Real Life

J Strayz · 11-19-2006, 04:26 PM

This is my reality,fuck a trend or a fad
I'm sat down,scribbling with a pen on a pad
shit's so fucked up,I'm no freind to my Dad
Sometimes I wanna fucking end it so bad
life beginning to drag,I'm lost on this sheet
doubters wanna see me lick the balls of defeat
My freinds moved on,I've lost my belief
plus I can't even afford the cost of a beat
I tell it bluntly,not showing Josh with deceit
Wishing I could grab this pain,and force it to cease
I think of my mom,and of me making her proud
I don't wanna be a vacant face in the crowd
My parents divorce,left a taste in my mouth
mom's life's a mess,thinking of changing her house
dreaming of making it,I keep making a bar
but honestly,I can't see this rap shit taking me far

Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans
I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands
I'm not willing to watch nothing advance
but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams
it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands
this is how it must feel like
it's real life

Feels like I'm gonna be here,every season and fall
filled with hate,I wanna just scream at the wall
sitting up at night,dreams of leaving it all
sick enough to get on my knees and just crawl
I need a future,gotta make this nonsense work
I don't care anymore,after the constant hurt
fuck my teachers,thinking Josh is just plain rash
and all of my doubters,talking the same trash
everyday's the same now,I'm walking the same paths
seems like my whole life is caught in a plane crash
I only keep writing this,'cause I know it pays
as poor as shit,wearing the same clothes for days
the flow was raised,classics I study devoutly
to the point that,Mom started to worry about me
maybe I'm dreaming,you might not grasp my scope
but when I write good,I just can't mask my hope
it's like

Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans
I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands
I'm not willing to watch nothing advance
but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams
it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands
this is how it must feel like
it's real life

I'm depressed,my verse pours bleaker than rain
nobody else rapping explores deeper terrain
buying CDs all the time,I breath for the game
it stops me from exploding,seething with pain
claustrophobic,I feel confined to this place
my thoughts full of fear,combined with disgrace
everytime I feel up,my mindstate deflates
everybody chasing rap,I feel behind in the race
I'm just not sure where I'm headed no more
like I lost a game,and can't settle the score
after this,I just can't believe in heaven no more
sometimes I just wish I was dead on the floor
rhyming for life,fuck if I'm being drammatic
one chance,and I'm gonna seize it and grab it
now is supposedly the best time of my life
but it seems hanging on the next line that I write
it's like

Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans
I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands
I'm not willing to watch nothing advance
but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams
it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands
this is how it must feel like
it's real life

JR-One · 11-20-2006, 01:47 AM

This One Is Strictly For Juggernaut.. .. I'm Going To Do A "Breakdown" Of Your Verse.. .. Why? Because It Was Bad.. .. Now, A Lot Of You Youngin's Are Going To Think I Stole This Whole Quoting Somebody's Verse And Making Fun Of It Bit.. .. But He Stole It From Me.. .. Because He Is Goshtepel.. .. Which Isn't A Word.. .. I'm Using It Because He Loves People Who Don't Use Real Words.. .. So, Here's The Breakdown:

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This is my reality,fuck a trend or a fad
I'm sat down,scribbling with a pen on a pad

ooh, me likey.. it's very visual, i can literally picture a mentally challenged child 'sat down' scribbling nonsensical words with a pen.... on a pad...

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shit's so fucked up,I'm no freind to my Dad
Sometimes I wanna fucking end it so bad

I'm no friend of your dad either.. but that doesnt make me want to commit suicide.. You should be glad you're not friends with your father.. because he is likely a retarded drunk, and you take after him..

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life beginning to drag,I'm lost on this sheet
doubters wanna see me lick the balls of defeat

shit.. i wouldn't just want to see you lick the balls of defeat.. i'd wanna see you licking the balls of everything.. children, field mice, governors etc.

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My freinds moved on,I've lost my belief
plus I can't even afford the cost of a beat

If you can't afford a beat, i'd be happy to pay you.. if you lick the balls of something.. possibly.. defeat?

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I tell it bluntly,not showing Josh with deceit

frankly, i'm not sure who Josh is.. but if you're willing to lick his balls, i'll give you the money to purchase your beat..

