Sledgehammer.. .. An Older Free.. ..

JR-One · 02-07-2007, 09:47 PM

An Old Free I Did.. .. Just Reposted/Edited/Retooled/Remixed/Recycled/Whatever You'll Call It.. .. I Made Some Revisions From The Original.. ..

Losin' Ya Health, Cuz I'll Be Snoopin' In Stealth, You Deserve It; Actin' Stupid Fa Wealth..
My Gat's 'Hit More Hearts' Than Surgeons Or Cupid Himself
All My Writtens Rocks An' When Tha Spittin' Stops I Whip Ta Clips An' Glocks
Have Ya Body Red N 'Stripped Wit Spots From Scopes', You'll Think You Got 'Chicken Pox'
I Hunger Weaks, So When My Hummer Creeps With Summer Beats You'll Suffer Dumb Defeats
All I Spit Is Tounge An' Cheek And I'll 'Take This Board' Quick Like 'Lumber Thiefs'
I Know I've Been Tough In Tha Past, But Nothin'll Last, I Drop More 'Hot Shit' Than Sluts Fucked In The Ass
It Don't Take Luck Ta Surpass You MC's, You'll 'Never Go Anywhere' Like A Truck Missin' Gas
Find Myself Between A Rock An' A Hard Place Often Like Scarface
And Knowing My Death Is Comin', Like A Mob Boss In A Car Chase
I Don't Trip As Power's Pass, Champs Lose Belts As Quick As Flowers Last
J.R. Known To Rip A Coward's Ass.. Limit Their Time On Earth Like I Flipped An Hour Glass
Egos? I'm Hurtin' Several.. Alert The Medical, I Always Win Like Certain Generals
For You Worms, Dirt Is Edible.. Ya'll Nothin, I'll Kill Ya'll With Gats Sprayin Lookin' Like Squirtin' Genitals..
You're A Kid Who Preferred The Pot Always Got Third A Lot.. Another Target For Further Shots
But I Dunno If Ya'll Heard Or Not But I'm Now Number One And I've Secured The Spot
Take A Breather G, Wins Come Easily, Sleazily, Illegally And Motherfucking Cerebrally.. ..
Not A Believer In Intelligent Design, It Believes In Me..
You Witnessin' The Greatest In Person, Love Is Limited But The Hatin' Is Certain
And Now With This Latest Dispersin', The Rap Game Has Ended.. Now Wait Fa The Curtains
Treated Life Like Art In The Past, Yet Didn't Know Lies Were Part Of The Class
Became Confused, Smart And Aghast.. Reality And Myself've Been Apart, But At Last
I Ruin Everything Around Me; I'm A Sledgehammer.. And Ya Heart Is The Glass..

Smash.

H.O.V.A. · 02-07-2007, 09:51 PM

Hmm...8/10

The Kid Blaze · 02-07-2007, 09:52 PM

This shit was hot .. it was a bit stretched but the multies word play and and punches were on point .. good shit

JR-One · 02-07-2007, 09:54 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pandemic aka HOVA

Hmm...8/10

Worst Feed Ever.. .. I'd Rather You Come In Here And Trash It And Diss It Than Have This Feed.. ..

[CC]Ratify[CC] · 02-07-2007, 09:57 PM

ok. . .flow sucked. . .i know its text but it was all over the place. . .
multies were solid for the most part. . .forced a few though
punchlines were nice. . .except for a few played concepts. . .
'wordplay' was good all around. . .

nice free. . .but you've done better. . .7/10

H.O.V.A. · 02-07-2007, 10:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by JR-One

Worst Feed Ever.. .. I'd Rather You Come In Here And Trash It And Diss It Than Have This Feed.. ..

It was a joke...I didn't read it...

R.A.W · 02-07-2007, 10:12 PM

Nice mulites and punches this is Nice yo
stay up and keep it up
7.815/10

~Young Gunna~ · 02-07-2007, 10:15 PM

it wasnt bad....above average
the multies seemed to be forced at some points
some punches were played/avg...others were pretty hot
well if you care bout ur text flow...you can work on that and shorten the lines

other than that it was on point...1

MiSs CaSsiDy · 02-07-2007, 10:33 PM

Losin' Ya Health, Cuz I'll Be Snoopin' In Stealth, You Deserve It; Actin' Stupid Fa Wealth..
My Gat's 'Hit More Hearts' Than Surgeons Or Cupid Himself
LMFAO oh shit i like him already he sound like j.r.-writer now 9.5.

