The New Beginning Ft Tyrebeam, Young Sparks, The Franchise,& Airtokatlyan

Tha Truth · 05-02-2007, 06:27 PM

Yea is about time we let yall know Undisputed is up in this bitch

(chorus)
its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

(Tyrebeam)
Itz Dollaz Time, Ima shine fa some Dolla Signz.
I gotta rhyme, all ma rapz iz from da top a mind.
Yall niggaz talk about a time, when yall pop a nine.
Stop da lyin, just talk to me, U ca cop a rhyme.
I flow wit hotta linez, dat'll rock ya spine.
I be on top a minez, I show you niggaz how ta grind.
Ima teenager, countin green paper.
I live nightmarez, so I aint lookin for no dream maker.
Dey say I talk funny, but dey understandin ma rapz.
U-G'z be ma gang, tell em "Camden iz Back

(The Franchise)
Times start to get tough ya feel like falling-to-fame/
Feeling breathless no room to breath shits driving-you-insane/
Reaching out for help but there's no-one around/
You open your mouth screaming but hear no sound/
You don't know what to do shall I just-give-up/
Or do I have the energy to get free and rip-shit-up /
Do I have an inch of strength to force my self free?/
Can I force my eyes open so the world I can see?/
The question is do I truly believe I have the strength/
Do I just quit or take my body the extra length/
I take a step up in my life decide im still needed/
Won't quit even if at all tasks iv never succeeded/
Won't give up my family and life will never be conceded/
Ima keep going in this shit even when im disregarded/
Got family to fight for got a career to write for/
Some have a few I have the privilege of more/
Can't give up what ive got id be a coward if I fell/
No need to bow down to problems don't need a farewell/
Haters shocked im still hear standing I survived the crash-landing/
Different views one says im wack two im out-standing/
Never give up and never quit/
Rapping is my life and ima always spit/

(chorus)
its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

(Young Sparks)
Its me its me... its all about me/YoungSparks nigga...Undisputed Gs/ Best believe ima squeeze, this rap shit is ez cheese/Im going straight to the top, yall niggaz dont come to my knees/FREEZE...its me snitches/Beam,Air,Truth Undisputed Gs bitches/dont pay for a her meal, but the dick is free bitches/Snitch if u want but that equals free stitches/listen... im young but i spit like a veteran/my flow is sick yo Franchise bring the medicine/its Sparks homey...i got this style u gotta feel/put more niggaz in ya house then the cast from College Hill/everybody hold the steel ...n claim that they nice/I got them toys boy, but it aint made by Fisher Price/Fuck all the chit-chat homey lets throw the hands and fight/dude aint Nas but the source gave his album 1 mic/ I spit fire...enough to heat the world/and i dont hit chicks but i will beat ya girl/these rappers are peaches...look at my features/strap on my shoes, but it aint come with the sneakers/feels like i got a fever, the way i be spittin Either/Put me up their next to the son of Mrs. Cita

(Airtokatlyan)
undisputed till i die nigga thats my click //
so if u on that hatin shit get the fuck off my dick//

these lil niggas thinkin i'm some type of e thug//
come to queens ny and i'll introduce u to my e slug //(

)

shit its undisputed till the death bed//
never care will never snitch to the untrustworthy feds//

so go ahead lil niggas keep hatin on us //
one hit from fist will have u lookin like the side of that school bus//(in queens suome cop car hit a side of a bus while on pursuit)

niggas see me in the street and start runnin like camron//
if u mad fine jump off empire state like king kong//

u know wat it do cause i pack heat too//
one shot would have ya brain leakin out lookin like beef stew//

im unable to be fucked wit ill pop ur ass like a zit//
have this jealousy nigga mad girl want cash so she shows her tit//

niggas dont understand wut u be sayin//
better dipset for me and my niggas get the sprayin //

come through ur neighbohood and take wut u got//
dont start none of that play killa shit cause it could get u shot //

undisputed never associate wit the police//
the last shootin got u mad that u signed that lease//

