deepz101 Freash Bars

Deepz101 · 12-31-2006, 04:28 PM

this is a verse from my song hit back at me when you read dis
.................................................. ....................................

im gonna put on my boots n then score some goal
make my way to the club to go and score some hoes
even parilised people can fell my flow
negger u dont know me ill be stacking my dough
its d.t boy not deepz n co
still building up my rep like it was lego
this is just me and how i roll
hat back n dont forget my trousers low
what your name everywhere i be
i leave my price tag out so u neggers can see
you wanna know how i got this fly
its my big bros krepah n manic that how n why
i dont share u aint getting any of my pie
in the way i spell it in team there a "I"
im not a average joe im not another guy
i cause problems but keep it straight on da sly
my clothes are flashy cause im strickly d.t
trust look away if you have a case of epilepcy
.................................................. ...............
hit back at me with what you think of it

Deepz101 · 12-31-2006, 04:28 PM

need some feedback

Me>You · 12-31-2006, 04:35 PM

eh. . .i can see room for improvement. . .get more creative. . .use some good punches. . .and some multies. . .and you'll be ok. .

check out my shit 'Release. . .'

-K.P- · 12-31-2006, 04:55 PM

was aiight...you from west London? rep ya endz blud aha

Deepz101 · 01-01-2007, 01:46 PM

yh im from west london

whats your ends

Deepz101 · 01-01-2007, 01:47 PM

uppin need more feedback

Di$R3$p3(T · 01-01-2007, 02:25 PM

ey deep..............Lets Battle..okaii?
dont puss out

3-5 bars
due 2day midnight?first battle of tha new year for me im coming soft cuz your soft okaii?

♪Spoken Word♪ · 01-01-2007, 02:38 PM

shit was eeeehhhh... nuff said... 5/10

Di$R3$p3(T · 01-01-2007, 02:39 PM

oh yea i'll give it a

1/10 on a rookie level..sorry its kinda true step ya game up;..i'd be glad to0 teach?

Deepz101 · 01-01-2007, 05:42 PM

so what you got to tell me to help im 14 and im ready to step my game up

The Lyrical One · 01-01-2007, 05:49 PM

ayo
this was alright man lika ehhhh 5.9/10
almost decent but work on ya shit still

can u rate my new jawns its 3 of em
alll 3 have the sleepers presents thank u

Di$R3$p3(T · 01-01-2007, 06:01 PM

deepz send me a message

BAnk$ 82992 · 01-01-2007, 06:05 PM

4.5 outta 10.

B Dope · 01-01-2007, 06:12 PM

4/10. Heres a tip, increase your vocab, don't use simple words through the whole verse like ho, dough, flow. Feel me. If you want you can add a mulit then use those words. Example: fat hoes, that dough, crack flow. See the word before it rhymes with each other. work on it and ya should be ok.

Rep me for this and leave feed on my ether pt. 2(Babe Truth Diss)

Deepz101 · 01-02-2007, 07:53 AM

yhyh im filling yo lots tips thanks for those hit back at me need more feedbac

Deepz101 · 01-02-2007, 02:21 PM

.....uppin.....

sofis2cated · 01-02-2007, 02:43 PM

shit was alright, the last two lines are my favorite, reminds me of the episode when the simpsons went to japan and watched the cartoon that caused them to go into seizures lol.. but work on the vocab cuz everyone and their mom uses those rhyme schemes, and try using multis like baller said, definitely shows room for improvement.. stay up kid

Deepz101 · 01-03-2007, 12:01 PM

thanks for all feedbac im fellin everythink u lot ar4e saying ama step my game up then im goona drop another freestyle look out for it and see the improvment

Deepz101 · 01-03-2007, 12:02 PM

........uppin...........

ThA ViiRu5 · 01-03-2007, 12:52 PM

i'm 14 as well. and im ten times nicer than that. aint no braggin its a fact, if u just startin out than thats ok, it wasn tbad for a rookie...nice imagery but there were no multies, etc..a couple weak metaz...keep workin on it.

[CC]Ratify[CC] · 01-03-2007, 04:37 PM

is this the whos the best 14 yo on here thread now. . .

*thinks*
*looks in the mirror*
*walks away smiling*

Deepz101 · 01-04-2007, 02:12 PM

thanks for the feedback keep hitin me with ur shit

Deepz101 · 01-05-2007, 02:31 PM

uppin for feedbac

12-31-2006, 04:28 PM	#1
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	deepz101 Freash Bars deepz101 Freash Bars this is a verse from my song hit back at me when you read dis .................................................. .................................... im gonna put on my boots n then score some goal make my way to the club to go and score some hoes even parilised people can fell my flow negger u dont know me ill be stacking my dough its d.t boy not deepz n co still building up my rep like it was lego this is just me and how i roll hat back n dont forget my trousers low what your name everywhere i be i leave my price tag out so u neggers can see you wanna know how i got this fly its my big bros krepah n manic that how n why i dont share u aint getting any of my pie in the way i spell it in team there a "I" im not a average joe im not another guy i cause problems but keep it straight on da sly my clothes are flashy cause im strickly d.t trust look away if you have a case of epilepcy .................................................. ............... hit back at me with what you think of it