All My Writtens Rocks An' When Tha Spittin' Stops I Whip Ta Clips An' Glocks
Have Ya Body Red N 'Stripped Wit Spots From Scopes', You'll Think You Got 'Chicken Pox'
[KAY SLAY VOICE] : OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 10/10

I Hunger Weaks, So When My Hummer Creeps With Summer Beats You'll Suffer Dumb Defeats
All I Spit Is Tounge An' Cheek And I'll 'Take This Board' Quick Like 'Lumber Thiefs'
WOOOOOOOOOW JUST FUCKING WOOOOOOOOOW THIS NIGGA CAN SPIT MULTIS LIKE CHA GIRL 10/10

I Don't Trip As Power's Pass, Champs Lose Belts As Quick As Flowers Last
J.R. Known To Rip A Coward's Ass.. Limit Their Time On Earth Like I Flipped An Hour Glass
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 10/10 Lmfaaaaaaaaaao my goooooooood show this kid some respect he nice

You Witnessin' The Greatest In Person, Love Is Limited But The Hatin' Is Certain
And Now With This Latest Dispersin', The Rap Game Has Ended.. Now Wait Fa The Curtains

HE SICK AS FUCK REAL TALK 10/10

OVER ALL 10 Period

Tom Chambers · 02-07-2007, 10:46 PM

^thats dose you just gave a 10/10..........jfyi

JR-One · 02-08-2007, 05:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ~Young Gunna~

it wasnt bad....above average
the multies seemed to be forced at some points
some punches were played/avg...others were pretty hot
well if you care bout ur text flow...you can work on that and shorten the lines

other than that it was on point...1

Yeah I Fucking Know That Gunna.. .. This Free Is From 6 Monthes Ago.. .. I Just Removed The Hook And Rewrote Some Of The Lines.. .. So Consider This A Remix.. ..

Quote:

Originally Posted by Miss Cassidy

Losin' Ya Health, Cuz I'll Be Snoopin' In Stealth, You Deserve It; Actin' Stupid Fa Wealth..
My Gat's 'Hit More Hearts' Than Surgeons Or Cupid Himself
LMFAO oh shit i like him already he sound like j.r.-writer now 9.5.

All My Writtens Rocks An' When Tha Spittin' Stops I Whip Ta Clips An' Glocks
Have Ya Body Red N 'Stripped Wit Spots From Scopes', You'll Think You Got 'Chicken Pox'
[KAY SLAY VOICE] : OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 10/10

I Hunger Weaks, So When My Hummer Creeps With Summer Beats You'll Suffer Dumb Defeats
All I Spit Is Tounge An' Cheek And I'll 'Take This Board' Quick Like 'Lumber Thiefs'
WOOOOOOOOOW JUST FUCKING WOOOOOOOOOW THIS NIGGA CAN SPIT MULTIS LIKE CHA GIRL 10/10

I Don't Trip As Power's Pass, Champs Lose Belts As Quick As Flowers Last
J.R. Known To Rip A Coward's Ass.. Limit Their Time On Earth Like I Flipped An Hour Glass
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 10/10 Lmfaaaaaaaaaao my goooooooood show this kid some respect he nice

You Witnessin' The Greatest In Person, Love Is Limited But The Hatin' Is Certain
And Now With This Latest Dispersin', The Rap Game Has Ended.. Now Wait Fa The Curtains

HE SICK AS FUCK REAL TALK 10/10

OVER ALL 10 Period

You Act Like I'm Some Rookie.. ..

H.O.V.A. · 02-08-2007, 07:45 PM

LMFAO oh shit i like him already he sound like j.r.-writer now 9.5.

WOOOOOOOOOW JUST FUCKING WOOOOOOOOOW THIS NIGGA CAN SPIT MULTIS LIKE CHA GIRL 10/10

lol that a compliment? Assumin "cha girl" is you, and "j.r. -writer" is JR Writer, I doubt it...

PWNED!!!!!!

Tom Chambers · 02-08-2007, 07:53 PM

^

..........good try tho sonny.......one day....maybe one day...you will pwn some1.....N i will laugh......not @ you....at whoever you pwn because....well....they got pwned by you.....

