clearwater Posts: 59 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Poetic to the fullest.. the imagry here was great. I liked this alot I think I may go ahead and dig up some of your other threads and give them a read after this. Vocab usage here was very nicely distributed sounded intelligent rather than flamboiant. aye ima stick this with a solid 9 pimpin. Respect Reptillian

Thread Tools
Show Printable Version Email this Page
Display Modes
Linear Mode Switch to Hybrid Mode Switch to Threaded Mode