Imperial Seal

~Young Gunna~ · 01-04-2007, 03:51 PM

King Of NAtion:'go out with your army of men and find the imperial seal...it will be in the land of china,when you get there talk to a man named xiao,his house is on this map...this is a quest that will never be forgettin if successful...'

'arrives in bejing china'

we entered chinas land,was in a tall city of war
dominant kings in combat lik mythology restored
with my army of soldiers recieving appologys of gore
king had a large quantity army but da quality was poor
ran into dangeous men n pulled out our swords n shield
left em defeated wit ease, n we explored da field
we headed to a victim of da king,xiao a man who restored
he conveyed us words of wisdom befor we began to explore
'after a while neglect da pass,use da art of war n perfect it fast
strategically infect his ass..own da seal wen u expect it last'
prevailed to the village of pesents and searched da houses
a few of em retaliated forcin me to hurt da spouses
soldiers wounded,used medication fa healin ma clan
exploration failed to possess the seal in my hand
was forced to think of a new stradegic plan to victory
was a legendary man in history...but saw my clan in misery
invisioned xiaos words,da king had me persuaded ta battle
we quickly heaed to da adversarys n invaded da castle
along wit allies in battle...we struck our spears ta soldiers
prevailed victorious over his army n all ma fear was over
ready for combat,arrived at da king in a place in royalty
sent my men off wit pride for my allies embracin loyalty
facin my adverasry in mortal combat,was riskin ma life
fearless eyes wit passion grippin ma knife,tried slittin him nice
ended up missin him twice,'convert ya soul it wouldnt hurt ya ta try'
said he he would but i heard'a ya lies n remembered his murder'a lives
let out ma aggresion today,he swung n i knocked his weapon away
tld him defeat was near,but befor ur death ill be lettin ya pray
fiercly struck my sword through his heart, den i was grippin his club
his corpse showed n i put da shit in a mug,started sippin his blood
i got myself together n searched for da objection,I was robbin his home
was not in da zone,amazingly sat down n saw da seal on top of his thrown
victory after i fougtin alone,anticipated to contract to a grown man
confirmed wit my allies,wit victory we proceeded back to ma home land

~Menace~ · 01-04-2007, 04:22 PM

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY ur back in ur homeland....ya but this was nice, ur flow was on-point, n most of ur multies were good, a couple had an extra syllable in it...goodshit tho asainraisin...stay up chim lee yung

The Lyrical One · 01-04-2007, 06:22 PM

Nice drop gunna liked the whole verse feel me

all the line were my favorite

9.5/10

Di$R3$p3(T · 01-04-2007, 07:02 PM

Shit Waz Hott Gunna Keep The Good Shit Coming

Shogun · 01-04-2007, 07:39 PM

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we entered chinas land,was in a tall city of war
dominant kings in combat lik mythology restored

"tall city of war", is awkward but not completely ludicrous.
"mythology restored" lacks the syllable consistency to make it fully rhyme; also, it doesn't really make sense.

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with my army of soldiers recieving appologys of gore
king had a large quantity army but da quality was poor

"apologies of gore"???? No.
"quantity" is a noun, yet you're trying to use it as an adjective.

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ran into dangeous men n pulled out our swords n shield 
left em defeated wit ease, n we explored da field

Right so you've killed some enemy & now you're exploring the battlefield.....

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we headed to a victim of da king,xiao a man who restored
he conveyed us words of wisdom befor we began to explore

.....for Xiao, who you've found but wait, how did he "restore"? And what's with "restored" being used twice in a couple of lines? Does this repetition have any purpose?

"he conveyed us" - do you know what "convey" means? Let's assume it was just a typo & you meant to place a "to" between "conveyed" & "us".

"began to explore"......again? Fuck.

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'after a while neglect da pass,use da art of war n perfect it fast
strategically infect his ass..own da seal wen u expect it last'

What "pass"?
"infect his ass"? Really........no, seriously.....

If you meant to say, "you'll own the seal when you expect it last", then that would make sense, as he's foretelling an event.
If you meant to say what you did apparently say then that's sloppy; the dude is instructing you to do something...when your mind is least inclined to do so; I don't want to get into this issue to much because it's irritating, but the fact is you can't be inclined to do something......when you're least inclined to do it - it's bullshit.

