Where Im From

J~Souljah · 04-26-2007, 10:54 PM

im from the bottom of the bottom but i still can see the top
closed palmz, corrupted soulz, hearts conceil the demonz lock
im from where ya confidantz casually consumez your confidence
he'z lost...dispensez envious armament with the longest clip
i'm from where you have to stay four stepz ahead of yourself
cause no intentionz are selflezz....embedd this or melt (In Ya Brain)
i'm from where wifey will play you just to see the look on your face
itz unreal, like im fallin through reality tryna hook on to fate
i'm from where motherz will tell liez to keep you from society
yea i stayed out of trouble but the isolation divided me
i'm from where hammerz are blown becuz they said something stupid
an ignoramus cant comprehend consequencez, so think before you lose it
im from where rapperz fabricate, embellish, cuz there livez are to boring to tell
lying, thatz the daily procedure, from morning to hell
im from where catz will sleep on you because they dont understand your lyricz
secretly...on one hand they feel it, on the other hand they fear it
im from where crack iz like a pandemic, sell their houses to get it
your going through hell, all are indifferent, your spouse iz just livin
im from where thingz point to the opposition even though itz clear i won
the evilz demolishes the latter yet i can never hate where im from

Bmore

....DeMoNiK.... · 04-27-2007, 12:07 AM

Bar By Bar Breakdown
i aint sugar coating nuthin so if it hurts dont cry
i warned you

Quote:

im from the bottom of the bottom but i still can see the top
closed palmz, corrupted soulz, hearts conceil the demonz lock

Its basic wording anyone could have said this
whats closed palms got to do it nonetheless 4/10

im from where ya confidantz casually consumez your confidence
he'z lost...dispensez envious armament with the longest clip

okay i see where your going...this is a better bar
i like the fact you used multiple C words wording kinda
wack but nonetheless 5/10

i'm from where you have to stay four stepz ahead of yourself
cause no intentionz are selflezz....embedd this or melt (In Ya Brain)

whats up with this IM'' thing in every line
your falling off with this one i was feeling in...3/10

i'm from where wifey will play you just to see the look on your face
itz unreal, like im fallin through reality tryna hook on to fate

another basic bar not feelin this constancy is slippin off 3/10

i'm from where motherz will tell liez to keep you from society
yea i stayed out of trouble but the isolation divided me

okay the multies were alright not that good yet
badly worded bar yet to basic 3/10

i'm from where hammerz are blown becuz they said something stupid
an ignoramus cant comprehend consequencez, so think before you lose it

okay another better bar...i like some of the vocab does look like you used a dictionary a little but who care pulled off a little better
than other bars 5/10

im from where rapperz fabricate, embellish, cuz there livez are to boring to tell
lying, thatz the daily procedure, from morning to hell

weak nothing great about it but vocab and it wasnt that
big of a deal still 4/10
again work on constancy

im from where catz will sleep on you because they dont understand your lyricz
secretly...on one hand they feel it, on the other hand they fear it

okay the best bar in the drop no mettaz or w/p it would have made
it better a lil better so you aint crackin the 6/10 yet 5.5/10

im from where crack iz like a pandemic, sell their houses to get it
your going through hell, all are indifferent, your spouse iz just livin

basic...weak not that good we know crack is a pandemic/epidemic
in bmore 4/10

im from where thingz point to the opposition even though itz clear i won
the evilz demolishes the latter yet i can never hate where im from

smh not all that good 3/10

Bmore

this drop wasnt as constant as i thought it would be you
had one good bar but it wasnt all that good...it was okay
constancy is important i see your wrote this out
of your heart and what your surrounding like and such
but you could have added more element and made it
stand above what this is
stay up

J~Souljah · 04-27-2007, 08:29 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by LyricXinsane

Bar By Bar Breakdown
i aint sugar coating nuthin so if it hurts dont cry
i warned you

this drop wasnt as constant as i thought it would be you
had one good bar but it wasnt all that good...it was okay
constancy is important i see your wrote this out
of your heart and what your surrounding like and such
but you could have added more element and made it
stand above what this is
stay up

ok 1st off........closed palmz = not reaching your hand out 2 give

the alliteration wasnt pre~meditated

the im thing in every BAR (not line) iz 2 transition from one subject to da next.....like jay-z's where im from

another thing......."constancy"???

and umm....."comprehend"....."ignoramus"......those are not big wordz......so idk y u would think a dictionary would be involved in this

pandemic and epidemic are two different thingz 4 one.......and those usually pertain to diseases......so look it up......i could have said prevalent but you would have accused me of usin a dictionary right...

