Not With A Bang

JR-One · 07-04-2007, 01:14 AM

deeply moved by motionless things, them being my hopes and my dreams
tryna remain dope n supreme, moved past rappin bout scopes n the beams
shit lowered my own self esteem, changed my tone and my themes
creating concepts shown to ya screens, grown past my known limits bout to explode at the seams
yet i remain clutching my own smithereens, without them i'd just be alone wit my schemes
suddenly i'm half the man i used to be, stupidly, tryna change all your views of me
my sense of self bruised n beat, confusedly, soon to be reborn a new emcee
an MC in a land of broken promises, problems no one acknowledges
too many fucking optimists towering over me becoming ominous
like an obelisk repeating negativities becoming monotonous
a metaphor, but i still dunno if i can be stoppin' this
you wanna know what the problem is?
Hip Hop.
you rookies are water; wack rappers could fill a fuckin ocean
them backstabbers will cut you open, snitch, blab, then start recordin,
lie and then blow things outta proportion, put it on records and start exportin
leave your ass practically jobless, fuck that.. actually godless
i mean.. Hip Hop is dying, how can we stop this?

17 Lines, Choke On That.. .. Good Feed Only Plz.. ..

Komplex · 07-04-2007, 01:24 AM

deeply moved by motionless things, them being my hopes and my dreams
tryna remain dope n supreme, moved past rappin bout scopes n the beams
shit lowered my own self esteem, changed my tone and my themes
creating concepts shown to ya screens, grown past my known limits bout to explode at the seams

Alot of freestyles from most cats be havin great multies and flow.....but when u analyze the content, it's really nothin there. on top of havin nice multies, the concept and subject matter was on point. nice drop.

~Menace~ · 07-04-2007, 01:43 AM

i read most of this and it was good...the uneven lines kinda bugged me, u could easily broke some of those in half and let the rhyme scheme stay the same 4 a few bars, but thats only for a visual so it doesnt matter...the multies were nice, they were icing on the cake for this piece...the topic of "hip hop" is played, but having originality in concepts has been rare lately...good shit overall, i enjoyed it

...JuGGerNauT... · 07-04-2007, 01:45 AM

word ^ at uneven lines...

thas bout the only thing i didn't like....it was hot tho, u uppin ya game from before yaaaa dig

peaaaaaaaaaace

JR-One · 07-04-2007, 02:06 AM

I Was Trying To Maintain The Same Structure For The First Part.. ..

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It Could Be Reposted As:
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But Frankly I Prefer It The Way It Is.. ..

YoungJ · 07-04-2007, 02:09 AM

Well frankly..

this was a nice drop. you had some tight bars, some decent.. none that were bad
the hip hop topic is played.. but fuck it i still use it sometimes

overall. 8/10

B Dope · 07-04-2007, 02:10 AM

some dope shit...very poetic like...expessed ya feeling well by bein descriptive...great multies, very creative even though the concept...

Mike Harris · 07-04-2007, 02:42 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by xX-Knowledge-xX

deeply moved by motionless things, them being my hopes and my dreams
tryna remain dope n supreme, moved past rappin bout scopes n the beams
shit lowered my own self esteem, changed my tone and my themes
creating concepts shown to ya screens, grown past my known limits bout to explode at the seams

Alot of freestyles from most cats be havin great multies and flow.....but when u analyze the content, it's really nothin there. on top of havin nice multies, the concept and subject matter was on point. nice drop.

For someone who's named KNOWLEDGE, you really are a dumb motherfucker.

JR-One · 07-04-2007, 02:44 AM

^^ For Someone Formerly Named X~pLiCiT You're Very Explicit.. .. I Like That In A Man *giggles*.. ..

Mike Harris · 07-04-2007, 02:47 AM

It doesn't seem to be an attempt at insulting, so i'll roll with it. But as for the freestyle, in a sense I kind of knew what you were saying. It's more then just the words on that are read. Theres more of a story and meaning behind them if you understand what the words mean and so on.

B Dope · 07-04-2007, 03:02 AM

how can u just start up a new record? if a boxer doesnt like his record he doesnt switch shit up

Mike Harris · 07-04-2007, 03:06 AM

If your making a reference to me, then I suggest you re-think your train of thought, dumb ass.