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Wishing I could grab this pain,and force it to cease
I think of my mom,and of me making her proud

'grab this pain' and 'force it to cease'.. Is this a reference to masturbation? Are you masturbating while thinking of making your mom proud? Hey man, whatever gets you off.... fucking creepy though..

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I don't wanna be a vacant face in the crowd
My parents divorce,left a taste in my mouth
mom's life's a mess,thinking of changing her house
dreaming of making it,I keep making a bar

Hey, dipshingles.. Normally, after a comma.. People, press a button on their keyboard.. It's, called the space bar.. you, fuckin' clodhopper..

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but honestly,I can't see this rap shit taking me far

honestly, i wholeheartedly agree with that statement..

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Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans 
I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands

Now honestly, Carl, do you mind if i call you Carl? What does this world demand of you? Not much.. It demands maybe a please and thank you.. a haircut every now and then.. calm the shit out..

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I'm not willing to watch nothing advance
but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams
it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands
this is how it must feel like
it's real life

I agree your rap career ain't shit, your exam skills are shit, your parents love life is shit, your life is shit.. For a freestyle called 'Real Life', I was expecting more butterflies and rainbows.. this is depressing..

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Feels like I'm gonna be here,every season and fall
filled with hate,I wanna just scream at the wall
sitting up at night,dreams of leaving it all

Every season and fall?? There are more seasons than just Fall.. Like Spring, a happy season, with butterflies and rainbows and men with balloons who give you kisses on your birthdays!

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sick enough to get on my knees and just crawl

Now what would that solve Carl? I feel like a suicide hotline or something.. Boo fuckity hoo Carl.. you're mother's a whore and your Daddy collects the money.. GET OVER IT.. HOLY FUCK..

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I need a future,gotta make this nonsense work
I don't care anymore,after the constant hurt

WTF IS THIS? THIS IS A HIP HOP FORUM.. HIP HOP=HOES, GUNS, CASH, DRUGS.. ALL HAPPY THINGS.. YOUR EMO FUCKING RHYMES ARE PISSING ME OFF CARL..

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fuck my teachers,thinking Josh is just plain rash
and all of my doubters,talking the same trash

Who is Josh? Who are these Doubters? WHAT THE FUCK IS A PLAIN RASH? IS THAT SOME SORT OF SEXUALLY TRANSMITTED DISORDER? DID YOU HAVE A ONE NIGHT STAND WITH A 'CARDIFF' HOOKER AS SHOGUN WOULD SAY?

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everyday's the same now,I'm walking the same paths

Here's a new path: walk off a bridge. Die.

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seems like my whole life is caught in a plane crash

See, the beautiful thing about plane crashes is: they end. People die. If your life was caught in a plane crash, it would be dead. Yet, it isn't.

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I only keep writing this,'cause I know it pays
as poor as shit,wearing the same clothes for days

HOW THE FUCK DOES IT PAY? WRITING RHYMES ON THE INTERNET? UNLESS YOUR THELONIOUS MONK, BACK FROM THE GRAVE.. IT DOESN'T, CARL.. YA FUCKIN' DOOFUS..

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the flow was raised,classics I study devoutly
to the point that,Mom started to worry about me
maybe I'm dreaming,you might not grasp my scope
but when I write good,I just can't mask my hope

MASK YOUR HOPE? HOPE? WHAT THE SHIT? THIS IS WHAT YOU CONSIDER HOPE? THIS HAS BEEN 26 LINES OF:
boo fuckity hoo josh,i need to buy a beat//
but i can't buy shit,cant even wash my feet//
my mom gives me feathers,why she leave//
i live on the street,i hate my daddday//
THAT ISN'T HOPE, IT'S ANNOYING BLABBER..

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it's like

shut the fuck up?

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Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans 
I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands 	
I'm not willing to watch nothing advance
but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams
it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands
this is how it must feel like
it's real life

WHAT? IS MY TAPE CASSETTE JAMMED IN THE PLAYER? I THOUGHT I JUST HEARD THIS SHIT.. WHY THE FUCK WOULD I WANT TO HEAR THIS DREARY BULLFUCK AGAIN? SHIT..

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I'm depressed,my verse pours bleaker than rain

YOUR DEPRESSED? SHIT.. AFTER READING THIS BULLSHIT, I'M DEPRESSED..

