Lyrical Excrise(16)

Youngcity415 · 02-13-2007, 07:07 PM

What the fuck do I gotta do ain’t got ish nothing to prove//
I’m as sick as sum shrooms explode on niggas like kaboom//
I’m hungry for murder like I got an appetite for destruction//
Who you think that ya touchin stupid nigga stop da frontin//
Why you lie in your rhymes your semis is neva eva busting//
When your taking a shit is the only time wen you be dumping//
Niggas who want a war with city got it backwards they want peace//
But ya respect just decreased beefing wit me you close to deceased//
Meeting defeat naw that will never be me cuz I stand on my two feet//
Punchlines knock the white off your teeth till you meet eternal sleep//
Throw shots at ya toes and keep you tippy like a drunken Flintstone//

I’m Hard Body Twenty-Four-Seven rhymes is fire like Brimstones//
I’ll leave your life gauge on empty tell your leader who fucking sent me//
I’m Lyrical solider haters every where but I’m loving the fucking envy//
No collab for this one thought I would take it on as a solo jus for the dolo//
Niggas act hard like dildos thought he was a main event turn him 2 promo//
Thinking ya da best nigga we don’t believe ya you forgetting like amnesia//
Catch a quick Skeeza seize her and shake ass like she had a damn seizure//
To speak my name nigga you must be really insane in the damn membrane//
You just said it for fame now you holding ya chest like ya in extreme pain//
You think your hot nigga let me cool your off with a lead shower coward//
Yall niggas dissolve easily like a combination of water and soap powder//
Destroy any and all opponents in my way there won’t be a single adversary//
You not good enough to battle me you can’t even finish ya own pulmonary//
In this rap shit I’m the first like primary you a lil far behind like secondary//
Your life lasting shorter than Febuaray winning to me is highly necessary//
I’m striving for perfection me the best there ain’t no second guessing//
Diagnosed with a lyrical infection just praying for the lyrical blessing//
You can’t sit here and tell me im not the best when it comes to my section//
So make me low inter or higher or imma have to grant a nigga deathwish//
Show respect when you seem me niggas need to act real courteous//
Cuz you beating me will neva eva happen just like February thirtieth//

Youngcity415 · 02-13-2007, 07:08 PM

bring da feed........

ya boy Mike · 02-13-2007, 07:09 PM

its ok .... not great not hot not good ok

Youngcity415 · 02-13-2007, 07:13 PM

uppin 4 mo feed

Youngcity415 · 02-13-2007, 08:00 PM

uppin 4 feed

Youngcity415 · 02-13-2007, 09:03 PM

where da feed??????????

Lyrical Messiah · 02-13-2007, 09:42 PM

Its cool long but i actually liked it

Lyrical Messiah · 02-13-2007, 09:44 PM

Oh yeah could you rate PA State Of Mind(if you havent) and Black Democrat

Youngcity415 · 02-13-2007, 09:53 PM

iight no doubt n thanx uppin

Lyrical Messiah · 02-13-2007, 09:54 PM

no problem dude

Youngcity415 · 02-13-2007, 11:28 PM

feed!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lyrical Messiah · 02-13-2007, 11:32 PM

I will drop feed on a past drop if you leave feed on Pa State Of Mind

Youngcity415 · 02-13-2007, 11:44 PM

iight i'll do dat lata uppin

LaWN NAiL · 02-14-2007, 01:11 AM

"Throw shots at ya toes and keep you tippy like a drunken Flintstone"

Yes..That Really Shocked Me.....

..And This Was The Results

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Youngcity415 · 02-14-2007, 10:42 AM

^^ umm ok lol uppin 4 feed

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 02-14-2007, 10:48 AM

It Was There....8/10

Youngcity415 · 02-14-2007, 10:52 AM

thanx uppin

Youngcity415 · 02-14-2007, 11:16 AM

uppin!!!!!!!!!!!

Youngcity415 · 02-14-2007, 01:15 PM

Feed!!!!!!!!!!

Youngcity415 · 02-14-2007, 04:01 PM

feed????????????????????????

Lyrical Messiah · 02-14-2007, 04:13 PM

Yo did you leave feed on Pa State Of Mind

Youngcity415 · 02-14-2007, 05:23 PM

nah not yet im trynna get sum more feed on my shit

-K.P- · 02-14-2007, 05:27 PM

Was Pretty Good, Stay Up, Keep Improving, Work On Punchlines On Every Bar If Possible, Wordplay, Just More Complexity

Youngcity415 · 02-14-2007, 06:31 PM

thanx kp uppinnn

Jay Hussle · 02-14-2007, 07:03 PM

Exercise

I would have rated this eariler but i kept going by
and didnt even care..
Now ima start ratin ppl hard because no one is impressing me one bit
around here but Soljah(glk) and Jr-one

anyway..

Yes U are Improving..Add some Punchlines and shit
DO the punchline first then the setup..
Set^=!st line
2nd line=2nd
But it was iight tho
To Lenghty and yuhad some nice lines to

