12/13/07 - ~~~~paranoia~~~~~

Inanimatw V · 12-13-2007, 03:06 PM

U niggaz plottin 2 kill me....neva off guard/
I aint safe in my hood...dey obey no law/
neva on foot...nah das a easy target/
thinkin mah shitz tapped...won't even run my faucet/
I alwayz ride 4 deep....watch out for tinted carz/
can't hit a movin target...I can't sit wit yall/
my own niggaz see me rarely....gotta stay 2 myself/
I knew many of innocent niggaz...got slayed 4 da wealth/
niggaz say I'm 2 crazy....I just say I'm 2 careful/
niggaz don't realize comfortable eyez impair u/sum friendz wanna be da best so they plot on ya demise/
best friendz wanna be no less..still u see contempt in dey eyez/
niggaz get dap from me/
I don't hear from in monthz n now dey act funny......itz all beef/
I'm on point cuz sum thingz u can't avoid/
sum dayz I question myself...y am I so paranoid/

Baller · 12-13-2007, 03:22 PM

the concept was pretty nice yo...its always nice to see someone attempt creative ones around here...ya verse was kinda basic though...lacked multies or internal rhymes...could have been better...leave some feed on my shit also

Komplex · 12-13-2007, 03:30 PM

your concept was good..nice flow. You displayed a bit of knowledge too. I agree with Baller. add some multies and internals and you'll be full throttle with it.

*~Tambo~* · 12-13-2007, 03:40 PM

no real stand out line to me but it was a solid verse...listen to the advice these niggas gave you...and leave me some feed lol

Yung MiZfit · 12-13-2007, 03:47 PM

dis was weak

*~Tambo~* · 12-13-2007, 03:49 PM

Thats fucked up...why you leave this nigga that wack ass feed? Thts why this sction be fuckin up now

Yung MiZfit · 12-13-2007, 04:20 PM

o well........

Baller · 12-13-2007, 04:37 PM

u wont be gettin much feed here any more i guess^^^

YoungJ · 12-13-2007, 04:44 PM

lol @ Miz smh.. naw this shit was ight. nothin spectacular but you got potential. stay up

12-13-2007, 03:06 PM	#1
Inanimatw V Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: B0DyMoR3 MuRd@l@nD Posts: 12 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	12/13/07 - ~~~~paranoia~~~~~ 12/13/07 - ~~~~paranoia~~~~~ U niggaz plottin 2 kill me....neva off guard/ I aint safe in my hood...dey obey no law/ neva on foot...nah das a easy target/ thinkin mah shitz tapped...won't even run my faucet/ I alwayz ride 4 deep....watch out for tinted carz/ can't hit a movin target...I can't sit wit yall/ my own niggaz see me rarely....gotta stay 2 myself/ I knew many of innocent niggaz...got slayed 4 da wealth/ niggaz say I'm 2 crazy....I just say I'm 2 careful/ niggaz don't realize comfortable eyez impair u/sum friendz wanna be da best so they plot on ya demise/ best friendz wanna be no less..still u see contempt in dey eyez/ niggaz get dap from me/ I don't hear from in monthz n now dey act funny......itz all beef/ I'm on point cuz sum thingz u can't avoid/ sum dayz I question myself...y am I so paranoid/

12-13-2007, 03:22 PM	#2
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,098 Repped: 111 Repped 263 Times in 149 Posts Neg Reps: 96 Neg Repped at 61 Times in 39 Posts	the concept was pretty nice yo...its always nice to see someone attempt creative ones around here...ya verse was kinda basic though...lacked multies or internal rhymes...could have been better...leave some feed on my shit also __________________

12-13-2007, 03:30 PM	#3
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	your concept was good..nice flow. You displayed a bit of knowledge too. I agree with Baller. add some multies and internals and you'll be full throttle with it. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

12-13-2007, 04:37 PM	#8
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,098 Repped: 111 Repped 263 Times in 149 Posts Neg Reps: 96 Neg Repped at 61 Times in 39 Posts	u wont be gettin much feed here any more i guess^^^ __________________

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12-13-2007, 03:40 PM	#4
~Tambo~ The Beast Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Jersey You Bitch Ass Nigga Posts: 2,700 Repped: 3 Repped 15 Times in 11 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	no real stand out line to me but it was a solid verse...listen to the advice these niggas gave you...and leave me some feed lol

12-13-2007, 03:47 PM	#5
Yung MiZfit Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 273 Repped: 0 Repped 9 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	dis was weak

12-13-2007, 03:49 PM	#6
~Tambo~ The Beast Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Jersey You Bitch Ass Nigga Posts: 2,700 Repped: 3 Repped 15 Times in 11 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Thats fucked up...why you leave this nigga that wack ass feed? Thts why this sction be fuckin up now

12-13-2007, 04:20 PM	#7
Yung MiZfit Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 273 Repped: 0 Repped 9 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	o well........

12-13-2007, 04:44 PM	#9
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	*lol @ Miz smh.. naw this shit was ight. nothin spectacular but you got potential. stay up*