and that was my criticism of your criticism

you get an 3.3/10

Vjay88 · 04-27-2007, 09:00 AM

this is deep, from the heart
Anythin from the half is always at least a 6/10
The way you picked your words to tell the story of where you from was good
The only thing I missed was the flow, but that often depends on how one reads it
It's truth, thats nice.. good shit
keep it up

Komplex · 04-27-2007, 01:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by J~Souljah

.like jay-z's where im from

Dickryder

J~Souljah · 04-27-2007, 02:01 PM

^^^^^shut up whore....if i woulda said nas....u woulda been jumpin 4 joy.....smh dickryda

....DeMoNiK.... · 04-27-2007, 04:30 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by J~Souljah

ok 1st off........closed palmz = not reaching your hand out 2 give

the alliteration wasnt pre~meditated

the im thing in every BAR (not line) iz 2 transition from one subject to da next.....like jay-z's where im from

another thing......."constancy"???

and umm....."comprehend"....."ignoramus"......those are not big wordz......so idk y u would think a dictionary would be involved in this

pandemic and epidemic are two different thingz 4 one.......and those usually pertain to diseases......so look it up......i could have said prevalent but you would have accused me of usin a dictionary right...

and that was my criticism of your criticism

you get an 3.3/10

I was stating from a rookie standpoint if they read this
half of em dont know what it mean
you mad cause i ripped your freestyle from top to bottom
i dont need to look up pandemic and epidemic if it
perfer/pertained to diease why mention drugs stupid
really think before you post
all your shit was basic or worded badly deal with or work with it
and elevate otherwise dont complain

J~Souljah · 04-27-2007, 05:15 PM

^^^^^lmaoooooooooooooo.............."why mention drugz"......ur stupidity amazes me.......i believe i said like a pandemic............lmao.....dumb ass....the addiction spreadz.......wow.......go sumwhere with your sub~par knowledge

....DeMoNiK.... · 04-27-2007, 06:31 PM

No Matter How You Explain The Metta

"we know crack is a pandemic/epidemic" arent you belittled in your
own sayings

it was still a weak line

J~Souljah · 04-27-2007, 10:03 PM

lol uppin.......

Chocobo Killa · 04-27-2007, 10:34 PM

nigga u from da suburbz

J~Souljah · 04-27-2007, 11:21 PM

^^^n mah dick iz straight outta.........ya momz pussy.......not compton

Chocobo Killa · 04-27-2007, 11:48 PM

^^^ niga fuck u lil bitch ass nigga u cant rap neway

J~Souljah · 04-28-2007, 12:04 AM

^^^^^^do you hear yourself...you sound like a whining bitch talkin to her boyfriend dat juss left her

"i aint need yo broke ass anyway....das y u cant rap now"

Komplex · 04-28-2007, 02:53 PM

Nah, but on the serious side...this freestyle was near superb.

Vocabulary, Content, Flow...couldn't ask for much more.

"i'm from where motherz will tell liez to keep you from society
yea i stayed out of trouble but the isolation divided me"

"im from where catz will sleep on you because they dont understand your lyricz
secretly...on one hand they feel it, on the other hand they fear it"

9.5/10

J~Souljah · 04-28-2007, 02:55 PM

thnx nigga

~ILLEGAL~ · 04-29-2007, 08:31 PM

ill...........................

J~Souljah · 04-29-2007, 10:41 PM

lol thx uppin

Yung MiZfit · 11-13-2007, 03:29 PM

uppin.........

Baller · 11-13-2007, 03:53 PM

shit was pretty straight...only big fault on this was you stretched ya lines way too much

Yung MiZfit · 11-13-2007, 04:00 PM

^^^this iz pretty old...when i actually did text

N. Streetz · 11-13-2007, 11:14 PM

i'm from where wifey will play you just to see the look on your face
itz unreal, like im fallin through reality tryna hook on to fate

im from where catz will sleep on you because they dont understand your lyricz
secretly...on one hand they feel it, on the other hand they fear it

Dope Drop Its Amazing How You Can Pull These Old Freestyles Up And They're Better Than The First Time You Read Them

04-26-2007, 10:54 PM	#1
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	Where Im From Where Im From im from the bottom of the bottom but i still can see the top closed palmz, corrupted soulz, hearts conceil the demonz lock im from where ya confidantz casually consumez your confidence he'z lost...dispensez envious armament with the longest clip i'm from where you have to stay four stepz ahead of yourself cause no intentionz are selflezz....embedd this or melt (In Ya Brain) i'm from where wifey will play you just to see the look on your face itz unreal, like im fallin through reality tryna hook on to fate i'm from where motherz will tell liez to keep you from society yea i stayed out of trouble but the isolation divided me i'm from where hammerz are blown becuz they said something stupid an ignoramus cant comprehend consequencez, so think before you lose it im from where rapperz fabricate, embellish, cuz there livez are to boring to tell lying, thatz the daily procedure, from morning to hell im from where catz will sleep on you because they dont understand your lyricz secretly...on one hand they feel it, on the other hand they fear it im from where crack iz like a pandemic, sell their houses to get it your going through hell, all are indifferent, your spouse iz just livin im from where thingz point to the opposition even though itz clear i won the evilz demolishes the latter yet i can never hate where im from Bmore