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prevailed to the village of pesents and searched da houses
a few  of em retaliated forcin me to hurt da spouses

"prevailed to the village" - is this thesaurus 101 here?

Code:

soldiers wounded,used medication fa healin ma clan
exploration failed to possess the seal in my hand

"failed to possess the seal in my hand" - continues the trend of using awkward wording.

Code:

invisioned xiaos words,da king had me persuaded ta battle
we quickly heaed to da adversarys n invaded da castle

How did you "envision Xiao's words"???

"we quickly headed to the adversaries & invaded the castle" - you know, it's often the little things that matter. Had you said "headed toward our adversaries" that would have made sense; as it stands, it is awkward.

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along wit allies in battle...we struck our spears ta soldiers
prevailed victorious over his army n all ma fear was over

Usage of "struck" here is odd; if "ta" was "into", it would be much improved.

You don't need to keep saying "victorious" & variations of it; "prevailed" was sufficient.

So you've defeated the King's army & you no longer have anything to fear...

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ready for combat,arrived at da king in a place in royalty
sent my men off wit pride for my allies embracin loyalty

...but wait, more impending "combat".

"place of royalty", I assume?

The other line is confusing; so you relieved them of their duties but what's this about, "for my allies embracing loyalty"??

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facin my adverasry in mortal combat,was riskin ma life
fearless eyes wit passion grippin ma knife,tried slittin him nice

The quality of the imagery conveyed here is rather poor; particularly "slittin him nice".

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ended up missin him twice,'convert ya soul it wouldnt hurt ya ta try' 
said he he would but i heard'a ya lies

So you were "slittin him nice" but you've ended up "missin him twice"? Ok.

"convert your soul" is poor wording but it kinda makes sense so at least that's something.

Who had heard of whose lies? Did he say he would change but was a known liar? Or did he say he would change, but was not sure he could trust your supposed intentions?

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 n remembered his murder'a lives
let out ma aggresion today

Well it seems that you couldn't trust him; if you knew you couldn't trust him, why did you ask him to change.....only to dismiss him upon hearing his willingness to change?? That seems a bit silly.

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he swung n i knocked his weapon away
tld him defeat was near,but befor ur death ill be lettin ya pray

The wording in the second line is cringeworthy.

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diercly struck my sword through his heart, den i was grippin his club
his corpse showed n i put da shit in a mug,started sippin his blood

You do understand that saying, "then I was gripping his club" is stupid don't you?
"Fiercely struck my sword through his heart, then I gripped his club" would be the most proper way to formulate that sentence. Yet you seem compelled to use this awkward wording, primarily in a vain attempt to mask your shortcomings as a writer I imagine.

"his corpse showed"........what? It showed what?
You put his corpse in a "mug"? You put his entire body in a cup? Ok.
But then you started drinking his blood.......why?

Code:

i got myself together n searched for da objection,I was robbin his home
was not in da zone,amazingly sat down n saw da seal on top of his thrown

You mean "objective" & what's worse is that "objective" would be out of context here; since speaking to Xiao your objective has been rather clear: find the seal. Therefore, you'd be seeking to complete the objective, not find it; at a push, you could say you were searching for the subject of the objective.

Sat down where? Hopefully not on the "throne", else you'd have either sat on the seal itself or, should the seal have resided on top of the back of the "throne", be a complete fucking idiot for not seeing it already - actually the latter would always be true since the "throne" is the centerpiece of whichever room it is located in &, as such, you'd have to be beyond foolish to actually not notice it or anything on top of it.

Code:

victory after i fougtin alone,anticipated to contract to a grown man 
confirmed wit my allies,wit victory we proceeded back to ma home land[/CENTER]

"victory after i fougtin alone" - it's a bit annoying that you use "victory" & variables of the word so often. And that should've been "after I'd foughten alone", although I must tell you that "foughten" is no longer a word that is used but since this resembles a period piece that's somewhat of a good thing. If it were not a period piece, that should've read "I'd fought alone".

"anticipated to contract to a grown man" - what.....the.....fuck. I have problems with it all really but please explain the usage of the word "contract" here as that interests me in particular.

