Guess What

ant. . . · 12-11-2006, 11:05 PM

Showin`-This-Loser What Death Really Means Once i Start Blowin`-A-Six-Shooter
Ak47, Sawed Off, I Carry More Steal in My Hands, Showin` A New Risk.....-A-Kruger
New Evolution, Cuz I Bring Terror During-Night-Hours..Watch My Fury-Fight-Cowards
......................Have Ya Dismanteled Wit Every Hit Like I Got Massive Strike-Power
Got A Machine That'll Clean-up-Lames ......................Fist's That'll Beat-up-Frames
..........Im Lettin You Kno A Pre-warning Ill Fck you Up More then Weed-Wit-Cane
Chest-Busted-Open, The Rest Crushed-And-Broken You Aint Much-Of-Nothin
Nigga You Aint Touchin My Skillz, Yourself The Only Time You Touchin-Somethin
Man This Shits Use-less Until i Start To Dump-Strays Which You Chumps-Aint
Repeatin Myself Ill Wreck Ones-Frame Especially Dumb-Lames and Young-Names
Make A Wish-Man For me To Be Gone and Leave, Keep Up Wit Me Ya Lips-Cant
.............Cuz Im Spittin` Higher Then Most Got A Problem Im Here And This-Ant!!!

L.P. a.k.a Yung~One · 12-11-2006, 11:12 PM

nigga as usual shytz fukin hot mad prop's!!!!!!!!!

ISuckDick4BusFare · 12-11-2006, 11:25 PM

ok...

1st problem.. some of your lines are worded really.. awkward.. try & find a better choice of words...

2nd problem.. some of your mulites are off-syllable with the other multies which makes it kinda hard to catch the flow.....

Quote:

Showin`-This-Loser What Death Really Means Once i Start Blowin`-A-Six-Shooter
Ak47, Sawed Off, I Carry More Steal in My Hands, Showin` A New Risk.....-A-Kruger

There's an example.. they all have different amount of syllables...so, next time make sure all your multies have the same amount of syllables

3rd problem.. the lack of punches & wordplay...

There's alot more stuff I could point out but I don't feel like typin too much, so just work on those for now

U Not Like Me · 12-11-2006, 11:25 PM

^^^ i agree with him man (Yung one), it was hot

ant. . . · 12-12-2006, 12:57 AM

iight to esco ill try to fix those

and thanx to both of ya

uppin

lil rich · 12-12-2006, 01:47 AM

that wuz hot keep up 9/10
vote on this please

!{THR!LLZ}! · 12-12-2006, 08:23 PM

I DoN't LiKe Ya New StyLe...SwiTCh BaCk To Ya OLD 1 ASaP LOl...

iT'S MaKiN Ya MuLtieS LoOk FOrCed ANd Off...

PuNCheD LaCkeD AFfeCt AsweLL...

OverALL It WaS IgHt BuT u COuLd HaVe DoNe WaY BettEr...{321}

~Young Gunna~ · 12-12-2006, 08:29 PM

co sign wit esco n nj....da new style aint really workin out to good for ya..1

Antidote · 12-12-2006, 11:18 PM

The only thing i dont like about your free is the font.

The new style does have a few awkward words but the rhymes are nice. Stay up ant

12-11-2006, 11:05 PM	#1
ant. . . Veteran Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: California Posts: 1,750 Repped: 3 Repped 64 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Guess What Guess What Showin`-This-Loser What Death Really Means Once i Start Blowin`-A-Six-Shooter Ak47, Sawed Off, I Carry More Steal in My Hands, Showin` A New Risk.....-A-Kruger New Evolution, Cuz I Bring Terror During-Night-Hours..Watch My Fury-Fight-Cowards ......................Have Ya Dismanteled Wit Every Hit Like I Got Massive Strike-Power Got A Machine That'll Clean-up-Lames ......................Fist's That'll Beat-up-Frames ..........Im Lettin You Kno A Pre-warning Ill Fck you Up More then Weed-Wit-Cane Chest-Busted-Open, The Rest Crushed-And-Broken You Aint Much-Of-Nothin Nigga You Aint Touchin My Skillz, Yourself The Only Time You Touchin-Somethin Man This Shits Use-less Until i Start To Dump-Strays Which You Chumps-Aint Repeatin Myself Ill Wreck Ones-Frame Especially Dumb-Lames and Young-Names Make A Wish-Man For me To Be Gone and Leave, Keep Up Wit Me Ya Lips-Cant .............Cuz Im Spittin` Higher Then Most Got A Problem Im Here And This-Ant!!! __________________

12-11-2006, 11:12 PM	#2
L.P. a.k.a Yung~One G~L~K Join Date: May 2006 Location: miami//dade county//305 Posts: 829 Repped: 4 Repped 24 Times in 17 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	nigga as usual shytz fukin hot mad prop's!!!!!!!!! __________________

12-12-2006, 12:57 AM	#5
ant. . . Veteran Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: California Posts: 1,750 Repped: 3 Repped 64 Times in 41 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	iight to esco ill try to fix those and thanx to both of ya uppin __________________

12-12-2006, 08:23 PM	#7
!{THR!LLZ}! {NJ}-W's 45~2 L's- Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: {CMD} -NJ- Posts: 3,713 Repped: 13 Repped 14 Times in 10 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	I DoN't LiKe Ya New StyLe...SwiTCh BaCk To Ya OLD 1 ASaP LOl... iT'S MaKiN Ya MuLtieS LoOk FOrCed ANd Off... PuNCheD LaCkeD AFfeCt AsweLL... OverALL It WaS IgHt BuT u COuLd HaVe DoNe WaY BettEr...{321} __________________ {NJ THRILLA THE KILLA}{THRILLZ}{05-07} {SOLO KILL COUNT}{W'S 45 - 3 L'S}{{321}} {RHYME REF}{VET SLAYA}{G-WORLD'S MINE}

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12-11-2006, 11:25 PM	#4
U Not Like Me You Should Already Know Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Springfield, Massachusetts Posts: 293 Repped: 63 Repped 9 Times in 4 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^^^ i agree with him man (Yung one), it was hot

12-12-2006, 01:47 AM	#6
lil rich Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: coquitlam:right by vancouver Posts: 485 Repped: 10 Repped 3 Times in 3 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	that wuz hot keep up 9/10 vote on this please

12-12-2006, 08:29 PM	#8
~Young Gunna~ Banned Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Gs Us Posts: 10,870 Repped: 156 Repped 574 Times in 243 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 2 Times in 2 Posts	co sign wit esco n nj....da new style aint really workin out to good for ya..1

12-12-2006, 11:18 PM	#9
Antidote Beck Unit Don Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 1,263 Repped: 104 Repped 100 Times in 24 Posts Neg Reps: 2 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	The only thing i dont like about your free is the font. The new style does have a few awkward words but the rhymes are nice. Stay up ant