Who Am I - The Masterpiece

Masterpiece · 06-04-2009, 12:43 AM

something i put together...hook needs work im gonna change it but i felt like droppin this...leave feed good bad or what ever you feel like typing

OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK · 06-04-2009, 10:46 AM

flow n delivery was good...but when u said certain lines...u just sounded plain on it...like there wasnet no " punch " there to close out dat line...work on flowing n keepin dat delivery thou tha whole verse.....but not bad there...lyrics were soid thou...
hook was aite, i wasnet really feelin it
decent drop here my nigga....keep grindin
stay up

Masterpiece · 06-04-2009, 08:18 PM

^ good looks on the feed...im gonna change the hook definitely

UPPIN

Smoke1Life · 06-04-2009, 08:24 PM

Flow is pretty good for the most part. Couple parts I can hear your shovin words in there. Lyrics are good though. I agree with Jae Rock with the delivery. Yeah... change the hook. The biggest problem I got with this track is the word shovin though. That bugs the shit out of me. Just keep workin on it cuz you got mad potential.

Masterpiece · 06-04-2009, 10:05 PM

^^^much appreciated man...good look on the feed...im definitely goin to change the hook

Masterpiece · 06-05-2009, 07:57 PM

feed this mother fucker

PBMaSteRMiNdiN · 06-05-2009, 08:08 PM

Decent flow.. Delivery needs a little work like JAE said..

Lyrics were dope..

Good track..

RICH$LOCO · 06-05-2009, 09:11 PM

lyrics i like a bit of work on the flow would make it even better and the emotion too nice drop though stay up

Masterpiece · 06-06-2009, 04:45 PM

good look on the feed....uppin this shit

Masterpiece · 06-07-2009, 01:42 PM

UPPIN dont sleep

Smoke1Life · 06-09-2009, 10:45 AM

Shit ain't bad. Could use some better emotion though. The only problem with the flow is that you try to say too much in one breath. And the need some passion line, needs more passion.... Hook is pretty nice. I was impressed, could smooth it out just a little bit more. Verse 2 seems to be a little bit better. Still needs more of everything. I like the "yeah i fuckin speak it" line. had me laughin. not bad. at all.

06-04-2009, 12:43 AM	#1
Masterpiece The Mother ****in Man Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: New York Posts: 535 Repped: 1 Repped 24 Times in 23 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Who Am I - The Masterpiece Who Am I - The Masterpiece something i put together...hook needs work im gonna change it but i felt like droppin this...leave feed good bad or what ever you feel like typing

06-04-2009, 10:46 AM	#2
OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK G.E.D...... Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: North C@rolin@ Posts: 5,576 Repped: 644 Repped 835 Times in 415 Posts Neg Reps: 108 Neg Repped at 125 Times in 89 Posts	flow n delivery was good...but when u said certain lines...u just sounded plain on it...like there wasnet no " punch " there to close out dat line...work on flowing n keepin dat delivery thou tha whole verse.....but not bad there...lyrics were soid thou... hook was aite, i wasnet really feelin it decent drop here my nigga....keep grindin stay up __________________ {-LONG TIME COMIN'-}..COMIN SOON..

06-04-2009, 08:18 PM	#3
Masterpiece The Mother ****in Man Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: New York Posts: 535 Repped: 1 Repped 24 Times in 23 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^ good looks on the feed...im gonna change the hook definitely UPPIN Last edited by Masterpiece; 06-04-2009 at 08:21 PM.

06-04-2009, 08:24 PM	#4
Smoke1Life FUCK'EM ALL Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1,438 Repped: 154 Repped 122 Times in 60 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	Flow is pretty good for the most part. Couple parts I can hear your shovin words in there. Lyrics are good though. I agree with Jae Rock with the delivery. Yeah... change the hook. The biggest problem I got with this track is the word shovin though. That bugs the shit out of me. Just keep workin on it cuz you got mad potential. __________________

06-05-2009, 08:08 PM	#7
PBMaSteRMiNdiN myspace.com/ObeythePen Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: In ThA NotePaD Posts: 4,900 Repped: 79 Repped 310 Times in 146 Posts Neg Reps: 1 Neg Repped at 27 Times in 22 Posts	Decent flow.. Delivery needs a little work like JAE said.. Lyrics were dope.. Good track.. __________________ "I'm having Murderous dreams cus I smoke like a Metric Ton, I Raise my L's in the Air like the Devil's Son." R.I.P. Big L & Vito

06-04-2009, 10:05 PM	#5
Masterpiece The Mother ****in Man Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: New York Posts: 535 Repped: 1 Repped 24 Times in 23 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	^^^much appreciated man...good look on the feed...im definitely goin to change the hook

06-05-2009, 07:57 PM	#6
Masterpiece The Mother ****in Man Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: New York Posts: 535 Repped: 1 Repped 24 Times in 23 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	feed this mother fucker

06-05-2009, 09:11 PM	#8
RICH$LOCO Veteran Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: westcoast, CA Posts: 2,568 Repped: 671 Repped 546 Times in 134 Posts Neg Reps: 13 Neg Repped at 10 Times in 10 Posts	lyrics i like a bit of work on the flow would make it even better and the emotion too nice drop though stay up __________________ "no way u can miss it like a 20 foot target from a point blank distance"- rich loco

06-06-2009, 04:45 PM	#9
Masterpiece The Mother ****in Man Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: New York Posts: 535 Repped: 1 Repped 24 Times in 23 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	good look on the feed....uppin this shit

06-07-2009, 01:42 PM	#10
Masterpiece The Mother ****in Man Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: New York Posts: 535 Repped: 1 Repped 24 Times in 23 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	UPPIN dont sleep

06-09-2009, 10:45 AM	#11
Smoke1Life FUCK'EM ALL Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 1,438 Repped: 154 Repped 122 Times in 60 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 5 Posts	Shit ain't bad. Could use some better emotion though. The only problem with the flow is that you try to say too much in one breath. And the need some passion line, needs more passion.... Hook is pretty nice. I was impressed, could smooth it out just a little bit more. Verse 2 seems to be a little bit better. Still needs more of everything. I like the "yeah i fuckin speak it" line. had me laughin. not bad. at all. __________________

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