"confirmed wit my allies" - are you trying you use "confirmed" as in "strengthened"?

With more "victory" huh? ....

Anyway, this could do with many, many revisions. I only really looked at your word choice & the actual legibility of the piece; there are countless technical aspects that could be improved.

~Young Gunna~ · 01-04-2007, 07:59 PM

thanks for da tips....n good looks to da rest as well...uppin

Antidote · 01-05-2007, 01:47 AM

props gunna that fire will come back

i have convinced a vet to come back hahaha antidote brings back vets

~Menace~ · 01-05-2007, 04:55 PM

^wat vet??

sofis2cated · 01-05-2007, 05:47 PM

yo this is a hot drop homie

J~Souljah · 01-05-2007, 07:16 PM

hmmm....alotta of dis made no sense.......no hate

but it was an ok drop i guess

6/10

~Young Gunna~ · 01-11-2007, 06:05 PM

bump......

Precepts · 01-11-2007, 08:24 PM

we entered chinas land,was in a tall city of war
dominant kings in combat lik mythology restored

This bar was a nice opener…

with my army of soldiers recieving appologys of gore
king had a large quantity army but da quality was poor

This flowed realllll well…

ran into dangeous men n pulled out our swords n shield
left em defeated wit ease, n we explored da field

Damn nice!

we headed to a victim of da king,xiao a man who restored
he conveyed us words of wisdom befor we began to explore

This wasn’t that bad but it was my least fav. In this verse

'after a while neglect da pass,use da art of war n perfect it fast
strategically infect his ass..own da seal wen u expect it last'

Real nice multies and good ass flow

prevailed to the village of pesents and searched da houses
a few of em retaliated forcin me to hurt da spouses

This was an iight bar

soldiers wounded,used medication fa healin ma clan
exploration failed to possess the seal in my hand

Wow…..loved this bar

was forced to think of a new stradegic plan to victory
was a legendary man in history...but saw my clan in misery

Nice multie in the 2nd line

invisioned xiaos words,da king had me persuaded ta battle
we quickly heaed to da adversarys n invaded da castle

Once again real nice bar…

along wit allies in battle...we struck our spears ta soldiers
prevailed victorious over his army n all ma fear was over

Wow hot flow….both lines were ILL

ready for combat,arrived at da king in a place in royalty
sent my men off wit pride for my allies embracin loyalty

This was a decent bar

facin my adverasry in mortal combat,was riskin ma life
fearless eyes wit passion grippin ma knife,tried slittin him nice

Multie was iight…..good bar

ended up missin him twice,'convert ya soul it wouldnt hurt ya ta try'
said he he would but i heard'a ya lies n remembered his murder'a lives

This was my 2nd least fav. Bar even though this bar was iight

let out ma aggresion today,he swung n i knocked his weapon away
tld him defeat was near,but befor ur death ill be lettin ya pray

Loved the flow….i can imagine this in my head lol

fiercly struck my sword through his heart, den i was grippin his club
his corpse showed n i put da shit in a mug,started sippin his blood

This was my fav. Bar realllllllllllllllly nice!

i got myself together n searched for da objection,I was robbin his home
was not in da zone,amazingly sat down n saw da seal on top of his thrown

This was my 2nd fav. Bar it was sick!

victory after i fougtin alone,anticipated to contract to a grown man
confirmed wit my allies,wit victory we proceeded back to ma home land

Damn nice closer….wat homeland…china? Canada? Or usa? lol

damn this was hot...multies were real nice...loved the concept and shit....i could imagine this happinin in my head loved it lol.....9.999999999/10...lol prolly 9/10

