check it...... dedicated to school and it's wackness

Nokster · 05-04-2007, 02:39 AM

pointless problems is what they addressin us, fuck callin me a pessimist
they under contract with a foot up they ass like a retarted ventriloquist//
carrying knowledge in our heads? no we have books that are items of trifle
switching on and off periods like a bitch with a fucked up menstrual cycle//
hands of clocks in my vision... my patience is gettin' the best of me
grab the marker of my thoughts and write on the whiteboard of revery//
envisioning the power of my pen, I scribble rhymes soon-to-be testaments
give em a,b,c, and d for four choices of my wrath fueled by their negligence//

what do you guys think? something I just scribbled a little while ago

Over_Flow · 05-04-2007, 07:25 AM

its iigh for a dude who doesnt really make raps that much.....vocab was nice....lines were a lil long but its iigh u made them flow well.....so ya it was pretty good....7.5/10...stay up

Nokster · 05-04-2007, 09:30 PM

^ propz fam..

and ya the lines are long cuz I go more with a poetical approach rather than making them fully 'rap compatible'. If I was to spit it... I would edit it a bit and chop it down a little bit.

05-04-2007, 02:39 AM	#1
Nokster ♫, $, & ♀ = Life. Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 8,903 Repped: 758 Repped 2,445 Times in 837 Posts Neg Reps: 44 Neg Repped at 104 Times in 85 Posts	check it...... dedicated to school and it's wackness check it...... dedicated to school and it's wackness pointless problems is what they addressin us, fuck callin me a pessimist they under contract with a foot up they ass like a retarted ventriloquist// carrying knowledge in our heads? no we have books that are items of trifle switching on and off periods like a bitch with a fucked up menstrual cycle// hands of clocks in my vision... my patience is gettin' the best of me grab the marker of my thoughts and write on the whiteboard of revery// envisioning the power of my pen, I scribble rhymes soon-to-be testaments give em a,b,c, and d for four choices of my wrath fueled by their negligence// what do you guys think? something I just scribbled a little while ago __________________ Los Scandalous.

05-04-2007, 09:30 PM	#3
Nokster ♫, $, & ♀ = Life. Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 8,903 Repped: 758 Repped 2,445 Times in 837 Posts Neg Reps: 44 Neg Repped at 104 Times in 85 Posts	^ propz fam.. and ya the lines are long cuz I go more with a poetical approach rather than making them fully 'rap compatible'. If I was to spit it... I would edit it a bit and chop it down a little bit. __________________ Los Scandalous.

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05-04-2007, 07:25 AM	#2
Over_Flow Banned Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Queens. NY Posts: 2,793 Repped: 525 Repped 939 Times in 277 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	its iigh for a dude who doesnt really make raps that much.....vocab was nice....lines were a lil long but its iigh u made them flow well.....so ya it was pretty good....7.5/10...stay up