World Is Mine NEW TRACK verses are fire

Braidz · 10-11-2009, 01:47 PM

drop some feed....

2nd audio drop on here... i recorded it 2day.. its a ruff copy...

WORLD IS MINE

thinkn getting sum1 to sing on hook instead of the dodgy hook i got

what yall think?

OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK · 10-11-2009, 04:04 PM

hmmm
flow is shaky my nigga, u wasn't on beat most of tha time....tha lyrical content aint dat bad, but it seems like u workin on ur tha lyrics then tha actual audio itself

work on ur flow major, u can practice by shorten out ur rhymes...cuz it sounded like u was fittin to many words in one line, n thats gonna make ur flow sound shaky n off beat....

hook was off beat too...beat was cool, but too low...sound of ur verses were louder tha another

but u gotta work on tha basic's...like ur flow especially....then start really workin on ya lyrics, emotion....

stay up n keep grindin dawg

Braidz · 10-12-2009, 12:16 AM

iight thanks man. at least sum1 is giving me some feed lol

as i stated... i really did hate the hook lol

Mic L · 10-12-2009, 11:35 AM

had good multiples and a few good lines i liked... but ya flow was def. off, hook too... stay at it homie

Braidz · 10-12-2009, 11:47 AM

yeah i listened over n im gunna re-do it. my flow was all outta place n shid.... it was rushed as fuck too... i did it in like 20 minutes haha. + it was originaly meant to go to that on top of the world track by T.I. so it was made for that n i couldnt find the beat tho

but thanks anyways on feed

inna sense · 10-13-2009, 07:44 PM

i like your style...you have good solid rhymes...your flow was on point to me...this is some good shit...keep posting

Braidz · 10-16-2009, 01:15 AM

thanks dude yeah im bout to post another one up.... its only one verse tho anyways check it when its up its gon be called "Find Me Repping"

10-11-2009, 01:47 PM	#1
Braidz Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Melbourne City, Australia Posts: 321 Repped: 11 Repped 31 Times in 28 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	World Is Mine NEW TRACK verses are fire World Is Mine NEW TRACK verses are fire drop some feed.... 2nd audio drop on here... i recorded it 2day.. its a ruff copy... WORLD IS MINE thinkn getting sum1 to sing on hook instead of the dodgy hook i got what yall think?

10-11-2009, 04:04 PM	#2
OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK G.E.D...... Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: North C@rolin@ Posts: 5,578 Repped: 644 Repped 835 Times in 415 Posts Neg Reps: 108 Neg Repped at 125 Times in 89 Posts	hmmm flow is shaky my nigga, u wasn't on beat most of tha time....tha lyrical content aint dat bad, but it seems like u workin on ur tha lyrics then tha actual audio itself work on ur flow major, u can practice by shorten out ur rhymes...cuz it sounded like u was fittin to many words in one line, n thats gonna make ur flow sound shaky n off beat.... hook was off beat too...beat was cool, but too low...sound of ur verses were louder tha another but u gotta work on tha basic's...like ur flow especially....then start really workin on ya lyrics, emotion.... stay up n keep grindin dawg __________________ {-LONG TIME COMIN'-}..COMIN SOON..

10-12-2009, 11:35 AM	#4
Mic L THE MASTERMIND Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Garden State of Mind Posts: 2,765 Repped: 112 Repped 18 Times in 16 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	had good multiples and a few good lines i liked... but ya flow was def. off, hook too... stay at it homie __________________ Mic L - It Is Called Hip Hop EP (12.15.09)

10-13-2009, 07:44 PM	#6
inna sense Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: germany Posts: 152 Repped: 0 Repped 6 Times in 6 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	i like your style...you have good solid rhymes...your flow was on point to me...this is some good shit...keep posting __________________

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10-12-2009, 12:16 AM	#3
Braidz Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Melbourne City, Australia Posts: 321 Repped: 11 Repped 31 Times in 28 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	iight thanks man. at least sum1 is giving me some feed lol as i stated... i really did hate the hook lol

10-12-2009, 11:47 AM	#5
Braidz Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Melbourne City, Australia Posts: 321 Repped: 11 Repped 31 Times in 28 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	yeah i listened over n im gunna re-do it. my flow was all outta place n shid.... it was rushed as fuck too... i did it in like 20 minutes haha. + it was originaly meant to go to that on top of the world track by T.I. so it was made for that n i couldnt find the beat tho but thanks anyways on feed

10-16-2009, 01:15 AM	#7
Braidz Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Melbourne City, Australia Posts: 321 Repped: 11 Repped 31 Times in 28 Posts Neg Reps: 6 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	thanks dude yeah im bout to post another one up.... its only one verse tho anyways check it when its up its gon be called "Find Me Repping"