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nobody else rapping explores deeper terrain

WHAT THE FUCKLE? NOBOD- NO.. NO.. SHUT UP.. ANY MONKEY WITH A DICK FOR A NOSE COULD WRITE SHIT COMPLAINING ABOUT THEIR LIFE.. THIS ISN'T 'DEEPER TERRAIN' YA STUPID FUCKIN' INDIANA JONES WANNABE HO..

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buying CDs all the time,I breath for the game
it stops me from exploding,seething with pain
claustrophobic,I feel confined to this place
my thoughts full of fear,combined with disgrace
everytime I feel up,my mindstate deflates
everybody chasing rap,I feel behind in the race

GET A THUMBTACK, STICK IT IN YOUR RETINAS.. NOW YOU'LL KNOW WHAT I'M GOING THROUGH, READING THIS SHIT..

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I'm just not sure where I'm headed no more
like I lost a game,and can't settle the score
after this,I just can't believe in heaven no more

BLAT BLAT BLAT BLAT!! U DEAD? BRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRAT!! U DEAD YET CARL? PLEASE STOP.. U SAD SACK..

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sometimes I just wish I was dead on the floor

What do you know? I wish that same thing upon you!

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rhyming for life,fuck if I'm being drammatic

This is dramatic? My, I thought this was a romantic comedy starring Tom Hanks!

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one chance,and I'm gonna seize it and grab it
now is supposedly the best time of my life
but it seems hanging on the next line that I write
it's like

I know babies who crap themselves who are more entertaining than this..

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Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans 
I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands 	
I'm not willing to watch nothing advance
but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams
it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands
this is how it must feel like
it's real life

hahahahahahaha.. omfg.. i'm losing it.. didn't i just read this dreary bullpenis shit 2 seconds ago?? FUCK.. FUCKKKKKK.. I WANT YOU DEAD, MORE THAN YOU WANT YOU DEAD..

I SWEAR TO JESUS, JUGGERNAUT.. YOU BETTER HAVE READ THIS ALL..

..Esco.. · 11-20-2006, 01:54 AM

Lmfaoooooooooooooooo

J Strayz · 11-20-2006, 12:45 PM

- How long did that take you? Dude seriously get a life

- There is no feedback there,just a lame attempt at humour

- The only lines I repeated were the chorus dumbass

- I have had dope responses from people off most sites,and I'm quietly confident they are more knowledgable about hip hop than you

- I haven't seen a verse from you anywhere,which leads me to the conclusion you are probably terrible,and could never write anything like this

- The lyricism I show here is a hell of a lot better than anything else I've read here,honestly most of it's garbage,and my verses are about my life,and not some pathetic e-thug garbage,yet you don't seem to give stupid feed to those dumbasses

Dan Russell · 11-20-2006, 01:12 PM

fuck cats who diss on peeps when they write some serious shit.
stay up strays, shit was good, cats jus lookin for attention, cuz they aint get it no where else CUZ THEY CANT RAP, real know what it is, 1

JR-One · 11-20-2006, 08:45 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by J Strayz

- How long did that take you? Dude seriously get a life

- There is no feedback there,just a lame attempt at humour

- The only lines I repeated were the chorus dumbass

- I have had dope responses from people off most sites,and I'm quietly confident they are more knowledgable about hip hop than you

- I haven't seen a verse from you anywhere,which leads me to the conclusion you are probably terrible,and could never write anything like this

- The lyricism I show here is a hell of a lot better than anything else I've read here,honestly most of it's garbage,and my verses are about my life,and not some pathetic e-thug garbage,yet you don't seem to give stupid feed to those dumbasses

How About This For Feedback:
1) Quit Rapping, You Emo..
2) That Was A Chorus..?.. It Was More Like A Crappus.. ..
3) You're "quietly condfident" They Are More "knowledgable" About Hip Hop Than Me..?.. Well If There English Is Anything Like Yours.. .. I Doubt That.. ..
4) I'm The Best MC On This Board.. .. If You Would Like To See A Verse From Me, You Can Call Me Out.. ..
5) I Don't Rap About E-Thug Garbage Though.. .. I'm Not An Actual Thug, Nor An E-Thug.. ..
6) After A COMMA (,) You Press The Space Bar (The Big One That Looks Like A Penis).. .. Idiot Box.. ..

Lil Lay · 11-20-2006, 09:10 PM

Wack. Just kill yourself.