H.O.V.A. · 02-08-2007, 09:16 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Paranormal

^

..........good try tho sonny.......one day....maybe one day...you will pwn some1.....N i will laugh......not @ you....at whoever you pwn because....well....they got pwned by you.....

"Hova wins 3-0 KO close thread"

Lil Lay · 02-08-2007, 10:45 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pandemic aka HOVA

LMFAO oh shit i like him already he sound like j.r.-writer now 9.5.

WOOOOOOOOOW JUST FUCKING WOOOOOOOOOW THIS NIGGA CAN SPIT MULTIS LIKE CHA GIRL 10/10

lol that a compliment? Assumin "cha girl" is you, and "j.r. -writer" is JR Writer, I doubt it...

PWNED!!!!!!

LMFAO.

Yo Dosey good verse, The cupid line was ehhhhhh corny or played one of the two. Flow was messed up in most posts, but what is flow in text.

Anyway nigu, Multi's were nice although you got sloppy near the end.

Tom Chambers · 02-09-2007, 12:18 AM

Quote:

"Hova wins 3-0 KO close thread"

^want a dam cookie???? go fucking bite some lines....

B Dope · 02-09-2007, 12:20 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Paranormal

^want a dam cookie???? go fucking bite some lines....

PWNED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

H.O.V.A. · 02-09-2007, 03:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Baller

PWNED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

do u wanna battle too?

Quote:

Originally Posted by Paranormal

^want a dam cookie???? go fucking bite some lines....

U mad that u got KOd by a biter attemptin to write his own shit TWICE??????

02-07-2007, 09:47 PM	#1
JR-One Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Van-Kool-Vurr Posts: 1,021 Repped: 19 Repped 52 Times in 20 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	Sledgehammer.. .. An Older Free.. .. Sledgehammer.. .. An Older Free.. .. An Old Free I Did.. .. Just Reposted/Edited/Retooled/Remixed/Recycled/Whatever You'll Call It.. .. I Made Some Revisions From The Original.. .. Losin' Ya Health, Cuz I'll Be Snoopin' In Stealth, You Deserve It; Actin' Stupid Fa Wealth.. My Gat's 'Hit More Hearts' Than Surgeons Or Cupid Himself All My Writtens Rocks An' When Tha Spittin' Stops I Whip Ta Clips An' Glocks Have Ya Body Red N 'Stripped Wit Spots From Scopes', You'll Think You Got 'Chicken Pox' I Hunger Weaks, So When My Hummer Creeps With Summer Beats You'll Suffer Dumb Defeats All I Spit Is Tounge An' Cheek And I'll 'Take This Board' Quick Like 'Lumber Thiefs' I Know I've Been Tough In Tha Past, But Nothin'll Last, I Drop More 'Hot Shit' Than Sluts Fucked In The Ass It Don't Take Luck Ta Surpass You MC's, You'll 'Never Go Anywhere' Like A Truck Missin' Gas Find Myself Between A Rock An' A Hard Place Often Like Scarface And Knowing My Death Is Comin', Like A Mob Boss In A Car Chase I Don't Trip As Power's Pass, Champs Lose Belts As Quick As Flowers Last J.R. Known To Rip A Coward's Ass.. Limit Their Time On Earth Like I Flipped An Hour Glass Egos? I'm Hurtin' Several.. Alert The Medical, I Always Win Like Certain Generals For You Worms, Dirt Is Edible.. Ya'll Nothin, I'll Kill Ya'll With Gats Sprayin Lookin' Like Squirtin' Genitals.. You're A Kid Who Preferred The Pot Always Got Third A Lot.. Another Target For Further Shots But I Dunno If Ya'll Heard Or Not But I'm Now Number One And I've Secured The Spot Take A Breather G, Wins Come Easily, Sleazily, Illegally And Motherfucking Cerebrally.. .. Not A Believer In Intelligent Design, It Believes In Me.. You Witnessin' The Greatest In Person, Love Is Limited But The Hatin' Is Certain And Now With This Latest Dispersin', The Rap Game Has Ended.. Now Wait Fa The Curtains Treated Life Like Art In The Past, Yet Didn't Know Lies Were Part Of The Class Became Confused, Smart And Aghast.. Reality And Myself've Been Apart, But At Last I Ruin Everything Around Me; I'm A Sledgehammer.. And Ya Heart Is The Glass.. Smash. __________________ Cheers To Pacman23.. ..

