[NEW]YoungKing-Hip Hop You My Everything

youngking187 · 06-09-2009, 05:23 PM

check it out..neg/pos/or whatever..

did the second verse over..
to improve the flow of it

http://www.zshare.net/audio/61238422cc57f36b/

Quote:

Lyrics

(hook)
hip hop,you my everything,you all i ever wanted..//
i just wanna thank you..//
biggie,pac and all the others..//
you be up on everything..//
you always keep it real..//
so i wrote this song,to tell you how i feel..//

(bridge)
cause you pick me up,everytime i fall down..//
now that im grown,i promise to give my all now..//
gimme a sick beat,and ima show my skills..//
and we say the same thing every single time..//

(bridge.2)
I say we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
I say we the fucking.

verse.1

9 times outta 10,ima deliver on the song..//
drake killed it first,man i couldnt leave this track alone..//
fresh out the whip,white tee and some levi's..//
i am peyton manning,you other guys is Eli..//
i just thought i let you know,youngest with the best flow..//
all you haters shoot your fucking self like plexico..//
try me,and ill murder you,suckers i will hurt you..//
lebron vs.kobe,so much for those commerciallls..//
uh,and i will never let my fans down..//
im so hot,i cannot let my fans down..//
im hands,down pound for pound the illest..//
lyricists,who a conincidence cuz my lyrics sick..//
yea,i will give you niggaz steps like ya parents be..//
im takin over the rap game apparantly..//
im the man in town,from dc youngking..//
i bout to blow,like the sega guennis games..//

(hook)
hip hop,you my everything,you all i ever wanted..//
i just wanna thank you..//
biggie,pac and all the others..//
you be up on everything..//
you always keep it real..//
so i wrote this song,to tell you how i feel..//

(bridge)
cause you pick me up,everytime i fall down..//
now that im grown,i promise to give my all now..//
gimme a sick beat,and ima show my skills..//
and we say the same thing every single time..//

(bridge.2)
I say we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
I say we the fucking.

verse 2

when i sing up on the hook,they say i be on that curtis shit..//
me and lyrik collabs,got these rappers nervous quick..//
i dont give a fuck,ima be the greatest,that i can be..//
im bout to start chargin,and not get up on these tracks free..//
cuz my muthafuckin music bumps like acne..//
im bout to touch down man somebody better tackle me..//
if you hard,tell me why ya pistol in ya crib.huh??..//
how come niggaz round ya way sayin dat u a bitch huhhhh??..//
yea,i need some answers,like im the class dummy..//
6 different areas is where i stash money..//
tripset is on there grind,stixx got the westcoast..//
me and lyrikcha,new mixtape with the best flows..//
what up tom,blog tv,playing kings shit..//
hh finest,yall better support the team bitch..//
aint nobody spitting hotter than the fucking king spit..//
from d.c to your hood,it feel like its a dream kid..//

(hook)
hip hop,you my everything,you all i ever wanted..//
i just wanna thank you..//
biggie,pac and all the others..//
you be up on everything..//
you always keep it real..//
so i wrote this song,to tell you how i feel..//

(bridge)
cause you pick me up,everytime i fall down..//
now that im grown,i promise to give my all now..//
gimme a sick beat,and ima show my skills..//
and we say the same thing every single time..//

(bridge.2)
I say we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the fucking best.
we the best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
Best you ever had.
I say we the fucking.

(outro)
yea..shout to the dmv..d.c,maryland and virginia..
my niggaz at hhboard,for pushing me to get better at this rap shit..
..new mixtape collab..lyrikcha and king coming soon..yea..

Smoke1Life · 06-09-2009, 05:30 PM

Shit ain't too bad. Didnt really feel the hook too much. Should of rhymed the 3rd and 4th lines in the bridge though. Towards the end of the 2nd verse you seemed to get off beat though. Flow started crackin up a little bit. Lyrics were good though.

youngking187 · 06-09-2009, 05:41 PM

^^^good lookz on the feed homie..
ill work on that..i appreciate it man..