now we see who the g and who the ho//
so just do like common nigga and ggggo//

(chorus)
its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

(Tha Truth)
talkin that hatred shit will get u hit and layed out flat
then me and the U-G niggas will come thru beat yo ass with a bat
cause im the beast that devour niggas ya'll some coward niggas
if yous a bitch change ya name to lil huey howard niggas
these lyric flows got ya'll goin insane in the brain
words pourin down ya shoulder like it was droplets of rain
its the beast of the east but nah i aint papoose
speak on me i'll stretch ya neck like a tall white goose
ya bitch is just to tacky, wish i was rich as pataki
i outta pull a dr dre and run through the hood in some khakis(nah)
my hood is the valley,see undisputed runs ya alley
i'll pick a fine bitch up with short hair lookin like she was hally
my rhythm is slick,im untouchable and quick
nigga mad at me cause ya girlfriend still ridin my dick(yea)
im tha truth whichs no lies told so tryin to go against me is bold
i got the type heat from these rhymes that could a niggas weak mind fold(mind fold)
i stack my paper($$) like it was slices of bread
if its beef close ya eyes and feel the steal rip thru ya head
this shit that im spittin is so hood and ferocious
tryin to hate on my bitch cause ya girl face is atrocious
im an undisputed general so dont let my name slide thru yo lips
i'll send them undisputed souljas at yo ass with loaded clips (bitch)

(chorus)
its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block
undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks
U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say
u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray

yeah that that undisputed shit right niggas

Homicidal Thots · 05-02-2007, 06:30 PM

lol@young sparks paragraph

Tha Truth · 05-02-2007, 07:05 PM

bump!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Witty Qwan · 05-02-2007, 07:35 PM

wooooooooooooooo shit hot

ya boy Mike · 05-02-2007, 07:46 PM

this is my best verse i think i got more punches and multies wat u niggas think bump

YoungJ · 05-02-2007, 08:30 PM

put more niggaz in ya house then the cast from College Hill
lol i was feeling that line g.. not bad

this collab had some wack lines and basic shit goin but keep improvin. i seen improvement from dudez i read before.

the hook was nice though.. especially if you made an audio.
most of you dudes need to open up ya vocab and get a flow going.
some of yous had a flow.. just some weak lines. dont rhyme with basic words all the time like bat and flat lol. anyways

this aint hate im just givin u feed g.. stay up tho.. wanna see u dudez get better

YoungJ · 05-02-2007, 08:32 PM

get at my shit with feed

Witty Qwan · 05-02-2007, 09:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by $C0††Y B

put more niggaz in ya house then the cast from College Hill
lol i was feeling that line g.. not bad
this collab had some wack lines and basic shit goin but keep improvin. i seen improvement from dudez i read before.

the hook was nice though.. especially if you made an audio.
most of you dudes need to open up ya vocab and get a flow going.
some of yous had a flow.. just some weak lines. dont rhyme with basic words all the time like bat and flat lol. anyways

this aint hate im just givin u feed g.. stay up tho.. wanna see u dudez get better

good looking ima check out ya shit^^^

Tha Truth · 05-02-2007, 10:07 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by $C0††Y B

put more niggaz in ya house then the cast from College Hill
lol i was feeling that line g.. not bad

this collab had some wack lines and basic shit goin but keep improvin. i seen improvement from dudez i read before.

the hook was nice though.. especially if you made an audio.
most of you dudes need to open up ya vocab and get a flow going.
some of yous had a flow.. just some weak lines. dont rhyme with basic words all the time like bat and flat lol. anyways

this aint hate im just givin u feed g.. stay up tho.. wanna see u dudez get better

good looks on the feed bump

Reddi Ree · 05-02-2007, 11:10 PM

HOt shit ma nig

The Franchise · 05-02-2007, 11:11 PM

this shit turned out hot

Tha Truth · 05-02-2007, 11:35 PM

bump!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Tha Truth · 05-03-2007, 05:26 PM

bumpin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

*Danja* · 05-03-2007, 11:16 PM

yall deserve to be in a crew together....all EQUALLY wack

The Franchise · 05-03-2007, 11:52 PM

^^^hating ass nigga

Reddi Ree · 05-04-2007, 09:15 AM

Someone'z mad

Tha Truth · 05-04-2007, 03:58 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Larsin

yall deserve to be in a crew together....all EQUALLY wack

nigga who is u go murk yo self bitch

Witty Qwan · 05-05-2007, 04:00 PM

bump!!!!!!!!!

