In The Air Tonight

YoungJ · 12-08-2007, 11:20 AM

As I Left Home Time And Time Again
I Met New Locations To Raise The Prime Im In
Lost Control Awfully Slow While Tryn'a Win
Fought My Growth With New Knowledge I'm Divin In
Tortured Soul I Unfold, With One Goal..
Learn From Greatness..Now Rank This And Gimme Least One Role
Surrounded By Pain, Alone With Stakes At Dark
A Struggle To The Game Tryn'a Play My Part
View The Pictures That I Paint, I'm The Face Of Art
I'm The Sunset.. The World Makes Me Fade While Hot
Sometimes I Dont Know If I'm Capable Of More
Bout To Quit But I Remember Sayin That Before
And I Dont Even Know What I'm Sayin To The Lord
Prolly The Same Shit I Was Sayin When I'm Four
Daddy Daddy, Where Are You Father
But I Dont Wanna Know, Cuz I'm Scared Of Fathers
Nah I Dont Wanna Even Go Near My Fathers
Nah I Dont Wanna Even Fuckin Hear My Fathers
NAH FUCK IT SON.. I DONT EVEN CARE FOR FATHERS
Found My Women This Year.. Whys This Year The Hardest
Tryn'a Find A Dream I Been Near It All Along
Havin Mood Swings You Can Hear It In This Song
Why I Do Things So Delerious And Wrong
Try To Prove Things Actin Serious And Strong
Is That What I'm Supposed To Be
Its Only Me, Could It Be That I'm Just A Joke And Weak
These Are All Secrets That I'm Supposed To Keep
Foldin Feet, Cant Run When I'm Ocean Deep
Though I Try To Swim, It Only Makes It Worse
Makes Me Drown More, Movin Closer To A Hurse
Takes Me Down More, Now I'm Closer To The Church
Down Even More, Now I'm Buried In The Dirt........

I can feel it coming in the air tonight, oh lord
Ive been waiting for this moment, all my life, oh lord
Can you feel it coming in the air tonight, oh lord, oh lord

Tha Truth · 12-08-2007, 02:46 PM

this was ill my nigga i like tha flow on this and everything was on point 10/10 good drop

Komplex · 12-08-2007, 03:04 PM

Tortured Soul I Unfold, With One Goal..
Learn From Greatness..Now Rank This And Gimme Least One Role

A Struggle To The Game Tryn'a Play My Part
View The Pictures That I Paint, I'm The Face Of Art

These Are All Secrets That I'm Supposed To Keep
Foldin Feet, Cant Run When I'm Ocean Deep
Though I Try To Swim, It Only Makes It Worse
Makes Me Drown More, Movin Closer To A Hurse
Takes Me Down More, Now I'm Closer To The Church
Down Even More, Now I'm Buried In The Dirt........

great visual imagery..........solid flow. overall excellent drop family.

youngking187 · 12-08-2007, 03:49 PM

this was good prov....
nice way to keep it on topc..
ur drops keep being fire..
keep thAT SHIT COMIN

YoungJ · 12-09-2007, 12:31 AM

Good Lookz My Dude

YoungJ · 12-10-2007, 07:42 PM

Uppinnn......

*~Tambo~* · 12-10-2007, 07:58 PM

good shit...just deinitey wasn't anywhere near ya best...8/10 keep em jumpin

YoungJ · 12-11-2007, 05:03 PM

Thanks For That One Dimension Swag You Tryn'a Get Me On

YoungJ · 12-12-2007, 08:19 PM

Uppin.......

The Franchise · 12-13-2007, 09:51 PM

Good shit my nigga 10/10

Reptillian · 12-14-2007, 12:45 AM

I was really feeling this until the fathers thing... why use that at the end of a line what five times in a row... Its not hate its just not appealing to the eye. If I didn't have that complaint I would have thought this to be a much better verse. Still with that said it was a Nice drop.

A Struggle To The Game Tryn'a Play My Part
View The Pictures That I Paint, I'm The Face Of Art
^^^^^^^^^^
pure genius

I would give this about an 8/10. Iight then \ /

Respect
Reptillian

YoungJ · 12-14-2007, 08:12 AM

Well It's An Audio Verse.. And The Rhymes Before The Word Father Are There But Yeah I Hear You.. Even Though I Disagree Entirely.

Reptillian · 12-14-2007, 09:16 AM

Just hitting you with an honest opinion pimpin.

YoungJ · 12-14-2007, 04:45 PM

I Respect It

YoungJ · 12-17-2007, 10:56 PM

Uppinn This one last time....