C Gilbert · 06-09-2009, 05:41 PM

Hook isnt too bad, simple but good
Flow was on point, kinda slipped on the 2nd verse when the snares went out but nothing too major..
Lyrics were straight..the first couple bars in the first verse were nice.

youngking187 · 06-09-2009, 05:49 PM

^^^good lookz my nigga...i appreciate it man..
ill work on that...*bump it again*..shit is nice

supragtx · 06-09-2009, 06:01 PM

damn this shit got me jumpin.... good shitt mayneeeee

see...

chorus sounds good everything is on point.... good job...

youngking187 · 06-09-2009, 06:06 PM

^^^good lookz on the feed man..i really appreciate....

*bump it twice*if u aint feelin it the first time niggaz

nah..j/k...upppppppppppppppppppppppz!!!!!!!!!!

e-playa · 06-09-2009, 06:14 PM

beat is nice,flow is dope i just didn't feel the hook taht much and you should do sumthing with da sound quality but it's all good overall listenable track 6-7 out of 10

Stay Fly · 06-09-2009, 06:15 PM

i think u did a good job man, the lyrics could been a little bit better, some verses are too simpel....but its all love( no homo) ......the hook can be more creative....but i will say this, you really put your heart into this, its shows.......keep on having that shit in you broh.....

BucK_MarleY_07 · 06-09-2009, 06:16 PM

Sounds coo, but i think u tryin to sound too much like 50, do you. Stay original

Kidss · 06-09-2009, 06:17 PM

yo dawg you got some good fuckin lines

youngking187 · 06-09-2009, 06:21 PM

good lookz on the feed kidss,buck,stay fly and e-play..
i really appreciate the feed man...

and @buck..damn i sound like him on this track too..wtf!!!..
but nah i dont try to sound like him homie....

uppppppppppppp!!!!...damn this shit gettin fed crazy..lol

The Bad Guy · 06-09-2009, 06:28 PM

dope track .like it more than the drakes version
the chorus is kinda weak though u should have left it to a female
kepp comin them tracks b.........

youngking187 · 06-09-2009, 06:31 PM

lol@left it to a female..
good lookz on the feed my nigg..
i appreciate it homie...glad yall feelin the track..

uppppppppppppppppz!!!

robert henry · 06-09-2009, 06:33 PM

I actually really, really like it!

The hook is a bit of the key, but it's a good song. Lyrics and flow are on point.

TheRealProtege · 06-09-2009, 06:38 PM

props. good job.

only problem i had with it besides your off key notes on the chorus, was your flow was really shaky on your verses. but overall id be proud if i were you lol

PS: robert henry that cd cover you got in ur avy is fucking ill.
who did that?

EDIT AGAIN: loved that kobe/lebron line lol

OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK · 06-09-2009, 06:52 PM

, damn...u just pulled a c.gilbert on me.....

youngking187 · 06-09-2009, 07:00 PM

^^^my bad my nigg..ima send you something else..
could u feed the track though...lol..

@protege and robert henry good lookz on the feed my niggaz
i really appreciate it yall...rob that cover is ill...
yea when i wrote that line..kobe/lebron line..i waz like..oohhhhhhh shit..lol
but good lookz...

uppppppppppppppppppzzz!!!

RICH$LOCO · 06-09-2009, 07:46 PM

damn nice drop homie good to see u keep on improvin nice verses the hook is a lil shaky but its listenable so its cool 9/10 IMO

return the feed homie

youngking187 · 06-09-2009, 08:10 PM

^^^good lookz fam..i appreciate it...and i got u in a minute..

C Gilbert · 06-10-2009, 12:08 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK

, damn...u just pulled a c.gilbert on me.....

^^^^

youngking187 · 06-10-2009, 12:10 AM

Uppppppppzzz!!!!

Da Real Deal · 06-10-2009, 01:10 AM

shit is dope, im feelin it.

Tom Chambers · 06-10-2009, 01:12 AM

jacking my beat

youngking187 · 06-10-2009, 01:17 AM

^^this not your beat

get that hook done..

06-09-2009, 05:30 PM	#2
Smoke1Life FUCK'EM ALL Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1,438 Repped: 154 Repped 122 Times in 60 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	Shit ain't too bad. Didnt really feel the hook too much. Should of rhymed the 3rd and 4th lines in the bridge though. Towards the end of the 2nd verse you seemed to get off beat though. Flow started crackin up a little bit. Lyrics were good though. __________________

06-09-2009, 05:41 PM	#3
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	^^^good lookz on the feed homie.. ill work on that..i appreciate it man.. __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

06-09-2009, 05:41 PM	#4
C Gilbert †ĸªy¤Ħ§! Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Michigan Posts: 1,214 Repped: 69 Repped 57 Times in 37 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	Hook isnt too bad, simple but good Flow was on point, kinda slipped on the 2nd verse when the snares went out but nothing too major.. Lyrics were straight..the first couple bars in the first verse were nice. __________________

06-09-2009, 05:49 PM	#5
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	^^^good lookz my nigga...i appreciate it man.. ill work on that...bump it again..shit is nice __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

06-09-2009, 06:01 PM	#6
supragtx Im a wªlkin ßitch magnet Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: eAsT hARlEm Nu YaAAWwWwK Posts: 5,741 Repped: 469 Repped 1,358 Times in 629 Posts Neg Reps: 29 Neg Repped at 158 Times in 143 Posts	damn this shit got me jumpin.... good shitt mayneeeee see... chorus sounds good everything is on point.... good job... __________________ [12:55AM] sbrecords: ziz is there an ignore button for a member in the chatbox? [12:56AM] Mixtape Assassin: if there wuz one i wouldnt even have read your message just now lol

06-09-2009, 06:06 PM	#7
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	^^^good lookz on the feed man..i really appreciate.... bump it twiceif u aint feelin it the first time niggaz nah..j/k...upppppppppppppppppppppppz!!!!!!!!!! __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

06-09-2009, 06:14 PM	#8
e-playa Veteran Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Europe-$lovenia Posts: 2,425 Repped: 468 Repped 402 Times in 206 Posts Neg Reps: 21 Neg Repped at 31 Times in 23 Posts	beat is nice,flow is dope i just didn't feel the hook taht much and you should do sumthing with da sound quality but it's all good overall listenable track 6-7 out of 10 __________________

06-09-2009, 06:15 PM	#9
Stay Fly Banned Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Sweden Posts: 9,450 Repped: 5,534 Repped 996 Times in 322 Posts Neg Reps: 826 Neg Repped at 185 Times in 148 Posts	i think u did a good job man, the lyrics could been a little bit better, some verses are too simpel....but its all love( no homo) ......the hook can be more creative....but i will say this, you really put your heart into this, its shows.......keep on having that shit in you broh.....

06-09-2009, 06:16 PM	#10
BucK_MarleY_07 LAUGH NOW, Cry Later Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: TopCity Posts: 4,268 Repped: 854 Repped 727 Times in 366 Posts Neg Reps: 114 Neg Repped at 458 Times in 285 Posts	Sounds coo, but i think u tryin to sound too much like 50, do you. Stay original __________________ Murderer Bill Jesuit Coadjutor Clinton laughing then caught fake crying at Ron Brown's funeral after seeing camera.

06-09-2009, 06:17 PM	#11
Kidss Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Bloomington Posts: 380 Repped: 0 Repped 34 Times in 26 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 21 Times in 16 Posts	yo dawg you got some good fuckin lines

06-09-2009, 06:21 PM	#12
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	good lookz on the feed kidss,buck,stay fly and e-play.. i really appreciate the feed man... and @buck..damn i sound like him on this track too..wtf!!!.. but nah i dont try to sound like him homie.... uppppppppppppp!!!!...damn this shit gettin fed crazy..lol __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

06-09-2009, 06:28 PM	#13
The Bad Guy Veteran Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: At World's End Posts: 3,166 Repped: 1,192 Repped 1,010 Times in 320 Posts Neg Reps: 243 Neg Repped at 112 Times in 79 Posts	dope track .like it more than the drakes version the chorus is kinda weak though u should have left it to a female kepp comin them tracks b......... __________________ We all die one day, but as long as I'm here I'm gone grab checks. I make my cash stretch longer than giraffe necks.

06-09-2009, 06:31 PM	#14
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	lol@left it to a female.. good lookz on the feed my nigg.. i appreciate it homie...glad yall feelin the track.. uppppppppppppppppz!!! __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

06-09-2009, 06:33 PM	#15
robert henry Young F Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: South London Posts: 3,794 Repped: 549 Repped 1,255 Times in 512 Posts Neg Reps: 124 Neg Repped at 76 Times in 71 Posts	I actually really, really like it! The hook is a bit of the key, but it's a good song. Lyrics and flow are on point. __________________ Yet Untitled Album - Coming This Month!

06-09-2009, 06:38 PM	#16
TheRealProtege The alias is Protege Join Date: May 2006 Location: ThA WiLd WeSt Posts: 1,962 Repped: 139 Repped 582 Times in 167 Posts Neg Reps: 135 Neg Repped at 78 Times in 67 Posts	props. good job. only problem i had with it besides your off key notes on the chorus, was your flow was really shaky on your verses. but overall id be proud if i were you lol PS: robert henry that cd cover you got in ur avy is fucking ill. who did that? EDIT AGAIN: loved that kobe/lebron line lol __________________ The new motto is...WHOEVER soundclick.com/protegerebelflag

06-09-2009, 06:52 PM	#17
OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK G.E.D...... Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: North C@rolin@ Posts: 5,535 Repped: 633 Repped 807 Times in 403 Posts Neg Reps: 107 Neg Repped at 119 Times in 84 Posts	, damn...u just pulled a c.gilbert on me..... __________________ {-LONG TIME COMIN'-}..COMIN SOON..

06-09-2009, 07:00 PM	#18
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	^^^my bad my nigg..ima send you something else.. could u feed the track though...lol.. @protege and robert henry good lookz on the feed my niggaz i really appreciate it yall...rob that cover is ill... yea when i wrote that line..kobe/lebron line..i waz like..oohhhhhhh shit..lol but good lookz... uppppppppppppppppppzzz!!! __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

06-09-2009, 07:46 PM	#19
RICH$LOCO Veteran Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: westcoast, CA Posts: 2,557 Repped: 671 Repped 544 Times in 132 Posts Neg Reps: 13 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 10 Posts	damn nice drop homie good to see u keep on improvin nice verses the hook is a lil shaky but its listenable so its cool 9/10 IMO return the feed homie __________________ "no way u can miss it like a 20 foot target from a point blank distance"- rich loco

06-09-2009, 08:10 PM	#20
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	^^^good lookz fam..i appreciate it...and i got u in a minute.. __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

06-10-2009, 12:10 AM	#22
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	Uppppppppzzz!!!! __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

06-10-2009, 01:10 AM	#23
Da Real Deal Most Likely To Succeed Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Chicago Illinois/Jackson,MS Posts: 4,891 Repped: 861 Repped 2,690 Times in 583 Posts Neg Reps: 175 Neg Repped at 140 Times in 97 Posts	shit is dope, im feelin it.

06-10-2009, 01:12 AM	#24
Tom Chambers AkA Sur-Vis-U-All Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: pittsburgh Posts: 11,274 Repped: 132 Repped 477 Times in 296 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 66 Times in 53 Posts	jacking my beat

06-10-2009, 01:17 AM	#25
youngking187 ***** IM AMAZINGGGGGGGGGG Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Washington D.C Posts: 2,496 Repped: 303 Repped 602 Times in 140 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 12 Times in 11 Posts	^^this not your beat get that hook done.. __________________ I dont Kiss No Lips That Open Up Sidewayz

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