---

Overall Record .. Means Overall .. As in over time ..

New Record .. Means currently .. As in since I started to battle again ..

---

That shit was hard to figure out huh?? Get the fuckouttahere. This board is dumb as fuck. Ya'll really need to go to school and think of paying attention to what they fuck they sayin'. Scraaam..

B Dope · 07-04-2007, 03:10 AM

no i was talkin to dose...who u think i was talkin to....i find it stupid as fuck..and i speak my mind...i dunno why u broke it down either...what else would overall and new record mean to someone?

Mike Harris · 07-04-2007, 03:15 AM

If you look under his name there is a record there.. And in his sig is a new record.. Dumbass.. I stand corrected..

B Dope · 07-04-2007, 03:25 AM

i was being sarcastic about the 'who u think i was talkin to'..i was talkin to u..and i find that stupid as fuck for dose also...why would that change my mind....homo

~Menace~ · 07-04-2007, 03:26 AM

he wanted 2 have a feeling of being undefeated @ baller...George Foreman stopped boxing for a minute, when wen he came back he came back wit tha same record...but its only the net so who gives a fuck

Mike Harris · 07-04-2007, 03:29 AM

The old record is still there, it's not like it's gone and acting like it never happened. The new record is to represent the present day battle record since battling again. It isn't all that hard to understand.. Forreal.

~Menace~ · 07-04-2007, 03:36 AM

no no no its understood...its just plain retarded...i think keeping a record in general is stupid...thats when u know ur too wrapped up into this net battling shit

JR-One · 07-04-2007, 03:49 AM

^^ You Lose So Much A Record Would Be Pointless.. ..

(Look Under My Name, I Have My Overall Record As Well).. ..

The 13-1 Were My Battles On This Account As JR-One.. .. I Update Both.. ..

Mike Harris · 07-04-2007, 03:53 AM

Too wrapped up in it?? Shit, I don't even spend a percent of the time I used too when I obtained all the wins and loses that I have. I'm not even going to bother arguing anymore, it's pointless. Everything I do is self explanitory and if you can't figure it out, get ya head checked..

~Menace~ · 07-04-2007, 02:53 PM

tha shit has been figured out dumb ass, it didnt even need explanation except that retard just had 2 ask...its just funny...n dose i haven't lost any where near 24 times

JR-One · 07-04-2007, 05:17 PM

^^ Word.. .. And You Haven't Won Anywhere Near 24 Either.. ..

pwnt.

Komplex · 07-04-2007, 06:26 PM

Dike Harris..shut ya fat ass up son. U don't wanna see me wigga.

-K.P- · 07-04-2007, 07:21 PM

see you? are you extremely ugly or something?

Komplex · 07-04-2007, 08:02 PM

lol. corny ass nigga.

yeah yeah. save it for the battle homo.

07-04-2007, 01:14 AM	#1
JR-One Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Van-Kool-Vurr Posts: 1,021 Repped: 19 Repped 52 Times in 20 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	Not With A Bang Not With A Bang deeply moved by motionless things, them being my hopes and my dreams tryna remain dope n supreme, moved past rappin bout scopes n the beams shit lowered my own self esteem, changed my tone and my themes creating concepts shown to ya screens, grown past my known limits bout to explode at the seams yet i remain clutching my own smithereens, without them i'd just be alone wit my schemes suddenly i'm half the man i used to be, stupidly, tryna change all your views of me my sense of self bruised n beat, confusedly, soon to be reborn a new emcee an MC in a land of broken promises, problems no one acknowledges too many fucking optimists towering over me becoming ominous like an obelisk repeating negativities becoming monotonous a metaphor, but i still dunno if i can be stoppin' this you wanna know what the problem is? Hip Hop. you rookies are water; wack rappers could fill a fuckin ocean them backstabbers will cut you open, snitch, blab, then start recordin, lie and then blow things outta proportion, put it on records and start exportin leave your ass practically jobless, fuck that.. actually godless i mean.. Hip Hop is dying, how can we stop this? 17 Lines, Choke On That.. .. Good Feed Only Plz.. .. __________________ Cheers To Pacman23.. ..