12-08-2007, 11:20 AM	#1
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	In The Air Tonight In The Air Tonight As I Left Home Time And Time Again I Met New Locations To Raise The Prime Im In Lost Control Awfully Slow While Tryn'a Win Fought My Growth With New Knowledge I'm Divin In Tortured Soul I Unfold, With One Goal.. Learn From Greatness..Now Rank This And Gimme Least One Role Surrounded By Pain, Alone With Stakes At Dark A Struggle To The Game Tryn'a Play My Part View The Pictures That I Paint, I'm The Face Of Art I'm The Sunset.. The World Makes Me Fade While Hot Sometimes I Dont Know If I'm Capable Of More Bout To Quit But I Remember Sayin That Before And I Dont Even Know What I'm Sayin To The Lord Prolly The Same Shit I Was Sayin When I'm Four Daddy Daddy, Where Are You Father But I Dont Wanna Know, Cuz I'm Scared Of Fathers Nah I Dont Wanna Even Go Near My Fathers Nah I Dont Wanna Even Fuckin Hear My Fathers NAH FUCK IT SON.. I DONT EVEN CARE FOR FATHERS Found My Women This Year.. Whys This Year The Hardest Tryn'a Find A Dream I Been Near It All Along Havin Mood Swings You Can Hear It In This Song Why I Do Things So Delerious And Wrong Try To Prove Things Actin Serious And Strong Is That What I'm Supposed To Be Its Only Me, Could It Be That I'm Just A Joke And Weak These Are All Secrets That I'm Supposed To Keep Foldin Feet, Cant Run When I'm Ocean Deep Though I Try To Swim, It Only Makes It Worse Makes Me Drown More, Movin Closer To A Hurse Takes Me Down More, Now I'm Closer To The Church Down Even More, Now I'm Buried In The Dirt........ I can feel it coming in the air tonight, oh lord Ive been waiting for this moment, all my life, oh lord Can you feel it coming in the air tonight, oh lord, oh lord

12-08-2007, 02:46 PM	#2
Tha Truth ..:General Truth:... Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: at ya girl crib Posts: 5,225 Repped: 675 Repped 1,045 Times in 251 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 3 Times in 2 Posts	this was ill my nigga i like tha flow on this and everything was on point 10/10 good drop __________________ {~Undisputed G$~}/Mechanical workin, Hechler handle's jerkin That'll pull the Gate in after you Heavenly church him-Bank$

12-08-2007, 03:04 PM	#3
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Tortured Soul I Unfold, With One Goal.. Learn From Greatness..Now Rank This And Gimme Least One Role A Struggle To The Game Tryn'a Play My Part View The Pictures That I Paint, I'm The Face Of Art These Are All Secrets That I'm Supposed To Keep Foldin Feet, Cant Run When I'm Ocean Deep Though I Try To Swim, It Only Makes It Worse Makes Me Drown More, Movin Closer To A Hurse Takes Me Down More, Now I'm Closer To The Church Down Even More, Now I'm Buried In The Dirt........ great visual imagery..........solid flow. overall excellent drop family. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

12-08-2007, 03:49 PM	#4
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,517 Repped: 305 Repped 607 Times in 143 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	this was good prov.... nice way to keep it on topc.. ur drops keep being fire.. keep thAT SHIT COMIN __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

12-13-2007, 09:51 PM	#10
The Franchise Undisputed Gangstas Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: New Jersey Posts: 1,302 Repped: 16 Repped 102 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Good shit my nigga 10/10 __________________ ~Undisputed Gangstas~ Generals-Tha Truth, Airtokatlyan, Blue Diamonds, NWA(Deebo),The Franchise Souljas-Heat27, Crime~Dawg,, Silent Killah, Chocobo Killa, 5oX, NS Diplomat

12-09-2007, 12:31 AM	#5
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	Good Lookz My Dude

12-10-2007, 07:42 PM	#6
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	*Uppinnn......*

12-10-2007, 07:58 PM	#7
~Tambo~ The Beast Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Jersey You Bitch Ass Nigga Posts: 2,700 Repped: 3 Repped 15 Times in 11 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	good shit...just deinitey wasn't anywhere near ya best...8/10 keep em jumpin

12-11-2007, 05:03 PM	#8
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	*Thanks For That One Dimension Swag You Tryn'a Get Me On*

12-12-2007, 08:19 PM	#9
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	*Uppin.......*

12-14-2007, 12:45 AM	#11
Reptillian Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Clearwater Posts: 59 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	I was really feeling this until the fathers thing... why use that at the end of a line what five times in a row... Its not hate its just not appealing to the eye. If I didn't have that complaint I would have thought this to be a much better verse. Still with that said it was a Nice drop. A Struggle To The Game Tryn'a Play My Part View The Pictures That I Paint, I'm The Face Of Art ^^^^^^^^^^ pure genius I would give this about an 8/10. Iight then \ / Respect Reptillian

12-14-2007, 08:12 AM	#12
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	*Well It's An Audio Verse.. And The Rhymes Before The Word Father Are There But Yeah I Hear You.. Even Though I Disagree Entirely.*

12-14-2007, 09:16 AM	#13
Reptillian Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Clearwater Posts: 59 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Just hitting you with an honest opinion pimpin.

12-14-2007, 04:45 PM	#14
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	*I Respect It*

12-17-2007, 10:56 PM	#15
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	Uppinn This one last time....

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