01-04-2007, 03:51 PM	#1
~Young Gunna~ Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Gs Us Posts: 10,870 Repped: 156 Repped 574 Times in 243 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Imperial Seal Imperial Seal King Of NAtion:'go out with your army of men and find the imperial seal...it will be in the land of china,when you get there talk to a man named xiao,his house is on this map...this is a quest that will never be forgettin if successful...' 'arrives in bejing china' we entered chinas land,was in a tall city of war dominant kings in combat lik mythology restored with my army of soldiers recieving appologys of gore king had a large quantity army but da quality was poor ran into dangeous men n pulled out our swords n shield left em defeated wit ease, n we explored da field we headed to a victim of da king,xiao a man who restored he conveyed us words of wisdom befor we began to explore 'after a while neglect da pass,use da art of war n perfect it fast strategically infect his ass..own da seal wen u expect it last' prevailed to the village of pesents and searched da houses a few of em retaliated forcin me to hurt da spouses soldiers wounded,used medication fa healin ma clan exploration failed to possess the seal in my hand was forced to think of a new stradegic plan to victory was a legendary man in history...but saw my clan in misery invisioned xiaos words,da king had me persuaded ta battle we quickly heaed to da adversarys n invaded da castle along wit allies in battle...we struck our spears ta soldiers prevailed victorious over his army n all ma fear was over ready for combat,arrived at da king in a place in royalty sent my men off wit pride for my allies embracin loyalty facin my adverasry in mortal combat,was riskin ma life fearless eyes wit passion grippin ma knife,tried slittin him nice ended up missin him twice,'convert ya soul it wouldnt hurt ya ta try' said he he would but i heard'a ya lies n remembered his murder'a lives let out ma aggresion today,he swung n i knocked his weapon away tld him defeat was near,but befor ur death ill be lettin ya pray fiercly struck my sword through his heart, den i was grippin his club his corpse showed n i put da shit in a mug,started sippin his blood i got myself together n searched for da objection,I was robbin his home was not in da zone,amazingly sat down n saw da seal on top of his thrown victory after i fougtin alone,anticipated to contract to a grown man confirmed wit my allies,wit victory we proceeded back to ma home land

01-04-2007, 04:22 PM	#2
~Menace~ Lonnel- Virgin Join Date: May 2006 Location: AZ ho Posts: 1,753 Repped: 116 Repped 38 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY ur back in ur homeland....ya but this was nice, ur flow was on-point, n most of ur multies were good, a couple had an extra syllable in it...goodshit tho asainraisin...stay up chim lee yung __________________ William Shaftner

01-04-2007, 07:02 PM	#4
Di$R3$p3(T [[HearT oF A ChampioN]] Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NeW JeRseY Posts: 1,049 Repped: 17 Repped 15 Times in 10 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	Shit Waz Hott Gunna Keep The Good Shit Coming __________________ "BacKk oN ThA BeAsT ModE" [OvErALL RecOrd]-[WiNz:"73" SliiP uHpz:"9"]