01-01-2007, 02:25 PM	#7
Di$R3$p3(T [[HearT oF A ChampioN]] Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NeW JeRseY Posts: 1,049 Repped: 17 Repped 15 Times in 10 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	ey deep..............Lets Battle..okaii? dont puss out 3-5 bars due 2day midnight?first battle of tha new year for me im coming soft cuz your soft okaii? __________________ "BacKk oN ThA BeAsT ModE" [OvErALL RecOrd]-[WiNz:"73" SliiP uHpz:"9"]

01-01-2007, 02:39 PM	#9
Di$R3$p3(T [[HearT oF A ChampioN]] Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NeW JeRseY Posts: 1,049 Repped: 17 Repped 15 Times in 10 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	oh yea i'll give it a 1/10 on a rookie level..sorry its kinda true step ya game up;..i'd be glad to0 teach? __________________ "BacKk oN ThA BeAsT ModE" [OvErALL RecOrd]-[WiNz:"73" SliiP uHpz:"9"]

01-01-2007, 06:01 PM	#12
Di$R3$p3(T [[HearT oF A ChampioN]] Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: NeW JeRseY Posts: 1,049 Repped: 17 Repped 15 Times in 10 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	deepz send me a message __________________ "BacKk oN ThA BeAsT ModE" [OvErALL RecOrd]-[WiNz:"73" SliiP uHpz:"9"]

01-03-2007, 12:52 PM	#20
ThA ViiRu5 ``Enlightened Emcee::.. Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: ................ Posts: 2,617 Repped: 525 Repped 179 Times in 104 Posts Neg Reps: 81 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	i'm 14 as well. and im ten times nicer than that. aint no braggin its a fact, if u just startin out than thats ok, it wasn tbad for a rookie...nice imagery but there were no multies, etc..a couple weak metaz...keep workin on it. __________________ "The only thing that comes to a sleeping man is dreams" ReCkoRd - [Victoriez]: 27 [Slipp Uppz]: 8 [KO]: 13 [TKO]: 1 ~~``!!...::Forever Undefeated::...!!``~~ HeAvYwEiGhT

12-31-2006, 04:35 PM	#3
Me>You Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: nEw YoRk CiTy Posts: 89 Repped: 11 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	eh. . .i can see room for improvement. . .get more creative. . .use some good punches. . .and some multies. . .and you'll be ok. . check out my shit 'Release. . .'

12-31-2006, 04:55 PM	#4
-K.P- Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: UK Posts: 2,515 Repped: 142 Repped 119 Times in 47 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	was aiight...you from west London? rep ya endz blud aha

01-01-2007, 01:46 PM	#5
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	yh im from west london whats your ends

01-01-2007, 01:47 PM	#6
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin need more feedback

01-01-2007, 02:38 PM	#8
♪Spoken Word♪ Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Lawrence, Mass. Posts: 1,293 Repped: 54 Repped 122 Times in 53 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	shit was eeeehhhh... nuff said... 5/10

01-01-2007, 05:42 PM	#10
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	so what you got to tell me to help im 14 and im ready to step my game up

01-01-2007, 05:49 PM	#11
The Lyrical One !!..SuPeR LyRiCiSt..!! Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: lol Posts: 1,650 Repped: 31 Repped 15 Times in 12 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	ayo this was alright man lika ehhhh 5.9/10 almost decent but work on ya shit still can u rate my new jawns its 3 of em alll 3 have the sleepers presents thank u

01-01-2007, 06:05 PM	#13
BAnk$ 82992 Buck The World March 27 Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Mobile, Alabama Posts: 3,976 Repped: 2,508 Repped 407 Times in 46 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	4.5 outta 10.

01-01-2007, 06:12 PM	#14
B Dope Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,051 Repped: 638 Repped 375 Times in 112 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	4/10. Heres a tip, increase your vocab, don't use simple words through the whole verse like ho, dough, flow. Feel me. If you want you can add a mulit then use those words. Example: fat hoes, that dough, crack flow. See the word before it rhymes with each other. work on it and ya should be ok. Rep me for this and leave feed on my ether pt. 2(Babe Truth Diss)

01-02-2007, 07:53 AM	#15
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	yhyh im filling yo lots tips thanks for those hit back at me need more feedbac

01-02-2007, 02:21 PM	#16
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	.....uppin.....

01-02-2007, 02:43 PM	#17
sofis2cated California Lyricist Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Bakersfield, CA Posts: 762 Repped: 33 Repped 10 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	shit was alright, the last two lines are my favorite, reminds me of the episode when the simpsons went to japan and watched the cartoon that caused them to go into seizures lol.. but work on the vocab cuz everyone and their mom uses those rhyme schemes, and try using multis like baller said, definitely shows room for improvement.. stay up kid

01-03-2007, 12:01 PM	#18
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	thanks for all feedbac im fellin everythink u lot ar4e saying ama step my game up then im goona drop another freestyle look out for it and see the improvment

01-03-2007, 12:02 PM	#19
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	........uppin...........

01-03-2007, 04:37 PM	#21
[CC]Ratify[CC] Banned Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Where It Started At. . .[NY] Posts: 8,373 Repped: 353 Repped 610 Times in 235 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	is this the whos the best 14 yo on here thread now. . . thinks looks in the mirror walks away smiling

01-04-2007, 02:12 PM	#22
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	thanks for the feedback keep hitin me with ur shit

01-05-2007, 02:31 PM	#23
Deepz101 14 n Runnin Da Game Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: !West London! Posts: 100 Repped: 0 Repped 2 Times in 2 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	uppin for feedbac

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