Real Shit pt.1

Young_Nicks · 11-19-2006, 03:47 AM

When I started in this rap shit young nicks was an iight rapper/

Got a lil practice with it and now im like the thing that holds ur candy a tight wrapper/

Every time you hear me on the radio ppl do like diddy and press play/

Expect there is a difference between mys and his shit mys is not gay/

The things I say people memorize and try to penalize the words I say/

When I write rhymes I'm like a can of airasole cause I can spray all day/

Man I'm refreshing like when u wake up in the morning and wash with Listerine/

Im all about the money so call me wu tang cause a nigga is about the cream/

Man and my click is so tight we have u doing like fabulous we make u breath/

This is unfair you dudes is trying to stop me but im unstoppable like aids when it breeds/

Young_Nicks · 11-19-2006, 01:23 PM

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MannY · 11-19-2006, 01:30 PM

you have to a find a rhyme structure and stick to it. The flow was outta control and understanding it was hard. And your punches could use some work too..I get the actual punchline, but the approach you took didn't make it come as hard as it couldve. add a little wordplay into it, work on your multis and punches, and fix your flow.

3/10

Young_Nicks · 11-19-2006, 01:40 PM

^Dam iight how would u structure the rhymes.

11-19-2006, 03:47 AM	#1
Young_Nicks Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 936 Repped: 62 Repped 131 Times in 58 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Real Shit pt.1 Real Shit pt.1 When I started in this rap shit young nicks was an iight rapper/ Got a lil practice with it and now im like the thing that holds ur candy a tight wrapper/ Every time you hear me on the radio ppl do like diddy and press play/ Expect there is a difference between mys and his shit mys is not gay/ The things I say people memorize and try to penalize the words I say/ When I write rhymes I'm like a can of airasole cause I can spray all day/ Man I'm refreshing like when u wake up in the morning and wash with Listerine/ Im all about the money so call me wu tang cause a nigga is about the cream/ Man and my click is so tight we have u doing like fabulous we make u breath/ This is unfair you dudes is trying to stop me but im unstoppable like aids when it breeds/

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11-19-2006, 01:23 PM	#2
Young_Nicks Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 936 Repped: 62 Repped 131 Times in 58 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	.................................................. ....

11-19-2006, 01:30 PM	#3
MannY Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Miramar, FL Posts: 580 Repped: 1 Repped 1 Time in 1 Post Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	you have to a find a rhyme structure and stick to it. The flow was outta control and understanding it was hard. And your punches could use some work too..I get the actual punchline, but the approach you took didn't make it come as hard as it couldve. add a little wordplay into it, work on your multis and punches, and fix your flow. 3/10

11-19-2006, 01:40 PM	#4
Young_Nicks Banned Join Date: Jul 2006 Posts: 936 Repped: 62 Repped 131 Times in 58 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^Dam iight how would u structure the rhymes.