"Deep Cover '08" - Also, the whole NBS thing..

Kinfolk · 03-16-2007, 08:56 PM

hi
veteran from nobodysmiling(Space Godzilla), dont let a few cocky ones generalize us all, we really arent cocky as a majority. I came here not to battle, just to seek feedback on this multi/wordplay mix.

[Verse1]
I bust here with an atmosphere of intimidation: the drum whispers
tongue twisters to dumb listeners, cause im atcha ear piece insinuatin'
you got the wrong genesis, I shell shock these drone innocents,
on top of my game, shit I might as well be my own nemesis!
im spittin arrows, upliftin aero, to ya marrows, I tangle
taggin ankles of padent angels from back end angles
I quote big's suicide notes, and mom-fuck it im pissed too,
im tired of knockin, im bum rushin with pistols
pencils left off bombin right on scum suckin bitches who
brung in the ridicule, I poetically hum crushin the whistles,
riddin you, rich rituals, my gun's clutched like tissue,
commonly comin thumpin' comptons, cum bustin' with missiles
from some cousins with issues, my combustion'll slip through,
prove why my tongue cussin's an issue, flaunted, sonnet concussions, move
I'll ventilate this vet, venigrated to venidate his vest,
vicious liquids to hit, vivid pivots dismissed, vixens
fixen my vice grip, C-N-N? I invite clips of vital crack scenes
they say my name in vain with veins AIDed by lack of viral vaccines,
I reverse my verses to versus virtually any doodoo local,
ya vex'd by voodoo vocals, cementin mentions indentin indentions
to sentence, ya signifigance to these sent in sentences, bitch
I eat ya asswhole, spectulation's leavin no specks of an aspect
by treatin assholes wreckin rectums even though i've yet to have sex!
my iron fist, ironically fits, all ethnics wretched with work ethics,
that exist, the shit exits my lips with lisp, cuzz
im spittin out syllables, he stands'a chance 'ginst my stanza's and sonnets?
shit, his mouth's sealable, im always up on it to cancer my opponents,
I release therapy with these analog analogies, Im pit to pitch too much of this shit:
cuz like brown crissed crossed & tossed witta cup of cris, chris? is Luda f**kin Kris

Kinfolk · 03-16-2007, 10:16 PM

will feed on some more pieces around here, uppin'

HH4ll · 03-16-2007, 10:25 PM

ok, you don\'t need to apoligize for others. . .we can tell whos good and whos not

this was pretty good, vocab, concepts, imagery were all there, i felt like you started and ended a little weak though. . .the middle was my favorite with dope lines like

Code:

riddin you, rich rituals, my gun\'s clutched like tissue,
commonly comin thumpin\' comptons, cum bustin\' with missiles
from some cousins with issues, my combustion\'ll slip through,
prove why my tongue cussin\'s an issue, flaunted, sonnet concussions, move

its the same free, i just gave you those links in case you have an account on any of them, you should be able to read it w/o an account though

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Nanse · 03-16-2007, 10:36 PM

i enjoyed reading dis man

favorite part:

im spittin arrows, upliftin aero, to ya marrows, I tangle
taggin ankles of padent angels from back end angles
I quote big's suicide notes, and mom-fuck it im pissed too,
im tired of knockin, im bum rushin with pistols
pencils left off bombin right on scum suckin bitches who
brung in the ridicule, I poetically hum crushin the whistles,
riddin you, rich rituals, my gun's clutched like tissue,
commonly comin thumpin' comptons, cum bustin' with missiles

stay up man

H.O.V.A. · 03-16-2007, 10:39 PM

Very nice free...also nice to see some1 reppin another site with intetions other than undermining us lol...stay up.

Kinfolk · 03-16-2007, 10:44 PM

I used to be on rapworlds as "Kuruption" but I got cheated in a 14 bar battle and said fuck it, I forgot my account password though, I'll PM you feed when I get the time though.

HH4ll · 03-16-2007, 10:45 PM

i just dropped it under this name, its right under here. . .