01-04-2007, 07:39 PM	#5
Shogun Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 718 Repped: 0 Repped 13 Times in 12 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	Code: we entered chinas land,was in a tall city of war dominant kings in combat lik mythology restored "tall city of war", is awkward but not completely ludicrous. "mythology restored" lacks the syllable consistency to make it fully rhyme; also, it doesn't really make sense. Code: with my army of soldiers recieving appologys of gore king had a large quantity army but da quality was poor "apologies of gore"???? No. "quantity" is a noun, yet you're trying to use it as an adjective. Code: ran into dangeous men n pulled out our swords n shield left em defeated wit ease, n we explored da field Right so you've killed some enemy & now you're exploring the battlefield..... Code: we headed to a victim of da king,xiao a man who restored he conveyed us words of wisdom befor we began to explore .....for Xiao, who you've found but wait, how did he "restore"? And what's with "restored" being used twice in a couple of lines? Does this repetition have any purpose? "he conveyed us" - do you know what "convey" means? Let's assume it was just a typo & you meant to place a "to" between "conveyed" & "us". "began to explore"......again? Fuck. Code: 'after a while neglect da pass,use da art of war n perfect it fast strategically infect his ass..own da seal wen u expect it last' What "pass"? "infect his ass"? Really........no, seriously..... If you meant to say, "you'll own the seal when you expect it last", then that would make sense, as he's foretelling an event. If you meant to say what you did apparently say then that's sloppy; the dude is instructing you to do something...when your mind is least inclined to do so; I don't want to get into this issue to much because it's irritating, but the fact is you can't be inclined to do something......when you're least inclined to do it - it's bullshit. Code: prevailed to the village of pesents and searched da houses a few of em retaliated forcin me to hurt da spouses "prevailed to the village" - is this thesaurus 101 here? Code: soldiers wounded,used medication fa healin ma clan exploration failed to possess the seal in my hand "failed to possess the seal in my hand" - continues the trend of using awkward wording. Code: invisioned xiaos words,da king had me persuaded ta battle we quickly heaed to da adversarys n invaded da castle How did you "envision Xiao's words"??? "we quickly headed to the adversaries & invaded the castle" - you know, it's often the little things that matter. Had you said "headed toward our adversaries" that would have made sense; as it stands, it is awkward. Code: along wit allies in battle...we struck our spears ta soldiers prevailed victorious over his army n all ma fear was over Usage of "struck" here is odd; if "ta" was "into", it would be much improved. You don't need to keep saying "victorious" & variations of it; "prevailed" was sufficient. So you've defeated the King's army & you no longer have anything to fear... Code: ready for combat,arrived at da king in a place in royalty sent my men off wit pride for my allies embracin loyalty ...but wait, more impending "combat". "place of royalty", I assume? The other line is confusing; so you relieved them of their duties but what's this about, "for my allies embracing loyalty"?? Code: facin my adverasry in mortal combat,was riskin ma life fearless eyes wit passion grippin ma knife,tried slittin him nice The quality of the imagery conveyed here is rather poor; particularly "slittin him nice". Code: ended up missin him twice,'convert ya soul it wouldnt hurt ya ta try' said he he would but i heard'a ya lies So you were "slittin him nice" but you've ended up "missin him twice"? Ok. "convert your soul" is poor wording but it kinda makes sense so at least that's something. Who had heard of whose lies? Did he say he would change but was a known liar? Or did he say he would change, but was not sure he could trust your supposed intentions? Code: n remembered his murder'a lives let out ma aggresion today Well it seems that you couldn't trust him; if you knew you couldn't trust him, why did you ask him to change.....only to dismiss him upon hearing his willingness to change?? That seems a bit silly. Code: he swung n i knocked his weapon away tld him defeat was near,but befor ur death ill be lettin ya pray The wording in the second line is cringeworthy. Code: diercly struck my sword through his heart, den i was grippin his club his corpse showed n i put da shit in a mug,started sippin his blood You do understand that saying, "then I was gripping his club" is stupid don't you? "Fiercely struck my sword through his heart, then I gripped his club" would be the most proper way to formulate that sentence. Yet you seem compelled to use this awkward wording, primarily in a vain attempt to mask your shortcomings as a writer I imagine. "his corpse showed"........what? It showed what? You put his corpse in a "mug"? You put his entire body in a cup? Ok. But then you started drinking his blood.......why? Code: i got myself together n searched for da objection,I was robbin his home was not in da zone,amazingly sat down n saw da seal on top of his thrown You mean "objective" & what's worse is that "objective" would be out of context here; since speaking to Xiao your objective has been rather clear: find the seal. Therefore, you'd be seeking to complete the objective, not find it; at a push, you could say you were searching for the subject of the objective. Sat down where? Hopefully not on the "throne", else you'd have either sat on the seal itself or, should the seal have resided on top of the back of the "throne", be a complete fucking idiot for not seeing it already - actually the latter would always be true since the "throne" is the centerpiece of whichever room it is located in &, as such, you'd have to be beyond foolish to actually not notice it or anything on top of it. Code: victory after i fougtin alone,anticipated to contract to a grown man confirmed wit my allies,wit victory we proceeded back to ma home land[/CENTER] "victory after i fougtin alone" - it's a bit annoying that you use "victory" & variables of the word so often. And that should've been "after I'd foughten alone", although I must tell you that "foughten" is no longer a word that is used but since this resembles a period piece that's somewhat of a good thing. If it were not a period piece, that should've read "I'd fought alone". "anticipated to contract to a grown man" - what.....the.....fuck. I have problems with it all really but please explain the usage of the word "contract" here as that interests me in particular. "confirmed wit my allies" - are you trying you use "confirmed" as in "strengthened"? With more "victory" huh? .... Anyway, this could do with many, many revisions. I only really looked at your word choice & the actual legibility of the piece; there are countless technical aspects that could be improved.