04-27-2007, 09:00 AM	#4
Vjay88 VJay - TakeOver Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: NL/UK Posts: 2,396 Repped: 210 Repped 306 Times in 46 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	this is deep, from the heart Anythin from the half is always at least a 6/10 The way you picked your words to tell the story of where you from was good The only thing I missed was the flow, but that often depends on how one reads it It's truth, thats nice.. good shit keep it up __________________ "Shit I been hated since the 5th Grade Thats why my best friends the treypound, a Icepick and a Switch Blade" - Banks

04-27-2007, 10:34 PM	#11
Chocobo Killa hideouslookin@hotmail.com Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Philadelphia, PA Posts: 1,311 Repped: 233 Repped 566 Times in 144 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	nigga u from da suburbz __________________

04-27-2007, 11:48 PM	#13
Chocobo Killa hideouslookin@hotmail.com Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Philadelphia, PA Posts: 1,311 Repped: 233 Repped 566 Times in 144 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^^^ niga fuck u lil bitch ass nigga u cant rap neway __________________

04-28-2007, 02:53 PM	#15
Komplex Poetic Swagger Join Date: Sep 2006 Posts: 1,164 Repped: 117 Repped 99 Times in 50 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Nah, but on the serious side...this freestyle was near superb. Vocabulary, Content, Flow...couldn't ask for much more. "i'm from where motherz will tell liez to keep you from society yea i stayed out of trouble but the isolation divided me" "im from where catz will sleep on you because they dont understand your lyricz secretly...on one hand they feel it, on the other hand they fear it" 9.5/10 __________________ "Set up to be a loser but was made to be a winner If they paint Hip Hop I bet my face be in the picture If they wrote a Rap Bible bet my name be in the scriptures If shorty say I'm her Idol, bet her face be in my zipper"-Joell Ortiz

04-27-2007, 02:01 PM	#6
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	^^^^^shut up whore....if i woulda said nas....u woulda been jumpin 4 joy.....smh dickryda

04-27-2007, 05:15 PM	#8
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	^^^^^lmaoooooooooooooo.............."why mention drugz"......ur stupidity amazes me.......i believe i said like a pandemic............lmao.....dumb ass....the addiction spreadz.......wow.......go sumwhere with your sub~par knowledge

04-27-2007, 06:31 PM	#9
....DeMoNiK.... Banned Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 944 Repped: 3 Repped 27 Times in 19 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	No Matter How You Explain The Metta "we know crack is a pandemic/epidemic" arent you belittled in your own sayings it was still a weak line

04-27-2007, 10:03 PM	#10
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	lol uppin.......

04-27-2007, 11:21 PM	#12
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	^^^n mah dick iz straight outta.........ya momz pussy.......not compton

04-28-2007, 12:04 AM	#14
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	^^^^^^do you hear yourself...you sound like a whining bitch talkin to her boyfriend dat juss left her "i aint need yo broke ass anyway....das y u cant rap now"

04-28-2007, 02:55 PM	#16
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	thnx nigga

04-29-2007, 08:31 PM	#17
~ILLEGAL~ Banned Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 57 Repped: 14 Repped 3 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	ill...........................

04-29-2007, 10:41 PM	#18
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	lol thx uppin

11-13-2007, 03:29 PM	#19
Yung MiZfit Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 273 Repped: 0 Repped 9 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin.........

11-13-2007, 03:53 PM	#20
Baller Vulture Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: NM Posts: 3,097 Repped: 111 Repped 263 Times in 149 Posts Neg Reps: 95 Neg Repped at 61 Times in 39 Posts	shit was pretty straight...only big fault on this was you stretched ya lines way too much __________________

11-13-2007, 04:00 PM	#21
Yung MiZfit Join Date: Dec 2006 Posts: 273 Repped: 0 Repped 9 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^^^this iz pretty old...when i actually did text

11-13-2007, 11:14 PM	#22
N. Streetz I Was Born Elite Join Date: May 2007 Location: In The Place Of Daydreams Posts: 704 Repped: 104 Repped 82 Times in 47 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	i'm from where wifey will play you just to see the look on your face itz unreal, like im fallin through reality tryna hook on to fate im from where catz will sleep on you because they dont understand your lyricz secretly...on one hand they feel it, on the other hand they fear it Dope Drop Its Amazing How You Can Pull These Old Freestyles Up And They're Better Than The First Time You Read Them

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