02-07-2007, 09:52 PM	#3
The Kid Blaze Nike KB / Air-Blaze Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Tree City Posts: 7,255 Repped: 68 Repped 151 Times in 54 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	This shit was hot .. it was a bit stretched but the multies word play and and punches were on point .. good shit __________________

02-07-2007, 10:33 PM	#9
MiSs CaSsiDy QUEEN OF HORRORCORE RAP Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: HELL Posts: 1,263 Repped: 9 Repped 31 Times in 13 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Losin' Ya Health, Cuz I'll Be Snoopin' In Stealth, You Deserve It; Actin' Stupid Fa Wealth.. My Gat's 'Hit More Hearts' Than Surgeons Or Cupid Himself LMFAO oh shit i like him already he sound like j.r.-writer now 9.5. All My Writtens Rocks An' When Tha Spittin' Stops I Whip Ta Clips An' Glocks Have Ya Body Red N 'Stripped Wit Spots From Scopes', You'll Think You Got 'Chicken Pox' [KAY SLAY VOICE] : OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 10/10 I Hunger Weaks, So When My Hummer Creeps With Summer Beats You'll Suffer Dumb Defeats All I Spit Is Tounge An' Cheek And I'll 'Take This Board' Quick Like 'Lumber Thiefs' WOOOOOOOOOW JUST FUCKING WOOOOOOOOOW THIS NIGGA CAN SPIT MULTIS LIKE CHA GIRL 10/10 I Don't Trip As Power's Pass, Champs Lose Belts As Quick As Flowers Last J.R. Known To Rip A Coward's Ass.. Limit Their Time On Earth Like I Flipped An Hour Glass AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 10/10 Lmfaaaaaaaaaao my goooooooood show this kid some respect he nice You Witnessin' The Greatest In Person, Love Is Limited But The Hatin' Is Certain And Now With This Latest Dispersin', The Rap Game Has Ended.. Now Wait Fa The Curtains HE SICK AS FUCK REAL TALK 10/10 OVER ALL 10 Period __________________

02-08-2007, 07:53 PM	#13
Tom Chambers AkA Sur-Vis-U-All Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: pittsburgh Posts: 11,280 Repped: 132 Repped 477 Times in 296 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 68 Times in 54 Posts	^..........good try tho sonny.......one day....maybe one day...you will pwn some1.....N i will laugh......not @ you....at whoever you pwn because....well....they got pwned by you.....

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02-07-2007, 09:51 PM	#2
H.O.V.A. Banned Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: LI Posts: 4,564 Repped: 102 Repped 293 Times in 39 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Hmm...8/10

02-07-2007, 09:57 PM	#5
[CC]Ratify[CC] Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Where It Started At. . .[NY] Posts: 8,373 Repped: 353 Repped 610 Times in 235 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	ok. . .flow sucked. . .i know its text but it was all over the place. . . multies were solid for the most part. . .forced a few though punchlines were nice. . .except for a few played concepts. . . 'wordplay' was good all around. . . nice free. . .but you've done better. . .7/10

02-07-2007, 10:12 PM	#7
R.A.W Banned Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: OH 2 PA Posts: 244 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Nice mulites and punches this is Nice yo stay up and keep it up 7.815/10

02-07-2007, 10:15 PM	#8
~Young Gunna~ Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Gs Us Posts: 10,870 Repped: 156 Repped 574 Times in 243 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	it wasnt bad....above average the multies seemed to be forced at some points some punches were played/avg...others were pretty hot well if you care bout ur text flow...you can work on that and shorten the lines other than that it was on point...1

02-07-2007, 10:46 PM	#10
Tom Chambers AkA Sur-Vis-U-All Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: pittsburgh Posts: 11,280 Repped: 132 Repped 477 Times in 296 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 68 Times in 54 Posts	^thats dose you just gave a 10/10..........jfyi

02-08-2007, 07:45 PM	#12
H.O.V.A. Banned Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: LI Posts: 4,564 Repped: 102 Repped 293 Times in 39 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	LMFAO oh shit i like him already he sound like j.r.-writer now 9.5. WOOOOOOOOOW JUST FUCKING WOOOOOOOOOW THIS NIGGA CAN SPIT MULTIS LIKE CHA GIRL 10/10 lol that a compliment? Assumin "cha girl" is you, and "j.r. -writer" is JR Writer, I doubt it... PWNED!!!!!!