01-05-2007, 04:55 PM	#8
~Menace~ Lonnel- Virgin Join Date: May 2006 Location: AZ ho Posts: 1,753 Repped: 116 Repped 38 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^wat vet?? __________________ William Shaftner

01-04-2007, 06:22 PM	#3
The Lyrical One !!..SuPeR LyRiCiSt..!! Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: lol Posts: 1,650 Repped: 31 Repped 15 Times in 12 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Nice drop gunna liked the whole verse feel me all the line were my favorite 9.5/10

01-04-2007, 07:59 PM	#6
~Young Gunna~ Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Gs Us Posts: 10,870 Repped: 156 Repped 574 Times in 243 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	thanks for da tips....n good looks to da rest as well...uppin

01-05-2007, 01:47 AM	#7
Antidote Beck Unit Don Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 1,263 Repped: 104 Repped 100 Times in 24 Posts Neg Reps: 2 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	props gunna that fire will come back i have convinced a vet to come back hahaha antidote brings back vets

01-05-2007, 05:47 PM	#9
sofis2cated California Lyricist Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Bakersfield, CA Posts: 762 Repped: 33 Repped 10 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	yo this is a hot drop homie

01-05-2007, 07:16 PM	#10
J~Souljah Veteran Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Baltimore, Maryland Posts: 1,826 Repped: 11 Repped 97 Times in 67 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 22 Times in 17 Posts	hmmm....alotta of dis made no sense.......no hate but it was an ok drop i guess 6/10

01-11-2007, 06:05 PM	#11
~Young Gunna~ Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Gs Us Posts: 10,870 Repped: 156 Repped 574 Times in 243 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	bump......

01-11-2007, 08:24 PM	#12
Precepts Banned Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Denver Posts: 129 Repped: 59 Repped 6 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	we entered chinas land,was in a tall city of war dominant kings in combat lik mythology restored This bar was a nice opener… with my army of soldiers recieving appologys of gore king had a large quantity army but da quality was poor This flowed realllll well… ran into dangeous men n pulled out our swords n shield left em defeated wit ease, n we explored da field Damn nice! we headed to a victim of da king,xiao a man who restored he conveyed us words of wisdom befor we began to explore This wasn’t that bad but it was my least fav. In this verse 'after a while neglect da pass,use da art of war n perfect it fast strategically infect his ass..own da seal wen u expect it last' Real nice multies and good ass flow prevailed to the village of pesents and searched da houses a few of em retaliated forcin me to hurt da spouses This was an iight bar soldiers wounded,used medication fa healin ma clan exploration failed to possess the seal in my hand Wow…..loved this bar was forced to think of a new stradegic plan to victory was a legendary man in history...but saw my clan in misery Nice multie in the 2nd line invisioned xiaos words,da king had me persuaded ta battle we quickly heaed to da adversarys n invaded da castle Once again real nice bar… along wit allies in battle...we struck our spears ta soldiers prevailed victorious over his army n all ma fear was over Wow hot flow….both lines were ILL ready for combat,arrived at da king in a place in royalty sent my men off wit pride for my allies embracin loyalty This was a decent bar facin my adverasry in mortal combat,was riskin ma life fearless eyes wit passion grippin ma knife,tried slittin him nice Multie was iight…..good bar ended up missin him twice,'convert ya soul it wouldnt hurt ya ta try' said he he would but i heard'a ya lies n remembered his murder'a lives This was my 2nd least fav. Bar even though this bar was iight let out ma aggresion today,he swung n i knocked his weapon away tld him defeat was near,but befor ur death ill be lettin ya pray Loved the flow….i can imagine this in my head lol fiercly struck my sword through his heart, den i was grippin his club his corpse showed n i put da shit in a mug,started sippin his blood This was my fav. Bar realllllllllllllllly nice! i got myself together n searched for da objection,I was robbin his home was not in da zone,amazingly sat down n saw da seal on top of his thrown This was my 2nd fav. Bar it was sick! victory after i fougtin alone,anticipated to contract to a grown man confirmed wit my allies,wit victory we proceeded back to ma home land Damn nice closer….wat homeland…china? Canada? Or usa? lol damn this was hot...multies were real nice...loved the concept and shit....i could imagine this happinin in my head loved it lol.....9.999999999/10...lol prolly 9/10

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