Gunshots(freestyle)

N. Streetz · 09-23-2007, 10:56 PM

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Komplex · 09-23-2007, 11:23 PM

You definitely got it right. That's how ur supposed to do it. make your expressions and thoughts compromise with your verse's scheme, not vice versa.I can tell mainly by the improvement in your structure. The shorter lines make the verses more smooth and crisp but you were still able to fit the multies, punches, and substance in there. great stuff.

Surrender Or Become Victim, No Mans Secure In This War
Therefore I Equip Myself With Straps Like A Book bag Store

Investigators Leeching My Spots, I Put Them On Respirators
Life’s Devastating Niggas Tryna Run up on Me like Escalators

blackjin · 09-23-2007, 11:26 PM

i like, very good

"<Rub3N>" · 09-24-2007, 03:08 AM

very nice keep it up

N. Streetz · 09-24-2007, 11:31 PM

Up...................

DrUnK-N-MuNkY · 09-25-2007, 07:04 AM

Good drop homie

YoungP06 · 09-26-2007, 11:18 AM

nice drop son

09-23-2007, 10:56 PM	#1
N. Streetz I Was Born Elite Join Date: May 2007 Location: In The Place Of Daydreams Posts: 704 Repped: 104 Repped 82 Times in 47 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Gunshots(freestyle) Gunshots(freestyle) ..............................................

09-23-2007, 11:23 PM	#2
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	You definitely got it right. That's how ur supposed to do it. make your expressions and thoughts compromise with your verse's scheme, not vice versa.I can tell mainly by the improvement in your structure. The shorter lines make the verses more smooth and crisp but you were still able to fit the multies, punches, and substance in there. great stuff. Surrender Or Become Victim, No Mans Secure In This War Therefore I Equip Myself With Straps Like A Book bag Store Investigators Leeching My Spots, I Put Them On Respirators Life’s Devastating Niggas Tryna Run up on Me like Escalators __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

09-23-2007, 11:26 PM	#3
blackjin Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 1,765 Repped: 132 Repped 81 Times in 54 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	i like, very good __________________

09-25-2007, 07:04 AM	#6
DrUnK-N-MuNkY Meanest S.O.B...BrOwArD Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Gunshine State Posts: 1,437 Repped: 19 Repped 104 Times in 56 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Good drop homie __________________ "Gangsta shit hereditary, got it from my dad Flow colder than February with extraordinary swag"-Cliff

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09-24-2007, 03:08 AM	#4
"<Rub3N>" Banned Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: UNDERGROUND Posts: 1,946 Repped: 883 Repped 175 Times in 64 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	very nice keep it up

09-24-2007, 11:31 PM	#5
N. Streetz I Was Born Elite Join Date: May 2007 Location: In The Place Of Daydreams Posts: 704 Repped: 104 Repped 82 Times in 47 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Up...................

09-26-2007, 11:18 AM	#7
YoungP06 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Maryland Posts: 164 Repped: 11 Repped 14 Times in 10 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	nice drop son