07-04-2007, 01:24 AM	#2
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	deeply moved by motionless things, them being my hopes and my dreams tryna remain dope n supreme, moved past rappin bout scopes n the beams shit lowered my own self esteem, changed my tone and my themes creating concepts shown to ya screens, grown past my known limits bout to explode at the seams Alot of freestyles from most cats be havin great multies and flow.....but when u analyze the content, it's really nothin there. on top of havin nice multies, the concept and subject matter was on point. nice drop. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

07-04-2007, 01:43 AM	#3
~Menace~ Lonnel- Virgin Join Date: May 2006 Location: AZ ho Posts: 1,753 Repped: 116 Repped 38 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	i read most of this and it was good...the uneven lines kinda bugged me, u could easily broke some of those in half and let the rhyme scheme stay the same 4 a few bars, but thats only for a visual so it doesnt matter...the multies were nice, they were icing on the cake for this piece...the topic of "hip hop" is played, but having originality in concepts has been rare lately...good shit overall, i enjoyed it __________________ William Shaftner

07-04-2007, 01:45 AM	#4
...JuGGerNauT... ...Who Am I?... Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Right Coast Posts: 3,426 Repped: 2 Repped 91 Times in 33 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	word ^ at uneven lines... thas bout the only thing i didn't like....it was hot tho, u uppin ya game from before yaaaa dig peaaaaaaaaaace __________________ All it takes...is a little push.

07-04-2007, 02:06 AM	#5
JR-One Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Van-Kool-Vurr Posts: 1,021 Repped: 19 Repped 52 Times in 20 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	I Was Trying To Maintain The Same Structure For The First Part.. .. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Rhyme, xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Rhyme// xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Rhyme, xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Rhyme// It Could Be Reposted As: xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Rhyme/ xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Rhyme/ xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Rhyme/ xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Rhyme/ But Frankly I Prefer It The Way It Is.. .. __________________ Cheers To Pacman23.. ..

07-04-2007, 02:09 AM	#6
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	Well frankly.. this was a nice drop. you had some tight bars, some decent.. none that were bad the hip hop topic is played.. but fuck it i still use it sometimes overall. 8/10

07-04-2007, 02:10 AM	#7
B Dope Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,051 Repped: 638 Repped 375 Times in 112 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	some dope shit...very poetic like...expessed ya feeling well by bein descriptive...great multies, very creative even though the concept...

07-04-2007, 02:44 AM	#9
JR-One Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Van-Kool-Vurr Posts: 1,021 Repped: 19 Repped 52 Times in 20 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	^^ For Someone Formerly Named X~pLiCiT You're Very Explicit.. .. I Like That In A Man giggles.. .. __________________ Cheers To Pacman23.. ..

07-04-2007, 02:47 AM	#10
Mike Harris Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 265 Repped: 9 Repped 13 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	It doesn't seem to be an attempt at insulting, so i'll roll with it. But as for the freestyle, in a sense I kind of knew what you were saying. It's more then just the words on that are read. Theres more of a story and meaning behind them if you understand what the words mean and so on. __________________ Overall Record:: Won - 69 :: Lost - 17 :: Tied - 00 New Record:: Won - 02 :: Lost - 00 :: Tied - 00

07-04-2007, 03:02 AM	#11
B Dope Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,051 Repped: 638 Repped 375 Times in 112 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	how can u just start up a new record? if a boxer doesnt like his record he doesnt switch shit up

07-04-2007, 03:06 AM	#12
Mike Harris Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 265 Repped: 9 Repped 13 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	If your making a reference to me, then I suggest you re-think your train of thought, dumb ass. --- Overall Record .. Means Overall .. As in over time .. New Record .. Means currently .. As in since I started to battle again .. --- That shit was hard to figure out huh?? Get the fuckouttahere. This board is dumb as fuck. Ya'll really need to go to school and think of paying attention to what they fuck they sayin'. Scraaam.. __________________ Overall Record:: Won - 69 :: Lost - 17 :: Tied - 00 New Record:: Won - 02 :: Lost - 00 :: Tied - 00

07-04-2007, 03:10 AM	#13
B Dope Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,051 Repped: 638 Repped 375 Times in 112 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	no i was talkin to dose...who u think i was talkin to....i find it stupid as fuck..and i speak my mind...i dunno why u broke it down either...what else would overall and new record mean to someone?

