1 braud 2 brauds 3 brauds 4- RICH LOC NEWW!!!

RICH$LOCO · 07-03-2009, 12:36 AM

drop some feed this off my mixtape thats about to drop hosted by heat

leave some feed please and ill return the favor

this some story telling type shit based on real life shit lol

Smoke1Life · 07-03-2009, 01:02 AM

Shits not too bad. Very basic though.
Your flow and lyrics both work with the song, but they could soar much higher then the altitude your taking them at the moment. Try to start using multi-syllable rhymes more often, and don't just come with the basic rhyme scheme that you have been using. You have to switch shit up, that way people don't get bored with your track. Up your vocabulary in your song writing also, don't be ashamed to look smart on a track.

YUNG STIXX · 07-03-2009, 01:29 AM

1 br0d, 2 brod, 3 br0dz 4 lol i like this shit...but i agree with that nigga smoke...work on different schemes

-LATIN- · 07-03-2009, 10:20 AM

This was coo but yeah i agree with smoke too!!
Switch up the style and try and elevate a lil bit more..
But the chorus was pretty catchy fam
lyrics and flow was good...keep em coming

TheRealProtege · 07-04-2009, 10:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Smoke1Life

Shits not too bad. Very basic though.
Your flow and lyrics both work with the song, but they could soar much higher then the altitude your taking them at the moment. Try to start using multi-syllable rhymes more often, and don't just come with the basic rhyme scheme that you have been using. You have to switch shit up, that way people don't get bored with your track. Up your vocabulary in your song writing also, don't be ashamed to look smart on a track.

co sign that review... beat n lack of rhyme scheme kind of make this song feel boring by the second verse. the beat was kind of plain as fuck.. but u kind of made it better. stay up

B DONington · 07-05-2009, 10:29 AM

It sounds mainstreamy tho....u shouldnt have to get super lyrical on a track bout broads

shits cool tho.

YungMI08 · 07-05-2009, 10:18 PM

lol didnt think i was gon like this

lol good track tho

rhyme scheme didnt bother me

but the hook coulda longer

ya flow was on for the most par

ya doubles were a bit off @ times so your words got jumbled up

but good track nonetheless

leave me some feed

07-03-2009, 12:36 AM	#1
RICH$LOCO Veteran Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: westcoast, CA Posts: 2,646 Repped: 676 Repped 553 Times in 141 Posts Neg Reps: 13 Neg Repped at 14 Times in 14 Posts	1 braud 2 brauds 3 brauds 4- RICH LOC NEWW!!! 1 braud 2 brauds 3 brauds 4- RICH LOC NEWW!!! drop some feed this off my mixtape thats about to drop hosted by heat leave some feed please and ill return the favor this some story telling type shit based on real life shit lol __________________

07-03-2009, 01:02 AM	#2
Smoke1Life FUCK'EM ALL Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1,456 Repped: 155 Repped 123 Times in 61 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	Shits not too bad. Very basic though. Your flow and lyrics both work with the song, but they could soar much higher then the altitude your taking them at the moment. Try to start using multi-syllable rhymes more often, and don't just come with the basic rhyme scheme that you have been using. You have to switch shit up, that way people don't get bored with your track. Up your vocabulary in your song writing also, don't be ashamed to look smart on a track. __________________

07-03-2009, 01:29 AM	#3
YUNG STIXX R.I.P DRO Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: ON 166TH Posts: 4,083 Repped: 445 Repped 1,370 Times in 448 Posts Neg Reps: 66 Neg Repped at 137 Times in 92 Posts	1 br0d, 2 brod, 3 br0dz 4 lol i like this shit...but i agree with that nigga smoke...work on different schemes __________________ MiXTAPE DROPPING S00N

07-03-2009, 10:20 AM	#4
-LATIN- -+=IAMLYRICZ=+- Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: CHI CITY/DIRTY SOUTH Posts: 1,952 Repped: 375 Repped 33 Times in 30 Posts Neg Reps: 64 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	This was coo but yeah i agree with smoke too!! Switch up the style and try and elevate a lil bit more.. But the chorus was pretty catchy fam lyrics and flow was good...keep em coming __________________

07-05-2009, 10:29 AM	#6
B DONington Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: 613...oTTawA fukaz Posts: 445 Repped: 27 Repped 12 Times in 9 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	It sounds mainstreamy tho....u shouldnt have to get super lyrical on a track bout broads shits cool tho. __________________ MYSPACE.COM/ITSBDON

07-05-2009, 10:18 PM	#7
YungMI08 Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Bmore Posts: 856 Repped: 26 Repped 211 Times in 117 Posts Neg Reps: 25 Neg Repped at 55 Times in 51 Posts	lol didnt think i was gon like this lol good track tho rhyme scheme didnt bother me but the hook coulda longer ya flow was on for the most par ya doubles were a bit off @ times so your words got jumbled up but good track nonetheless leave me some feed __________________ Crank Dat Bawwsy Bawwse http://hhboard.ihiphop.com/reputation.php?p=3930236 ^^^NEG HIM TO DEATH!!!!

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