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Old 03-16-2007, 06:55 PM   #1
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Default Two Keystyled Horrorcore Verses. . .

Two Keystyled Horrorcore Verses. . .

Two keystyles for Horrorcore battles on IHH . . . My first two. . .the first was done last night. . .the second was keyed while i was talking to menace on aim. . .

vs Yurluzn Bracket
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my minds sick, trap this bitch in metal \'brackets\'. . .he spews slow crys see. . .
and before i tear out ya vocal cords and use them as a pussy. . .i hear \'\'Y.B?\'\'
this heathens mine. . .tear out ya liver through ya dick then use ya yeast as wine
then send a wooden stake through ya egg. . .guess i got east a spine (easter\'s pine)*
after that. . .shed ya remaining skin, then choke ya with the epidermis
then cut out ya breast and serve it to my inner demons. . .use ya remaining chest as a thermos
for ya blood, which becomes my gatorade, fuels the last part of this horrific act
pop out ya eyes, replace them with your cullions. . .and fuck football you\'ll actually be sacked


vs Ex Cal
Code:
Capture The Foe, Stick A Wrench Through His Strenum Then Staple The Lips Together, Then Use My Blood Stained Teeth To Bite The Voicebox
No Screams Shall Be Heard, But The Sweet Melody Of His Flesh Journeying Down My Throat Fits The Foundation Perfectly Well Like Toy Blocks
Push His Limp Carcass To A Floor Tatooed With Bones, Then Slowly Remove The Pedicals From His Spine With Pliers With The Devil\'s Emblem
Hearing The Forminia Split Eases My Soul, So I Move Towards The Stomach, Make Incisions Into The Intestines And Then Drink This Man\'s Flem
Tear The Auricle And Pulmonary Veins Out With My Fingertips, Wipe My Hands Clean With Your Middle Penducle, This Is A Great Sin
I\'m A Mephistophelian Soul, And To Finish The Job, I Expel Salivia Onto The Victims Flaccid Body That\'s Simply The Chalk Of Satan


ye. . .u should know the names of body parts and what they look like before u feed up. . .
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Old 03-16-2007, 07:12 PM   #2
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ughhh u missed da point of a horrorcore battle..i seen u try to use metas and wordplay...and didnt concentrate on the horror...if i read this to my little sister she wouldnt hav been scared....point is make it more scary.....ya horror concepts was basic as hell...1
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Old 03-16-2007, 10:32 PM   #3
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Okay, before I go on I want to criticize and comment on "Young Gunna's" feedback. The only way possible to "scare someone with text" alone would be severe imagery. The more imagery the more vivid of a picture is painted. So what exactly is he getting at when he says you tried to use "metaphors and wordplays" (in other words comparison and creativity). How could he accomplish good horrorcore without metaphorical devices is the real question. Now to the drop. I did see some played concepts, but played concepts are nothing, its the FLIP of the concept that matters, and those you did a little careless at times. Granted your concepts were far-fectched and almost "psycho" (a common theme in Horrorcore), but i dont exactly know WHAT you were going for. Were you trying to scare someone? or just keep imagery? you kept imagery and poetic devices, thats all I can comment on fully without knowing the rubric of a "horrorcore battle" on here. Major props for even attempting this, on NBS cats dont usually fuck with horrorcore, this is because for horrorcore you generally look more for imagery than any other form of rap, its like you are always expecting it.
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Old 03-16-2007, 10:36 PM   #4
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yea, i was bored and made a horrorcore callout on ihh, but it was my first two pieces so i still have a lot to learn. .

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Cats Around Here Don't Know Shit About Horrorcore Either.. .. They Just Put A Bunch Of Big Words They Don't Know Together With Body Parts And Words Like 'Slice' And 'Puncture'.. ..

Shit Was Wack CC.. .. You Can Barely Do A Regular Verse.. .. Yet You're Trying To Do Horrorcore.. .. I Don't Even Bother With Horrorcore, It's Too Easy.. ..
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Old 03-16-2007, 10:39 PM   #6
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DOSEFACE!!!!!!

no1 asked for your opinion

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