Child of Da Ghetto

Stack$ · 02-06-2007, 12:24 PM

Click is the sound as he cocks his gun
He’s shaking now it’s no longer games and fun
Someone’s gonna die tonight, but he prays it’s not him
He’s gotta support mom and bros, can’t up and leave em
They on enemy ground now, no turning back
So he steadies his triggah finger by grippin his gat
Heart starts pounding as the car turns a corner
It’s initiation time, gonna turn the liquor store into the little shop of horrors
With a whirr his window goes down, and he sees the frightened faces for a second
The driver yells now and he starts poppin, with a trigger squeeze brings lives to an end
The tires are squealing as the last of his shots ring out
But before the window’s shut, he hears screams coming from all about
For a second he feels what he did was wrong back there
But he’s a part of the family now, he’s told not to care
Before long there’ll be a stone, not a heart in his chest
When it comes to blazin and killin, he’ll be the best
He’ll pop ya, pull a 187, without a second thought
Cause by this endless cycle of death, his soul’s been bought

Stack$ · 02-06-2007, 01:13 PM

uppin.....

R.A.W · 02-06-2007, 01:17 PM

Nice

kinda vivid
but use more discriptive wording
wordplay and Imagery usage

and i bet u could pull this off better
try actin like u their and u see it through ur eyes
feel me
keep it up stacks

no doubt holla

Stack$ · 02-06-2007, 01:21 PM

thanks for the feed fam
uppin

DoGGy Style · 02-06-2007, 01:43 PM

Nice... i like this...

Stack$ · 02-06-2007, 02:04 PM

no doubt bro thanks for the feed
uppin

Stack$ · 02-06-2007, 03:47 PM

uppin for mo feed

R.A.W · 02-06-2007, 03:48 PM

^ can u rate my drop Yo

i would appericiate it

YoungJ · 02-06-2007, 04:26 PM

shit was tight man. im feelin this one alot

Lyrical Messiah · 02-06-2007, 04:28 PM

BLACK CARD ERA we got this shit on lock 8/10

MiSs CaSsiDy · 02-06-2007, 04:30 PM

OK THE THING is about this one is ummmmmmm u not rhyming on any bar like nothing connecting rhyming wise but listening to the story is like reading a book and thats how i read it like it was a book since it wasnt rhyming like the way u describe how he was scared cuz a gun was drawn with his heart beating and all that i like the way` u describe the story for real all together 4.5. keep practicing itll rhyme alot more hey leave feed on my drop holla

Stack$ · 02-06-2007, 04:44 PM

thanks
uppin...

MiSs CaSsiDy · 02-06-2007, 04:50 PM

whoa i left feed on this who deleted my shit

Stack$ · 02-06-2007, 06:50 PM

uppin......

02-06-2007, 12:24 PM	#1
Stack$ Da Capo Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 266 Repped: 19 Repped 20 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Child of Da Ghetto Child of Da Ghetto Click is the sound as he cocks his gun He’s shaking now it’s no longer games and fun Someone’s gonna die tonight, but he prays it’s not him He’s gotta support mom and bros, can’t up and leave em They on enemy ground now, no turning back So he steadies his triggah finger by grippin his gat Heart starts pounding as the car turns a corner It’s initiation time, gonna turn the liquor store into the little shop of horrors With a whirr his window goes down, and he sees the frightened faces for a second The driver yells now and he starts poppin, with a trigger squeeze brings lives to an end The tires are squealing as the last of his shots ring out But before the window’s shut, he hears screams coming from all about For a second he feels what he did was wrong back there But he’s a part of the family now, he’s told not to care Before long there’ll be a stone, not a heart in his chest When it comes to blazin and killin, he’ll be the best He’ll pop ya, pull a 187, without a second thought Cause by this endless cycle of death, his soul’s been bought

02-06-2007, 01:43 PM	#5
DoGGy Style Infamous... Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: In my HooD Posts: 636 Repped: 166 Repped 70 Times in 25 Posts Neg Reps: 24 Neg Repped at 14 Times in 13 Posts	Nice... i like this... __________________ You'r bitch bumps my shit more then u bump her on your dick- DoGGy Style (D's'K)

02-06-2007, 04:30 PM	#11
MiSs CaSsiDy QUEEN OF HORRORCORE RAP Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: HELL Posts: 1,263 Repped: 9 Repped 31 Times in 13 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	OK THE THING is about this one is ummmmmmm u not rhyming on any bar like nothing connecting rhyming wise but listening to the story is like reading a book and thats how i read it like it was a book since it wasnt rhyming like the way u describe how he was scared cuz a gun was drawn with his heart beating and all that i like the way` u describe the story for real all together 4.5. keep practicing itll rhyme alot more hey leave feed on my drop holla __________________

02-06-2007, 04:50 PM	#13
MiSs CaSsiDy QUEEN OF HORRORCORE RAP Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: HELL Posts: 1,263 Repped: 9 Repped 31 Times in 13 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	whoa i left feed on this who deleted my shit __________________

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02-06-2007, 01:13 PM	#2
Stack$ Da Capo Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 266 Repped: 19 Repped 20 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin.....

02-06-2007, 01:17 PM	#3
R.A.W Banned Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: OH 2 PA Posts: 244 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Nice kinda vivid but use more discriptive wording wordplay and Imagery usage and i bet u could pull this off better try actin like u their and u see it through ur eyes feel me keep it up stacks no doubt holla

02-06-2007, 01:21 PM	#4
Stack$ Da Capo Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 266 Repped: 19 Repped 20 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	thanks for the feed fam uppin

02-06-2007, 02:04 PM	#6
Stack$ Da Capo Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 266 Repped: 19 Repped 20 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	no doubt bro thanks for the feed uppin

02-06-2007, 03:47 PM	#7
Stack$ Da Capo Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 266 Repped: 19 Repped 20 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin for mo feed

02-06-2007, 03:48 PM	#8
R.A.W Banned Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: OH 2 PA Posts: 244 Repped: 0 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^ can u rate my drop Yo i would appericiate it

02-06-2007, 04:26 PM	#9
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	shit was tight man. im feelin this one alot

02-06-2007, 04:28 PM	#10
Lyrical Messiah Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: NVH The Home of the Brave 3rd Wall 4 Life Posts: 1,776 Repped: 74 Repped 123 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 1 Post	BLACK CARD ERA we got this shit on lock 8/10

02-06-2007, 04:44 PM	#12
Stack$ Da Capo Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 266 Repped: 19 Repped 20 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	thanks uppin...

02-06-2007, 06:50 PM	#14
Stack$ Da Capo Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 266 Repped: 19 Repped 20 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin......