1 braud 2 brauds 3 brauds 4- RICH LOC NEWW!!!

RICH$LOCO · 07-03-2009, 12:36 AM

http://www.zshare.net/audio/621596167551f445/

drop some feed this off my mixtape thats about to drop hosted by heat

leave some feed please and ill return the favor

this some story telling type shit based on real life shit lol

Smoke1Life · 07-03-2009, 01:02 AM

Shits not too bad. Very basic though.
Your flow and lyrics both work with the song, but they could soar much higher then the altitude your taking them at the moment. Try to start using multi-syllable rhymes more often, and don't just come with the basic rhyme scheme that you have been using. You have to switch shit up, that way people don't get bored with your track. Up your vocabulary in your song writing also, don't be ashamed to look smart on a track.

YUNG STIXX · 07-03-2009, 01:29 AM

1 br0d, 2 brod, 3 br0dz 4 lol i like this shit...but i agree with that nigga smoke...work on different schemes

-LATIN- · 07-03-2009, 10:20 AM

This was coo but yeah i agree with smoke too!!
Switch up the style and try and elevate a lil bit more..
But the chorus was pretty catchy fam
lyrics and flow was good...keep em coming

TheRealProtege · 07-04-2009, 10:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Smoke1Life

Shits not too bad. Very basic though.
Your flow and lyrics both work with the song, but they could soar much higher then the altitude your taking them at the moment. Try to start using multi-syllable rhymes more often, and don't just come with the basic rhyme scheme that you have been using. You have to switch shit up, that way people don't get bored with your track. Up your vocabulary in your song writing also, don't be ashamed to look smart on a track.

co sign that review... beat n lack of rhyme scheme kind of make this song feel boring by the second verse. the beat was kind of plain as fuck.. but u kind of made it better. stay up

B DONington · 07-05-2009, 10:29 AM

It sounds mainstreamy tho....u shouldnt have to get super lyrical on a track bout broads

shits cool tho.

YungMI08 · 07-05-2009, 10:18 PM

lol didnt think i was gon like this

lol good track tho

rhyme scheme didnt bother me

but the hook coulda longer

ya flow was on for the most par

ya doubles were a bit off @ times so your words got jumbled up

but good track nonetheless

leave me some feed

Memoirs Of A Troubled Mind

07-03-2009, 12:36 AM	#1
RICH$LOCO Veteran Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: westcoast, CA Posts: 2,560 Repped: 671 Repped 544 Times in 132 Posts Neg Reps: 13 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 10 Posts	1 braud 2 brauds 3 brauds 4- RICH LOC NEWW!!! 1 braud 2 brauds 3 brauds 4- RICH LOC NEWW!!! http://www.zshare.net/audio/621596167551f445/ drop some feed this off my mixtape thats about to drop hosted by heat leave some feed please and ill return the favor this some story telling type shit based on real life shit lol __________________ "no way u can miss it like a 20 foot target from a point blank distance"- rich loco

07-03-2009, 01:02 AM	#2
Smoke1Life FUCK'EM ALL Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1,438 Repped: 154 Repped 122 Times in 60 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	Shits not too bad. Very basic though. Your flow and lyrics both work with the song, but they could soar much higher then the altitude your taking them at the moment. Try to start using multi-syllable rhymes more often, and don't just come with the basic rhyme scheme that you have been using. You have to switch shit up, that way people don't get bored with your track. Up your vocabulary in your song writing also, don't be ashamed to look smart on a track. __________________

07-03-2009, 01:29 AM	#3
YUNG STIXX R.I.P DRO Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: ON 166TH Posts: 3,863 Repped: 406 Repped 1,270 Times in 396 Posts Neg Reps: 62 Neg Repped at 126 Times in 84 Posts	1 br0d, 2 brod, 3 br0dz 4 lol i like this shit...but i agree with that nigga smoke...work on different schemes __________________ MiXTAPE DROPPING S00N

07-03-2009, 10:20 AM	#4
-LATIN- -+=IAMLYRICZ=+- Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: CHI CITY/DIRTY SOUTH Posts: 1,885 Repped: 332 Repped 29 Times in 27 Posts Neg Reps: 54 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	This was coo but yeah i agree with smoke too!! Switch up the style and try and elevate a lil bit more.. But the chorus was pretty catchy fam lyrics and flow was good...keep em coming __________________ NEW MYSPACE NEW GRAPHICS NEW PICTURES NEW MUSIC LATIN RELOADED (COMING SOON) CUT FROM A DIFFERENT CLOTH COMING AUG 26TH

07-05-2009, 10:29 AM	#6
B DONington Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: 613...oTTawA fukaz Posts: 409 Repped: 27 Repped 10 Times in 7 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	It sounds mainstreamy tho....u shouldnt have to get super lyrical on a track bout broads shits cool tho. __________________ MYSPACE.COM/ITSBDON

07-05-2009, 10:18 PM	#7
YungMI08 Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Bmore Posts: 853 Repped: 26 Repped 211 Times in 117 Posts Neg Reps: 25 Neg Repped at 55 Times in 51 Posts	lol didnt think i was gon like this lol good track tho rhyme scheme didnt bother me but the hook coulda longer ya flow was on for the most par ya doubles were a bit off @ times so your words got jumbled up but good track nonetheless leave me some feed Memoirs Of A Troubled Mind __________________ Crank Dat Bawwsy Bawwse http://hhboard.ihiphop.com/reputation.php?p=3930236 ^^^NEG HIM TO DEATH!!!!

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