..Feel My Pain..

♪Spoken Word♪ · 04-25-2007, 05:22 PM

Listen:...
i'm a profit, a prospect of the hunger that feuls me..
highly anticipated hopes for somethin that moves me..
emotional breakdowns, dreams, i have some to subdue these..
..nightmares, cuz tha path i've taken, tha image is dark..
i'm given this start for happyness to live in this heart..
and i express these feelins, lord please bless these choices..
the psychology left me lonely so i ressurect these voices..
on this journey to defeat my demons, i pass assumptions..
..that see me as the reason for this mass destruction..
i'm way past discussion, no more verbal altercations..
and i rap so i dont need to work through occupations..
whens my inaugeration? i'm set in life wit shit i could die for..
but i'm tryna support what i've learned to provide for..
and as these demons catch up & learn my strategic plans..
eating away this light guiding me as i work hard to be this man..
feel my pain, a cold heart is what these streets inchant..
struggling crazy, a harmfull soul embedded in my chest!..
demons proceeding, fuck it, i'm settling for death!!..
..Jea..

Lyrical Messiah · 04-25-2007, 05:31 PM

Yo This Looks Familiar Fam This The One You Dropped On The Other Site Anyways You Shitting On Niggas I Give It A 9/10

♪Spoken Word♪ · 04-25-2007, 07:49 PM

Props Fam... Keep That Feedback Comin

♪Spoken Word♪ · 04-25-2007, 10:29 PM

Sleeeepy Heeeeaaaaaddssss

Empire · 04-25-2007, 10:31 PM

yo thts hott man good shit
give some feedback on mine

♪Spoken Word♪ · 04-26-2007, 07:46 PM

Props On Tha Feed Fam... Keep It Comin Tho

ReFleXiOn · 04-26-2007, 07:56 PM

I'm very impressed...it's nice to see I ain't the only cat comin' on complex shit and using intellect instead of "I'ma thug nigga" shit...this drop is immaculate..... nothing less...excellent read and i'm giving it a 9.5/10...simply becuz giving a 10 is not my thing...stay up spoken and do you...and return the feed on my latest drop if u get the chance...ain't got no feed yet and it's something of this calibre so I feel u'll appreciate it...1

♪Spoken Word♪ · 04-26-2007, 08:18 PM

props fam... i really appreciate that constructive feed... i got you

doctorthugonometry · 04-26-2007, 08:35 PM

lawl..

I parsed the first 3 lines and. . . Not lookin' too good.

♪Spoken Word♪ · 04-27-2007, 09:08 AM

Ok Thanx?... Uppin

♪Spoken Word♪ · 04-27-2007, 03:42 PM

Blaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa h

Lil Lay · 04-27-2007, 05:27 PM

It was good, spoken, the first lines I didn't think were great but at this part:

d i express these feelins, lord please bless these choices..
the psychology left me lonely so i ressurect these voices..
on this journey to defeat my demons, i pass assumptions..
..that see me as the reason for this mass destruction..
i'm way past discussion, no more verbal altercations..
and i rap so i dont need to work through occupations..

It picked up quite some bit.

good piece.

04-25-2007, 05:22 PM	#1
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	..Feel My Pain.. ..Feel My Pain.. Listen:... i'm a profit, a prospect of the hunger that feuls me.. highly anticipated hopes for somethin that moves me.. emotional breakdowns, dreams, i have some to subdue these.. ..nightmares, cuz tha path i've taken, tha image is dark.. i'm given this start for happyness to live in this heart.. and i express these feelins, lord please bless these choices.. the psychology left me lonely so i ressurect these voices.. on this journey to defeat my demons, i pass assumptions.. ..that see me as the reason for this mass destruction.. i'm way past discussion, no more verbal altercations.. and i rap so i dont need to work through occupations.. whens my inaugeration? i'm set in life wit shit i could die for.. but i'm tryna support what i've learned to provide for.. and as these demons catch up & learn my strategic plans.. eating away this light guiding me as i work hard to be this man.. feel my pain, a cold heart is what these streets inchant.. struggling crazy, a harmfull soul embedded in my chest!.. demons proceeding, fuck it, i'm settling for death!!.. ..Jea..

04-26-2007, 08:35 PM	#9
doctorthugonometry Greater than you.. .. Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: Southkeys Posts: 2,579 Repped: 3 Repped 5 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	lawl.. I parsed the first 3 lines and. . . Not lookin' too good. __________________ I married hip hop; ignored what some was tellin' me.. I started hearin' rumors of infidelity.. I ain't divorce 'er; all the other dudes is so wack that I ain't even feel a little jealousy

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04-25-2007, 05:31 PM	#2
Lyrical Messiah Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: NVH The Home of the Brave 3rd Wall 4 Life Posts: 1,776 Repped: 74 Repped 123 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 1 Post	Yo This Looks Familiar Fam This The One You Dropped On The Other Site Anyways You Shitting On Niggas I Give It A 9/10

04-25-2007, 07:49 PM	#3
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Props Fam... Keep That Feedback Comin

04-25-2007, 10:29 PM	#4
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Sleeeepy Heeeeaaaaaddssss

04-25-2007, 10:31 PM	#5
Empire Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 222 Repped: 11 Repped 18 Times in 9 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	yo thts hott man good shit give some feedback on mine

04-26-2007, 07:46 PM	#6
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Props On Tha Feed Fam... Keep It Comin Tho

04-26-2007, 07:56 PM	#7
ReFleXiOn Blissful Poetry Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Canada, SK. Posts: 1,052 Repped: 0 Repped 26 Times in 21 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 2 Posts	I'm very impressed...it's nice to see I ain't the only cat comin' on complex shit and using intellect instead of "I'ma thug nigga" shit...this drop is immaculate..... nothing less...excellent read and i'm giving it a 9.5/10...simply becuz giving a 10 is not my thing...stay up spoken and do you...and return the feed on my latest drop if u get the chance...ain't got no feed yet and it's something of this calibre so I feel u'll appreciate it...1

04-26-2007, 08:18 PM	#8
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	props fam... i really appreciate that constructive feed... i got you

04-27-2007, 09:08 AM	#10
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Ok Thanx?... Uppin

04-27-2007, 03:42 PM	#11
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Blaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa h

04-27-2007, 05:27 PM	#12
Lil Lay Fallen Angel Join Date: May 2005 Location: Homer Posts: 3,897 Repped: 1 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	It was good, spoken, the first lines I didn't think were great but at this part: d i express these feelins, lord please bless these choices.. the psychology left me lonely so i ressurect these voices.. on this journey to defeat my demons, i pass assumptions.. ..that see me as the reason for this mass destruction.. i'm way past discussion, no more verbal altercations.. and i rap so i dont need to work through occupations.. It picked up quite some bit. good piece.