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Young Nicks Vol.2 · 01-04-2007, 10:46 PM

Yo i started on this shit right here im not sure if i should keep writing so here yall go..

Man im trying to get Rich or Die trying y yall niggas trying to give me 50 Cents/
Niggas is dieing on tha street and im just strugglin to get by on tha rent/
So i hustle my raps on tha corner trying to supple tha streets with a dream/
Got George Bush on my ass trying to hang me with Saddam thats suppost to happen next week/
I put my Middle Fingers to tha sky cause getting by im trying to turn 15 cents to a dollar/
Getting sick as fuck cause i can't turn this match box car to a real honda/
But i keep faith alive and take shots at faggits ho's who never had to struggle/
Moms got to two Jobs and Bills and food is becoming a serious Juggle/
Thinkin if i should get on my bubble and move rocks like tha flintsons/
Getting deep on tha beat had tha chorus crying cause it knows im like Clemson im a underdog/
Nigga i walked to so many miles in my sneakes to die now/
So i got to stay with my head up and thats why i stay going hard for tha crowd/

[CC]Ratify[CC] · 01-05-2007, 10:10 PM

you had themes. . .first thing you need to do it shorten your lines. . .then devolp multies. . .and your somewhat there. . .work on the multies for now. . .

Young Nicks Vol.2 · 01-05-2007, 10:41 PM

whats a multi...

[CC]Ratify[CC] · 01-05-2007, 10:45 PM

like

packing-clips
stacking-chips

two word rhyming

01-04-2007, 10:46 PM	#1
Young Nicks Vol.2 Fuck NYPD Join Date: Jan 2007 Posts: 60 Repped: 6 Repped 13 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	I need help I need help Yo i started on this shit right here im not sure if i should keep writing so here yall go.. Man im trying to get Rich or Die trying y yall niggas trying to give me 50 Cents/ Niggas is dieing on tha street and im just strugglin to get by on tha rent/ So i hustle my raps on tha corner trying to supple tha streets with a dream/ Got George Bush on my ass trying to hang me with Saddam thats suppost to happen next week/ I put my Middle Fingers to tha sky cause getting by im trying to turn 15 cents to a dollar/ Getting sick as fuck cause i can't turn this match box car to a real honda/ But i keep faith alive and take shots at faggits ho's who never had to struggle/ Moms got to two Jobs and Bills and food is becoming a serious Juggle/ Thinkin if i should get on my bubble and move rocks like tha flintsons/ Getting deep on tha beat had tha chorus crying cause it knows im like Clemson im a underdog/ Nigga i walked to so many miles in my sneakes to die now/ So i got to stay with my head up and thats why i stay going hard for tha crowd/

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01-05-2007, 10:10 PM	#2
[CC]Ratify[CC] Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Where It Started At. . .[NY] Posts: 8,373 Repped: 353 Repped 610 Times in 235 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	you had themes. . .first thing you need to do it shorten your lines. . .then devolp multies. . .and your somewhat there. . .work on the multies for now. . .

01-05-2007, 10:41 PM	#3
Young Nicks Vol.2 Fuck NYPD Join Date: Jan 2007 Posts: 60 Repped: 6 Repped 13 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	whats a multi...

01-05-2007, 10:45 PM	#4
[CC]Ratify[CC] Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Where It Started At. . .[NY] Posts: 8,373 Repped: 353 Repped 610 Times in 235 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	like packing-clips stacking-chips two word rhyming