Di$R3$p3(T · 05-06-2007, 07:37 PM

it wuz ight i wasnt really feelin it...its like 6/10 to me..it had nothin really special.

Tha Truth · 05-06-2007, 08:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Di$R3$p3(T

it wuz ight i wasnt really feelin it...its like 6/10 to me..it had nothin really special.

ight thanks on the feed

♪Spoken Word♪ · 05-06-2007, 08:36 PM

Gaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaabaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa aage

B Dope · 05-06-2007, 10:28 PM

ya lines were stretched.....shorten them up.....u had about 14 syllables every line and had one word rhymin in each line....make the line have more then one rhyme ya dig.....u still learning so its cool......

05-02-2007, 06:27 PM	#1
Tha Truth ..:General Truth:... Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: at ya girl crib Posts: 5,225 Repped: 675 Repped 1,045 Times in 251 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 3 Times in 2 Posts	The New Beginning Ft Tyrebeam, Young Sparks, The Franchise,& Airtokatlyan The New Beginning Ft Tyrebeam, Young Sparks, The Franchise,& Airtokatlyan Yea is about time we let yall know Undisputed is up in this bitch (chorus) its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray (Tyrebeam) Itz Dollaz Time, Ima shine fa some Dolla Signz. I gotta rhyme, all ma rapz iz from da top a mind. Yall niggaz talk about a time, when yall pop a nine. Stop da lyin, just talk to me, U ca cop a rhyme. I flow wit hotta linez, dat'll rock ya spine. I be on top a minez, I show you niggaz how ta grind. Ima teenager, countin green paper. I live nightmarez, so I aint lookin for no dream maker. Dey say I talk funny, but dey understandin ma rapz. U-G'z be ma gang, tell em "Camden iz Back (The Franchise) Times start to get tough ya feel like falling-to-fame/ Feeling breathless no room to breath shits driving-you-insane/ Reaching out for help but there's no-one around/ You open your mouth screaming but hear no sound/ You don't know what to do shall I just-give-up/ Or do I have the energy to get free and rip-shit-up / Do I have an inch of strength to force my self free?/ Can I force my eyes open so the world I can see?/ The question is do I truly believe I have the strength/ Do I just quit or take my body the extra length/ I take a step up in my life decide im still needed/ Won't quit even if at all tasks iv never succeeded/ Won't give up my family and life will never be conceded/ Ima keep going in this shit even when im disregarded/ Got family to fight for got a career to write for/ Some have a few I have the privilege of more/ Can't give up what ive got id be a coward if I fell/ No need to bow down to problems don't need a farewell/ Haters shocked im still hear standing I survived the crash-landing/ Different views one says im wack two im out-standing/ Never give up and never quit/ Rapping is my life and ima always spit/ (chorus) its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray (Young Sparks) Its me its me... its all about me/YoungSparks nigga...Undisputed Gs/ Best believe ima squeeze, this rap shit is ez cheese/Im going straight to the top, yall niggaz dont come to my knees/FREEZE...its me snitches/Beam,Air,Truth Undisputed Gs bitches/dont pay for a her meal, but the dick is free bitches/Snitch if u want but that equals free stitches/listen... im young but i spit like a veteran/my flow is sick yo Franchise bring the medicine/its Sparks homey...i got this style u gotta feel/put more niggaz in ya house then the cast from College Hill/everybody hold the steel ...n claim that they nice/I got them toys boy, but it aint made by Fisher Price/Fuck all the chit-chat homey lets throw the hands and fight/dude aint Nas but the source gave his album 1 mic/ I spit fire...enough to heat the world/and i dont hit chicks but i will beat ya girl/these rappers are peaches...look at my features/strap on my shoes, but it aint come with the sneakers/feels like i got a fever, the way i be spittin Either/Put me up their next to the son of Mrs. Cita (Airtokatlyan) undisputed till i die nigga thats my click // so if u on that hatin shit get the fuck off my dick// these lil niggas thinkin i'm some type of e thug// come to queens ny and i'll introduce u to my e slug //( ) shit its undisputed till the death bed// never care will never snitch to the untrustworthy feds// so go ahead lil niggas keep hatin on us // one hit from fist will have u lookin like the side of that school bus//(in queens suome cop car hit a side of a bus while on pursuit) niggas see me in the street and start runnin like camron// if u mad fine jump off empire state like king kong// u know wat it do cause i pack heat too// one shot would have ya brain leakin out lookin like beef stew// im unable to be fucked wit ill pop ur ass like a zit// have this jealousy nigga mad girl want cash so she shows her tit// niggas dont understand wut u be sayin// better dipset for me and my niggas get the sprayin // come through ur neighbohood and take wut u got// dont start none of that play killa shit cause it could get u shot // undisputed never associate wit the police// the last shootin got u mad that u signed that lease// now we see who the g and who the ho// so just do like common nigga and ggggo// (chorus) its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray (Tha Truth) talkin that hatred shit will get u hit and layed out flat then me and the U-G niggas will come thru beat yo ass with a bat cause im the beast that devour niggas ya'll some coward niggas if yous a bitch change ya name to lil huey howard niggas these lyric flows got ya'll goin insane in the brain words pourin down ya shoulder like it was droplets of rain its the beast of the east but nah i aint papoose speak on me i'll stretch ya neck like a tall white goose ya bitch is just to tacky, wish i was rich as pataki i outta pull a dr dre and run through the hood in some khakis(nah) my hood is the valley,see undisputed runs ya alley i'll pick a fine bitch up with short hair lookin like she was hally my rhythm is slick,im untouchable and quick nigga mad at me cause ya girlfriend still ridin my dick(yea) im tha truth whichs no lies told so tryin to go against me is bold i got the type heat from these rhymes that could a niggas weak mind fold(mind fold) i stack my paper($$) like it was slices of bread if its beef close ya eyes and feel the steal rip thru ya head this shit that im spittin is so hood and ferocious tryin to hate on my bitch cause ya girl face is atrocious im an undisputed general so dont let my name slide thru yo lips i'll send them undisputed souljas at yo ass with loaded clips (bitch) (chorus) its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray its the new beginning niggas and we back on the block undisputed holds it down niggas pistols and glocks U-Gz for life nigga so fuck wut u say u could be the next victim of a tragic gun spray yeah that that undisputed shit right niggas __________________ {~Undisputed G$~}/Mechanical workin, Hechler handle's jerkin That'll pull the Gate in after you Heavenly church him-Bank$

05-02-2007, 07:05 PM	#3
Tha Truth ..:General Truth:... Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: at ya girl crib Posts: 5,225 Repped: 675 Repped 1,045 Times in 251 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 3 Times in 2 Posts	bump!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! __________________ {~Undisputed G$~}/Mechanical workin, Hechler handle's jerkin That'll pull the Gate in after you Heavenly church him-Bank$

05-02-2007, 07:35 PM	#4
Witty Qwan # Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: My crib Posts: 3,050 Repped: 155 Repped 483 Times in 311 Posts Neg Reps: 21 Neg Repped at 82 Times in 75 Posts	wooooooooooooooo shit hot __________________ [02:34PM] Lyrikcha FUCK THIS FAGGOT CHAMBERS NIGGA...IM A CUT HIS HEAD OFF AND PUT IT ON A STICK FOR MY NIGGA TIGER CAN DEFROST THE GAT AND SMOKE U

05-02-2007, 07:46 PM	#5
ya boy Mike Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: QUEENS Posts: 4,848 Repped: 678 Repped 142 Times in 66 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 16 Times in 15 Posts	this is my best verse i think i got more punches and multies wat u niggas think bump __________________ You'll think im spellin' Iverson when the beef all done, cuz I'll leave you on the IV in the ER, SON-40 Cal

05-02-2007, 11:10 PM	#10
Reddi Ree Everybody'z Favorite Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: C-M-D, Nu Jerzey Posts: 1,000 Repped: 230 Repped 29 Times in 24 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 9 Times in 4 Posts	HOt shit ma nig __________________ myspace.com/reeyaboy

05-02-2007, 06:30 PM	#2
Homicidal Thots Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: behind you (no homo) :ninja: Posts: 2,692 Repped: 485 Repped 352 Times in 127 Posts Neg Reps: 9 Neg Repped at 7 Times in 7 Posts	lol@young sparks paragraph