07-04-2007, 03:15 AM	#14
Mike Harris Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 265 Repped: 9 Repped 13 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	If you look under his name there is a record there.. And in his sig is a new record.. Dumbass.. I stand corrected.. __________________ Overall Record:: Won - 69 :: Lost - 17 :: Tied - 00 New Record:: Won - 02 :: Lost - 00 :: Tied - 00

07-04-2007, 03:25 AM	#15
B Dope Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,051 Repped: 638 Repped 375 Times in 112 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	i was being sarcastic about the 'who u think i was talkin to'..i was talkin to u..and i find that stupid as fuck for dose also...why would that change my mind....homo

07-04-2007, 03:26 AM	#16
~Menace~ Lonnel- Virgin Join Date: May 2006 Location: AZ ho Posts: 1,753 Repped: 116 Repped 38 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	he wanted 2 have a feeling of being undefeated @ baller...George Foreman stopped boxing for a minute, when wen he came back he came back wit tha same record...but its only the net so who gives a fuck __________________ William Shaftner

07-04-2007, 03:29 AM	#17
Mike Harris Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 265 Repped: 9 Repped 13 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	The old record is still there, it's not like it's gone and acting like it never happened. The new record is to represent the present day battle record since battling again. It isn't all that hard to understand.. Forreal. __________________ Overall Record:: Won - 69 :: Lost - 17 :: Tied - 00 New Record:: Won - 02 :: Lost - 00 :: Tied - 00

07-04-2007, 03:36 AM	#18
~Menace~ Lonnel- Virgin Join Date: May 2006 Location: AZ ho Posts: 1,753 Repped: 116 Repped 38 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	no no no its understood...its just plain retarded...i think keeping a record in general is stupid...thats when u know ur too wrapped up into this net battling shit __________________ William Shaftner

07-04-2007, 03:49 AM	#19
JR-One Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Van-Kool-Vurr Posts: 1,021 Repped: 19 Repped 52 Times in 20 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	^^ You Lose So Much A Record Would Be Pointless.. .. (Look Under My Name, I Have My Overall Record As Well).. .. The 13-1 Were My Battles On This Account As JR-One.. .. I Update Both.. .. __________________ Cheers To Pacman23.. ..

07-04-2007, 03:53 AM	#20
Mike Harris Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 265 Repped: 9 Repped 13 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Too wrapped up in it?? Shit, I don't even spend a percent of the time I used too when I obtained all the wins and loses that I have. I'm not even going to bother arguing anymore, it's pointless. Everything I do is self explanitory and if you can't figure it out, get ya head checked.. __________________ Overall Record:: Won - 69 :: Lost - 17 :: Tied - 00 New Record:: Won - 02 :: Lost - 00 :: Tied - 00

07-04-2007, 02:53 PM	#21
~Menace~ Lonnel- Virgin Join Date: May 2006 Location: AZ ho Posts: 1,753 Repped: 116 Repped 38 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	tha shit has been figured out dumb ass, it didnt even need explanation except that retard just had 2 ask...its just funny...n dose i haven't lost any where near 24 times __________________ William Shaftner

07-04-2007, 05:17 PM	#22
JR-One Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Van-Kool-Vurr Posts: 1,021 Repped: 19 Repped 52 Times in 20 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	^^ Word.. .. And You Haven't Won Anywhere Near 24 Either.. .. pwnt. __________________ Cheers To Pacman23.. ..

07-04-2007, 06:26 PM	#23
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Dike Harris..shut ya fat ass up son. U don't wanna see me wigga. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

07-04-2007, 07:21 PM	#24
-K.P- Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: UK Posts: 2,515 Repped: 142 Repped 119 Times in 47 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	see you? are you extremely ugly or something?

07-04-2007, 08:02 PM	#25
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	lol. corny ass nigga. yeah yeah. save it for the battle homo. __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

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