Unreleased Music [Prime Effect]

DeionS · 02-10-2007, 09:58 PM

This Is A Little Something I Had Written Up Like A Couple Months Ago, And I Was Gonna Finish It But I Never Have So Here's The Unreleased Music From Your's Truely.

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Dont Be In A Frenzy, Cause On My Level You'll Decenigrate
It's Your Fate, You Use To Be Great Like Shaq Was In The Paint
Cause I Demand Dustruction, During Damaging Deliberation Daily
Corny Rappers Found Hip-Hop And All They Did Was Say 'Pay Me'
But It Aint That Easy, Cause Your Rhymes Are Sweet
Nigga My Head In The Street, Like Dick To Concrete
Im Starting To Feel Like Tony, Seen The Death Of My Homie
Im Sniffing Cocaine But I Aint Going Down Like He Did In The Movie

JR-One · 02-10-2007, 10:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by -Prime-

Dont Be In A Frenzy, Cause On My Level You'll Decenigrate
It's Your Fate, You Use To Be Great Like Shaq Was In The Paint

1st Line.. .. The "Dont Be In A Frenzy" Part Wasn't Needed, It Was Filler That Only Throws Off The Flow.. .. You Also Didn't Spell Disintegrate Properly Which Is A Sign You Don't Know What You're Talking About.. ..
2nd Line.. .. Paint And Ate Don't Rhyme.. .. Same Long 'A' Vowel Sound, But They Don't Rhyme.. ..

Quote:

Cause I Demand Dustruction, During Damaging Deliberation Daily
Corny Rappers Found Hip-Hop And All They Did Was Say 'Pay Me'

The First Line Was An Awful Attempt At Trying To Do An 'Alphabetical Slaughter'.. ..
Second Line.. .. You Just Happen To Be A Corny Rapper Who's Broke.. .. So Don't Talk.. ..
The Flow Was God Awful For This.. .. Add Multies To Fix That.. ..

Quote:

But It Aint That Easy, Cause Your Rhymes Are Sweet
Nigga My Head In The Street, Like Dick To Concrete

1st Line.. .. Random Shit.. .. Didn't Make Sense, It Was Irrelevant And Came Out Of No Where.. ..
2nd Line.. .. Mad Homo.. .. Sounds Like You're Fucking The Sidewalk.. .. As For An Attempt At A Punch.. .. It Didn't Make Sense.. .. The First Portion Had Nothing To Do With The 'Like Dick To Concrete' Portion.. ..

Quote:

Im Starting To Feel Like Tony, Seen The Death Of My Homie
Im Sniffing Cocaine But I Aint Going Down Like He Did In The Movie

1st Line.. .. It Actually Flowed Nicely, Made Sense.. .. Good Job.. ..
2nd Line, Horrible Flow.. .. And:
Movie And Homie Don't Rhyme.. .. Don't Even Attempt To Argue This.. ..

Overall: 1.5/10.. ..

DeionS · 02-10-2007, 11:22 PM

Good Looks, Upping

And That "D" Line I Wasnt Even Trying To Attempt A Alphebetical Slaughter.

02-10-2007, 09:58 PM	#1
DeionS YaH DiG???? Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: New York Posts: 1,349 Repped: 32 Repped 1,182 Times in 137 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 30 Times in 20 Posts	Unreleased Music [Prime Effect] Unreleased Music [Prime Effect] This Is A Little Something I Had Written Up Like A Couple Months Ago, And I Was Gonna Finish It But I Never Have So Here's The Unreleased Music From Your's Truely. -------------------------------------------------------------- Dont Be In A Frenzy, Cause On My Level You'll Decenigrate It's Your Fate, You Use To Be Great Like Shaq Was In The Paint Cause I Demand Dustruction, During Damaging Deliberation Daily Corny Rappers Found Hip-Hop And All They Did Was Say 'Pay Me' But It Aint That Easy, Cause Your Rhymes Are Sweet Nigga My Head In The Street, Like Dick To Concrete Im Starting To Feel Like Tony, Seen The Death Of My Homie Im Sniffing Cocaine But I Aint Going Down Like He Did In The Movie

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02-10-2007, 11:22 PM	#3
DeionS YaH DiG???? Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: New York Posts: 1,349 Repped: 32 Repped 1,182 Times in 137 Posts Neg Reps: 3 Neg Repped at 30 Times in 20 Posts	Good Looks, Upping And That "D" Line I Wasnt Even Trying To Attempt A Alphebetical Slaughter.