05-02-2007, 08:30 PM	#6
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	put more niggaz in ya house then the cast from College Hill lol i was feeling that line g.. not bad this collab had some wack lines and basic shit goin but keep improvin. i seen improvement from dudez i read before. the hook was nice though.. especially if you made an audio. most of you dudes need to open up ya vocab and get a flow going. some of yous had a flow.. just some weak lines. dont rhyme with basic words all the time like bat and flat lol. anyways this aint hate im just givin u feed g.. stay up tho.. wanna see u dudez get better

05-02-2007, 08:32 PM	#7
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	get at my shit with feed

05-02-2007, 11:11 PM	#11
The Franchise Undisputed Gangstas Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: New Jersey Posts: 1,302 Repped: 16 Repped 102 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	this shit turned out hot __________________ ~Undisputed Gangstas~ Generals-Tha Truth, Airtokatlyan, Blue Diamonds, NWA(Deebo),The Franchise Souljas-Heat27, Crime~Dawg,, Silent Killah, Chocobo Killa, 5oX, NS Diplomat

05-02-2007, 11:35 PM	#12
Tha Truth ..:General Truth:... Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: at ya girl crib Posts: 5,225 Repped: 675 Repped 1,045 Times in 251 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 3 Times in 2 Posts	bump!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! __________________ {~Undisputed G$~}/Mechanical workin, Hechler handle's jerkin That'll pull the Gate in after you Heavenly church him-Bank$

05-03-2007, 05:26 PM	#13
Tha Truth ..:General Truth:... Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: at ya girl crib Posts: 5,225 Repped: 675 Repped 1,045 Times in 251 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 3 Times in 2 Posts	bumpin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! __________________ {~Undisputed G$~}/Mechanical workin, Hechler handle's jerkin That'll pull the Gate in after you Heavenly church him-Bank$

05-03-2007, 11:16 PM	#14
Danja Dont Get Mad....Get Swag Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: 2 Up,2 Down..Suffland, VA bitches Posts: 197 Repped: 0 Repped 5 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	yall deserve to be in a crew together....all EQUALLY wack

05-03-2007, 11:52 PM	#15
The Franchise Undisputed Gangstas Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: New Jersey Posts: 1,302 Repped: 16 Repped 102 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^^^hating ass nigga __________________ ~Undisputed Gangstas~ Generals-Tha Truth, Airtokatlyan, Blue Diamonds, NWA(Deebo),The Franchise Souljas-Heat27, Crime~Dawg,, Silent Killah, Chocobo Killa, 5oX, NS Diplomat

05-04-2007, 09:15 AM	#16
Reddi Ree Everybody'z Favorite Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: C-M-D, Nu Jerzey Posts: 1,000 Repped: 230 Repped 29 Times in 24 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 9 Times in 4 Posts	Someone'z mad __________________ myspace.com/reeyaboy

05-05-2007, 04:00 PM	#18
Witty Qwan # Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: My crib Posts: 3,050 Repped: 155 Repped 483 Times in 311 Posts Neg Reps: 21 Neg Repped at 82 Times in 75 Posts	bump!!!!!!!!! __________________ [02:34PM] Lyrikcha FUCK THIS FAGGOT CHAMBERS NIGGA...IM A CUT HIS HEAD OFF AND PUT IT ON A STICK FOR MY NIGGA TIGER CAN DEFROST THE GAT AND SMOKE U

05-06-2007, 07:37 PM	#19
Di$R3$p3(T [[HearT oF A ChampioN]] Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NeW JeRseY Posts: 1,049 Repped: 17 Repped 15 Times in 10 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	it wuz ight i wasnt really feelin it...its like 6/10 to me..it had nothin really special. __________________ "BacKk oN ThA BeAsT ModE" [OvErALL RecOrd]-[WiNz:"73" SliiP uHpz:"9"]

05-06-2007, 08:36 PM	#21
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Gaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaabaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa aage

05-06-2007, 10:28 PM	#22
B Dope Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,051 Repped: 638 Repped 375 Times in 112 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	ya lines were stretched.....shorten them up.....u had about 14 syllables every line and had one word rhymin in each line....make the line have more then one rhyme ya dig.....u still learning so its cool......

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