freestyle

caddilac · 01-02-2007, 11:30 PM

Man you know i'm sick with the skills
shoot, i guess you could say i'm teminally ill
dressed to kill
but homicide doesn't fit my occupation
unlessed lyrically challenged by opponents i'll be devastatin
i'm a savage i spit lyrics that will please ya
y'all is my followers and i'm sort of like jesus
i'm so fly i'm basically in space
and my skeet yo girl want a taste
y'all take my place
come spit face to face and have a career change like mase
and i spit bombs like hiroshima and nagasaki
battle me? ya'll niggas kamikaze
but it ain't no thang
i know i'm the man
mabey your ideas will change
remake your plans
cause i'm cold like the artic and hot like the sun
fast like lightning so i know that i'm the one
you and yo girl both know that i'm your idol
reccomend these verses to your friends like the bible

Smoke1Life · 01-02-2007, 11:47 PM

its aight
5/10

can't say i could do better but might wanna up your vocab a little bit

Deepz101 · 01-03-2007, 12:27 PM

it was good 5/10 do u wanna battle

sofis2cated · 01-03-2007, 12:58 PM

yup yup increase your vocab, add some complexity to your rhyme schemes, and throw in some multis and shit could be hot.. it had a good flow but didn't make a whole lot sense lyrically, meaning I wasn't sure of the message your trying to get across other than you think your the shit.. 6/10

01-02-2007, 11:30 PM	#1
caddilac Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Posts: 1 Repped: 0 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	freestyle freestyle Man you know i'm sick with the skills shoot, i guess you could say i'm teminally ill dressed to kill but homicide doesn't fit my occupation unlessed lyrically challenged by opponents i'll be devastatin i'm a savage i spit lyrics that will please ya y'all is my followers and i'm sort of like jesus i'm so fly i'm basically in space and my skeet yo girl want a taste y'all take my place come spit face to face and have a career change like mase and i spit bombs like hiroshima and nagasaki battle me? ya'll niggas kamikaze but it ain't no thang i know i'm the man mabey your ideas will change remake your plans cause i'm cold like the artic and hot like the sun fast like lightning so i know that i'm the one you and yo girl both know that i'm your idol reccomend these verses to your friends like the bible

01-02-2007, 11:47 PM	#2
Smoke1Life FUCK'EM ALL Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1,438 Repped: 154 Repped 122 Times in 60 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	its aight 5/10 can't say i could do better but might wanna up your vocab a little bit __________________

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01-03-2007, 12:27 PM	#3
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	it was good 5/10 do u wanna battle

01-03-2007, 12:58 PM	#4
sofis2cated California Lyricist Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Bakersfield, CA Posts: 762 Repped: 33 Repped 10 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	yup yup increase your vocab, add some complexity to your rhyme schemes, and throw in some multis and shit could be hot.. it had a good flow but didn't make a whole lot sense lyrically, meaning I wasn't sure of the message your trying to get across other than you think your the shit.. 6/10