03-16-2007, 08:56 PM	#1
Kinfolk Space Godzilla Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 6 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	"Deep Cover '08" - Also, the whole NBS thing.. "Deep Cover '08" - Also, the whole NBS thing.. hi veteran from nobodysmiling(Space Godzilla), dont let a few cocky ones generalize us all, we really arent cocky as a majority. I came here not to battle, just to seek feedback on this multi/wordplay mix. [Verse1] I bust here with an atmosphere of intimidation: the drum whispers tongue twisters to dumb listeners, cause im atcha ear piece insinuatin' you got the wrong genesis, I shell shock these drone innocents, on top of my game, shit I might as well be my own nemesis! im spittin arrows, upliftin aero, to ya marrows, I tangle taggin ankles of padent angels from back end angles I quote big's suicide notes, and mom-fuck it im pissed too, im tired of knockin, im bum rushin with pistols pencils left off bombin right on scum suckin bitches who brung in the ridicule, I poetically hum crushin the whistles, riddin you, rich rituals, my gun's clutched like tissue, commonly comin thumpin' comptons, cum bustin' with missiles from some cousins with issues, my combustion'll slip through, prove why my tongue cussin's an issue, flaunted, sonnet concussions, move I'll ventilate this vet, venigrated to venidate his vest, vicious liquids to hit, vivid pivots dismissed, vixens fixen my vice grip, C-N-N? I invite clips of vital crack scenes they say my name in vain with veins AIDed by lack of viral vaccines, I reverse my verses to versus virtually any doodoo local, ya vex'd by voodoo vocals, cementin mentions indentin indentions to sentence, ya signifigance to these sent in sentences, bitch I eat ya asswhole, spectulation's leavin no specks of an aspect by treatin assholes wreckin rectums even though i've yet to have sex! my iron fist, ironically fits, all ethnics wretched with work ethics, that exist, the shit exits my lips with lisp, cuzz im spittin out syllables, he stands'a chance 'ginst my stanza's and sonnets? shit, his mouth's sealable, im always up on it to cancer my opponents, I release therapy with these analog analogies, Im pit to pitch too much of this shit: cuz like brown crissed crossed & tossed witta cup of cris, chris? is Luda f**kin Kris

03-16-2007, 10:25 PM	#3
HH4ll Banned Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 197 Repped: 9 Repped 36 Times in 14 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	ok, you don\'t need to apoligize for others. . .we can tell whos good and whos not this was pretty good, vocab, concepts, imagery were all there, i felt like you started and ended a little weak though. . .the middle was my favorite with dope lines like Code: riddin you, rich rituals, my gun\'s clutched like tissue, commonly comin thumpin\' comptons, cum bustin\' with missiles from some cousins with issues, my combustion\'ll slip through, prove why my tongue cussin\'s an issue, flaunted, sonnet concussions, move its the same free, i just gave you those links in case you have an account on any of them, you should be able to read it w/o an account though 1

03-16-2007, 10:36 PM	#4
Nanse Da Purple Pimp Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: I'm from N-E-W Jerz., where plenty murders occurz Posts: 3,131 Repped: 692 Repped 376 Times in 236 Posts Neg Reps: 49 Neg Repped at 75 Times in 74 Posts	i enjoyed reading dis man favorite part: im spittin arrows, upliftin aero, to ya marrows, I tangle taggin ankles of padent angels from back end angles I quote big's suicide notes, and mom-fuck it im pissed too, im tired of knockin, im bum rushin with pistols pencils left off bombin right on scum suckin bitches who brung in the ridicule, I poetically hum crushin the whistles, riddin you, rich rituals, my gun's clutched like tissue, commonly comin thumpin' comptons, cum bustin' with missiles stay up man __________________ I'm the M.B.P., Most Ballin-ist Player Make my own rules, bitch call me the mayor

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03-16-2007, 10:16 PM	#2
Kinfolk Space Godzilla Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 6 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	will feed on some more pieces around here, uppin'

03-16-2007, 10:39 PM	#5
H.O.V.A. Banned Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: LI Posts: 4,564 Repped: 102 Repped 293 Times in 39 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Very nice free...also nice to see some1 reppin another site with intetions other than undermining us lol...stay up.

03-16-2007, 10:44 PM	#6
Kinfolk Space Godzilla Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 6 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	I used to be on rapworlds as "Kuruption" but I got cheated in a 14 bar battle and said fuck it, I forgot my account password though, I'll PM you feed when I get the time though.

03-16-2007, 10:45 PM	#7
HH4ll Banned Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 197 Repped: 9 Repped 36 Times in 14 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	i just dropped it under this name, its right under here. . .