that Flintstone shit is nice.
Keep it up Yo

But I dont kno if that KABOOM line was a sublimal
IDM tho

02-13-2007, 07:07 PM	#1
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Lyrical Excrise(16) Lyrical Excrise(16) What the fuck do I gotta do ain’t got ish nothing to prove// I’m as sick as sum shrooms explode on niggas like kaboom// I’m hungry for murder like I got an appetite for destruction// Who you think that ya touchin stupid nigga stop da frontin// Why you lie in your rhymes your semis is neva eva busting// When your taking a shit is the only time wen you be dumping// Niggas who want a war with city got it backwards they want peace// But ya respect just decreased beefing wit me you close to deceased// Meeting defeat naw that will never be me cuz I stand on my two feet// Punchlines knock the white off your teeth till you meet eternal sleep// Throw shots at ya toes and keep you tippy like a drunken Flintstone// I’m Hard Body Twenty-Four-Seven rhymes is fire like Brimstones// I’ll leave your life gauge on empty tell your leader who fucking sent me// I’m Lyrical solider haters every where but I’m loving the fucking envy// No collab for this one thought I would take it on as a solo jus for the dolo// Niggas act hard like dildos thought he was a main event turn him 2 promo// Thinking ya da best nigga we don’t believe ya you forgetting like amnesia// Catch a quick Skeeza seize her and shake ass like she had a damn seizure// To speak my name nigga you must be really insane in the damn membrane// You just said it for fame now you holding ya chest like ya in extreme pain// You think your hot nigga let me cool your off with a lead shower coward// Yall niggas dissolve easily like a combination of water and soap powder// Destroy any and all opponents in my way there won’t be a single adversary// You not good enough to battle me you can’t even finish ya own pulmonary// In this rap shit I’m the first like primary you a lil far behind like secondary// Your life lasting shorter than Febuaray winning to me is highly necessary// I’m striving for perfection me the best there ain’t no second guessing// Diagnosed with a lyrical infection just praying for the lyrical blessing// You can’t sit here and tell me im not the best when it comes to my section// So make me low inter or higher or imma have to grant a nigga deathwish// Show respect when you seem me niggas need to act real courteous// Cuz you beating me will neva eva happen just like February thirtieth//

02-14-2007, 10:48 AM	#16
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,906 Repped: 80 Repped 311 Times in 147 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	It Was There....8/10 __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

02-14-2007, 07:03 PM	#25
Jay Hussle Unimaginable Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: SoufSide Posts: 535 Repped: 0 Repped 52 Times in 9 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Exercise I would have rated this eariler but i kept going by and didnt even care.. Now ima start ratin ppl hard because no one is impressing me one bit around here but Soljah(glk) and Jr-one anyway.. Yes U are Improving..Add some Punchlines and shit DO the punchline first then the setup.. Set^=!st line 2nd line=2nd But it was iight tho To Lenghty and yuhad some nice lines to that Flintstone shit is nice. Keep it up Yo But I dont kno if that KABOOM line was a sublimal IDM tho __________________ Vakill-Worst Fears Confirmed

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02-13-2007, 07:08 PM	#2
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	bring da feed........

02-13-2007, 07:09 PM	#3
ya boy Mike Veteran Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: QUEENS Posts: 4,848 Repped: 678 Repped 142 Times in 66 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 16 Times in 15 Posts	its ok .... not great not hot not good ok

02-13-2007, 07:13 PM	#4
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin 4 mo feed

02-13-2007, 08:00 PM	#5
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin 4 feed

02-13-2007, 09:03 PM	#6
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	where da feed??????????

02-13-2007, 09:42 PM	#7
Lyrical Messiah Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: NVH The Home of the Brave 3rd Wall 4 Life Posts: 1,776 Repped: 74 Repped 123 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 1 Post	Its cool long but i actually liked it

02-13-2007, 09:44 PM	#8
Lyrical Messiah Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: NVH The Home of the Brave 3rd Wall 4 Life Posts: 1,776 Repped: 74 Repped 123 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 1 Post	Oh yeah could you rate PA State Of Mind(if you havent) and Black Democrat

02-13-2007, 09:53 PM	#9
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	iight no doubt n thanx uppin

02-13-2007, 09:54 PM	#10
Lyrical Messiah Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: NVH The Home of the Brave 3rd Wall 4 Life Posts: 1,776 Repped: 74 Repped 123 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 1 Post	no problem dude

02-13-2007, 11:28 PM	#11
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	feed!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

02-13-2007, 11:32 PM	#12
Lyrical Messiah Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: NVH The Home of the Brave 3rd Wall 4 Life Posts: 1,776 Repped: 74 Repped 123 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 1 Post	I will drop feed on a past drop if you leave feed on Pa State Of Mind

02-13-2007, 11:44 PM	#13
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	iight i'll do dat lata uppin

02-14-2007, 01:11 AM	#14
LaWN NAiL Lonnel Join Date: May 2006 Location: chicago Posts: 3,199 Repped: 190 Repped 352 Times in 108 Posts Neg Reps: 16 Neg Repped at 85 Times in 33 Posts	"Throw shots at ya toes and keep you tippy like a drunken Flintstone" Yes..That Really Shocked Me..... ..And This Was The Results . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

02-14-2007, 10:42 AM	#15
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^^ umm ok lol uppin 4 feed

02-14-2007, 10:52 AM	#17
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	thanx uppin

02-14-2007, 11:16 AM	#18
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin!!!!!!!!!!!

02-14-2007, 01:15 PM	#19
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Feed!!!!!!!!!!

02-14-2007, 04:01 PM	#20
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	feed????????????????????????

02-14-2007, 04:13 PM	#21
Lyrical Messiah Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: NVH The Home of the Brave 3rd Wall 4 Life Posts: 1,776 Repped: 74 Repped 123 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 1 Post	Yo did you leave feed on Pa State Of Mind

02-14-2007, 05:23 PM	#22
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	nah not yet im trynna get sum more feed on my shit

02-14-2007, 05:27 PM	#23
-K.P- Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: UK Posts: 2,515 Repped: 142 Repped 119 Times in 47 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Was Pretty Good, Stay Up, Keep Improving, Work On Punchlines On Every Bar If Possible, Wordplay, Just More Complexity

02-14-2007, 06:31 PM	#24
Youngcity415 Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 1,247 Repped: 36 Repped 23 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	thanx kp uppinnn