Also LOL at JR. I lawled at the "YOUR DEPRESSED? SHIT.. AFTER READING THIS BULLSHIT, I'M DEPRESSED.."

11-19-2006, 04:26 PM	#1
J Strayz Senior Member Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 127 Repped: 1 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Real Life Real Life This is my reality,fuck a trend or a fad I'm sat down,scribbling with a pen on a pad shit's so fucked up,I'm no freind to my Dad Sometimes I wanna fucking end it so bad life beginning to drag,I'm lost on this sheet doubters wanna see me lick the balls of defeat My freinds moved on,I've lost my belief plus I can't even afford the cost of a beat I tell it bluntly,not showing Josh with deceit Wishing I could grab this pain,and force it to cease I think of my mom,and of me making her proud I don't wanna be a vacant face in the crowd My parents divorce,left a taste in my mouth mom's life's a mess,thinking of changing her house dreaming of making it,I keep making a bar but honestly,I can't see this rap shit taking me far Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands I'm not willing to watch nothing advance but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands this is how it must feel like it's real life Feels like I'm gonna be here,every season and fall filled with hate,I wanna just scream at the wall sitting up at night,dreams of leaving it all sick enough to get on my knees and just crawl I need a future,gotta make this nonsense work I don't care anymore,after the constant hurt fuck my teachers,thinking Josh is just plain rash and all of my doubters,talking the same trash everyday's the same now,I'm walking the same paths seems like my whole life is caught in a plane crash I only keep writing this,'cause I know it pays as poor as shit,wearing the same clothes for days the flow was raised,classics I study devoutly to the point that,Mom started to worry about me maybe I'm dreaming,you might not grasp my scope but when I write good,I just can't mask my hope it's like Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands I'm not willing to watch nothing advance but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands this is how it must feel like it's real life I'm depressed,my verse pours bleaker than rain nobody else rapping explores deeper terrain buying CDs all the time,I breath for the game it stops me from exploding,seething with pain claustrophobic,I feel confined to this place my thoughts full of fear,combined with disgrace everytime I feel up,my mindstate deflates everybody chasing rap,I feel behind in the race I'm just not sure where I'm headed no more like I lost a game,and can't settle the score after this,I just can't believe in heaven no more sometimes I just wish I was dead on the floor rhyming for life,fuck if I'm being drammatic one chance,and I'm gonna seize it and grab it now is supposedly the best time of my life but it seems hanging on the next line that I write it's like Now in my mind,Im buzzing with plans I'm struggling,under this world's fucking demands I'm not willing to watch nothing advance but my rap career ain't shit,and I suck in exams it's daunting,I got my future stuck in my hands this is how it must feel like it's real life

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11-20-2006, 01:54 AM	#3
..Esco.. Banned Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 1,140 Repped: 2 Repped 99 Times in 19 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Lmfaoooooooooooooooo

11-20-2006, 12:45 PM	#4
J Strayz Senior Member Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 127 Repped: 1 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	- How long did that take you? Dude seriously get a life - There is no feedback there,just a lame attempt at humour - The only lines I repeated were the chorus dumbass - I have had dope responses from people off most sites,and I'm quietly confident they are more knowledgable about hip hop than you - I haven't seen a verse from you anywhere,which leads me to the conclusion you are probably terrible,and could never write anything like this - The lyricism I show here is a hell of a lot better than anything else I've read here,honestly most of it's garbage,and my verses are about my life,and not some pathetic e-thug garbage,yet you don't seem to give stupid feed to those dumbasses

11-20-2006, 01:12 PM	#5
Dan Russell D-Block 4 Life Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Perth City Posts: 1,374 Repped: 6 Repped 34 Times in 32 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	fuck cats who diss on peeps when they write some serious shit. stay up strays, shit was good, cats jus lookin for attention, cuz they aint get it no where else CUZ THEY CANT RAP, real know what it is, 1

11-20-2006, 09:10 PM	#7
Lil Lay Fallen Angel Join Date: May 2005 Location: Homer Posts: 3,897 Repped: 1 Repped 0 Times in 0 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Wack. Just kill yourself. Also LOL at JR. I lawled at the "YOUR DEPRESSED? SHIT.. AFTER READING THIS BULLSHIT, I'M DEPRESSED.."